Waters Rising
A view from Michigan, May, two-thousand twenty15 total reviews
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Clockwise I enjoyed this poem and presentation of the rising water in each stanza until the final breath how appropriate for many recent events We seem to struggle to
Keep our heads above water at the moment
A good read rhymed well and good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Hi Clockwise I enjoyed this poem and presentation of the rising water in each stanza until the final breath how appropriate for many recent events We seem to struggle to
Keep our heads above water at the moment
A good read rhymed well and good luck in the contest Cheers Christine
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review!
Comment from Ogden
Your fantasy revenge must have felt good, but you must have more to get off your chest.
How about something like "Situation Still Wet, Chapter Two of 'Waters Rising'"?
More, please!
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Your fantasy revenge must have felt good, but you must have more to get off your chest.
How about something like "Situation Still Wet, Chapter Two of 'Waters Rising'"?
More, please!
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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A six! Thank you so very much! Maybe I'll take your advice on a follow-up. But I'd gladly leave it behind forever if it means turning off the turmoil in the world for a little while.
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Yes, if you can manage that, it would be better.
Comment from dragonpoet
The short lines make the stanzas look like long hourglasses that are measuring the time until the pandemic buries us in fear and death.
It is so sad how many are dying and how little we can do to stop it.
I thank and pray for the victims and those who take care of them
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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The short lines make the stanzas look like long hourglasses that are measuring the time until the pandemic buries us in fear and death.
It is so sad how many are dying and how little we can do to stop it.
I thank and pray for the victims and those who take care of them
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
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You are most kindly welcome, Clockwise.
dragonpoet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and summary of the past few weeks' events taking place and it seems it goes from bad to worse and there seems much more bad things will happen before things will go to normal again.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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A very well-written poem and summary of the past few weeks' events taking place and it seems it goes from bad to worse and there seems much more bad things will happen before things will go to normal again.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
Comment from Pantygynt
Tucked away here in UK of course the Wixom lake disaster never reached me -- until now that is. Considering you knew nothing of George Floyd's untimely death at the time of writing this is one of those amazing examples of synchronicity that makes this post so appropriate.
I loved the way this is presented and the steady pounding rhythm that carries all before it like the tidal wave that must have resulted from the dam's collapse.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Tucked away here in UK of course the Wixom lake disaster never reached me -- until now that is. Considering you knew nothing of George Floyd's untimely death at the time of writing this is one of those amazing examples of synchronicity that makes this post so appropriate.
I loved the way this is presented and the steady pounding rhythm that carries all before it like the tidal wave that must have resulted from the dam's collapse.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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A six from someone so invested and involved here at fanstory makes it all the sweeter. Thank you so much!
Comment from Patty Palmer
Interesting! As I read the words, I feel I can see this actually happening! As they say, what goes around comes around! Now someone's alone in water deep. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Interesting! As I read the words, I feel I can see this actually happening! As they say, what goes around comes around! Now someone's alone in water deep. Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A story of a disaster involving water here, I am not familiar with the story but you certainly nailed the affect it had on you here, a dam that broke and caused untold damage, a poignant well written poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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A story of a disaster involving water here, I am not familiar with the story but you certainly nailed the affect it had on you here, a dam that broke and caused untold damage, a poignant well written poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
Comment from royowen
A clever way of breaking up four x four tetrametric stanzas into Octainal stanzas, creative and thoughtful, removing the punctuation, and with dimeter lines. You lost none of the rhythm or flow, I've done similar things with ballad style poems. Beautifully written, excellent job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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A clever way of breaking up four x four tetrametric stanzas into Octainal stanzas, creative and thoughtful, removing the punctuation, and with dimeter lines. You lost none of the rhythm or flow, I've done similar things with ballad style poems. Beautifully written, excellent job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
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Bless you
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Waters Rising,takes the position of the person or people who may have warned that this dam failure was imminent. So much is lost and so much to fix. This year has been the the worst yet in a millennium of bad years.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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This poem, Waters Rising,takes the position of the person or people who may have warned that this dam failure was imminent. So much is lost and so much to fix. This year has been the the worst yet in a millennium of bad years.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Waters Rising
by Clockwise
Hello, my friend,
Wonderful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Poignant monorhyme poem about George Floyd. I wish I had a six star left. Awesome job.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Waters Rising
by Clockwise
Hello, my friend,
Wonderful entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Poignant monorhyme poem about George Floyd. I wish I had a six star left. Awesome job.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the kind review
