Rainy Nights
3/7/5 contest entry18 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
Rainy nights do tend to make me feel sentimental. And this piece captures those nostalgic notes with both the words and the artwork. I love the grey tones and the imagery of jumping in puddles. Who hasn't done that as a child? Should do well in the contest.
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Rainy nights do tend to make me feel sentimental. And this piece captures those nostalgic notes with both the words and the artwork. I love the grey tones and the imagery of jumping in puddles. Who hasn't done that as a child? Should do well in the contest.
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Thank you very much for your kind review.
Comment from zanya
So succinct in this short format 3-7-5 yet so much is conveyed through an excellent and rigorous choice of words and expression- a delightful read -thanks for sharing
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So succinct in this short format 3-7-5 yet so much is conveyed through an excellent and rigorous choice of words and expression- a delightful read -thanks for sharing
Comment Written 28-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your kind review.
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
Wow. It is really very good and beautiful. It's short and yet it covers everything!!!! Love it!! (And I love rain!!!!!).
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Wow. It is really very good and beautiful. It's short and yet it covers everything!!!! Love it!! (And I love rain!!!!!).
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Thank you very much for your kind review.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I like the contrast between the first and last line. The first being dark, and the last about the light joyfulness of being a child. I think that it works well to build a bigger image of the character looking out at night and the position they find themselves
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I like the contrast between the first and last line. The first being dark, and the last about the light joyfulness of being a child. I think that it works well to build a bigger image of the character looking out at night and the position they find themselves
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
Comment from Ogden
Excellent imagery and presentation! I think your poem is likely to do well in the polls.
(I must say I, personally, child or adult, never jumped in puddles in the rain.)
:)
Ogden (Don)
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Excellent imagery and presentation! I think your poem is likely to do well in the polls.
(I must say I, personally, child or adult, never jumped in puddles in the rain.)
:)
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 28-May-2020
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thank you, Don :)
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You're very welcome.
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
puts the poem all together. Thank you for the author's notes - the
history is always great to know. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem. Have a great weekend!
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
puts the poem all together. Thank you for the author's notes - the
history is always great to know. The artwork is perfect and compliments
this poem. Have a great weekend!
Comment Written 28-May-2020
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Thank you, Harmony :) Have a great weekend too!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Love the atmospheric artwork and the dark presentation.
For me, your poem relates to the way that small events hold the key to memories from long ago. It is raining as I write this. Can I use that as a magic carpet back to my own childhood? Yes!
Steve
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Love the atmospheric artwork and the dark presentation.
For me, your poem relates to the way that small events hold the key to memories from long ago. It is raining as I write this. Can I use that as a magic carpet back to my own childhood? Yes!
Steve
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Comment Written 28-May-2020
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Thank you, Steve, yes, you may take the magic carpet to your childhood...can I join you? :)
Comment from Alchera
Well written haiku/senryu and also the syllables counting is perfectly as required by the 3/7/5 writing prompt entry. I like it. Good luck for the contest.blessings!
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Well written haiku/senryu and also the syllables counting is perfectly as required by the 3/7/5 writing prompt entry. I like it. Good luck for the contest.blessings!
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Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Thank you very much, my friend. :)
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Always welcomed!
