One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from AP Apgar
I like this poem- haiku 5/7/5 - good presentation- pretty pictures- flows very well- paints a perfect transitional picture- after the rain - the aroma of the wet ground swelling in the air- and the flowers bending as if to smell- excellent job!
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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I like this poem- haiku 5/7/5 - good presentation- pretty pictures- flows very well- paints a perfect transitional picture- after the rain - the aroma of the wet ground swelling in the air- and the flowers bending as if to smell- excellent job!
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you took the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." Atticus
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Beautifully written 5-7-5. Your illustration is a perfect fit for your words, making the read even more enjoyable. I read this after the contest closed but your win was well-deserved.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Beautifully written 5-7-5. Your illustration is a perfect fit for your words, making the read even more enjoyable. I read this after the contest closed but your win was well-deserved.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much for your review kind words.
Comment from Mia Twysted
After the cool rain
I had to read through the piece a time or two for I was confused and missing the meaning, but then suddenly I looked at the flower in the picture and understood the flower was smelling the earth after a rain. That is such a wonderful notion that plants n nature are more than they appear to be.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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After the cool rain
I had to read through the piece a time or two for I was confused and missing the meaning, but then suddenly I looked at the flower in the picture and understood the flower was smelling the earth after a rain. That is such a wonderful notion that plants n nature are more than they appear to be.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much. I'm happy you got the meaning of the haiku. I hate it when I can't understand a poem.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 writing contest. The words flow well and the meaning is easy to understand. Good luck!
Your photo compliments your poem perfectly.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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This is a wonderful entry for the 5-7-5 writing contest. The words flow well and the meaning is easy to understand. Good luck!
Your photo compliments your poem perfectly.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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You're very welcome!
Comment from jaded831
Your poem met the criteria, and your poem made me smile. Which is hard to do these days. Thank you for this delightful poem. The picture compliments your words, my only suggestion is to put more contrast between your font and background. Your poem is hard to read for us older folks.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Your poem met the criteria, and your poem made me smile. Which is hard to do these days. Thank you for this delightful poem. The picture compliments your words, my only suggestion is to put more contrast between your font and background. Your poem is hard to read for us older folks.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Very well done 5-7-5 prompt entry. Best of luck in the contest. Your descriptive words mirror the artwork very well. Nature is a wonderment in it's beauty. Best regards.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Very well done 5-7-5 prompt entry. Best of luck in the contest. Your descriptive words mirror the artwork very well. Nature is a wonderment in it's beauty. Best regards.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Patty Palmer
It is true that after the rain that the wet earth's smell is sweeter and stronger, like a newborn baby after their bath. The bluebells are so pretty as they bend to take a whiff!
Good luck with the contest~
Patty
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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It is true that after the rain that the wet earth's smell is sweeter and stronger, like a newborn baby after their bath. The bluebells are so pretty as they bend to take a whiff!
Good luck with the contest~
Patty
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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You're welcome~
Paiiy
Comment from ValKul
I really, really, like this poem and the photograph! How well you described it, so much so that I could smell the smells even though I'm indoors surrounded by scented candles! Good job!
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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I really, really, like this poem and the photograph! How well you described it, so much so that I could smell the smells even though I'm indoors surrounded by scented candles! Good job!
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the rain that brings a fresh smell from the ground and the blue bells bend down to smell the aroma from the wet ground coming up from the earth.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the rain that brings a fresh smell from the ground and the blue bells bend down to smell the aroma from the wet ground coming up from the earth.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you
Comment from Janice Canerdy
The air usually does have an alluring smell after a rain. You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables, also of rhyme, alliteration, and personification in your lovely poem.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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The air usually does have an alluring smell after a rain. You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables, also of rhyme, alliteration, and personification in your lovely poem.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you very much
