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Looked At My Mirror

Confronting myself at the mirror.

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Comment from Liz O'Neill
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This is a very interesting perspective. This poem invites the reader to reflect upon who would be staring back at them. I would say for me it would be Quasimodo because I walk like him in the morning when I get up to wash my face and get my coffee before doing my bed yoga. It is easier to get off the bed than the floor. After I get up from yoga, I walk fine and Quasi fades into the bed til the next morning.

 Comment Written 29-May-2020

reply by the author on 30-May-2020
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Thanks for sharing your story. :)
reply by Liz O'Neill on 03-Jun-2020
    I want youy to know you inspired me to write a poem thank you...now you've a new challenge:

    Quasimodo

    May I call you Quasi
    We seem that close
    That I am entitled

    Of late
    your soul follows me more often

    At work
    you slipped into the chair
    left for me

    Unless
    I found the one
    you didn't like

    Then
    gratefully
    you were
    nowhere
    to be seen

    Now
    I walk like you
    In the morning
    sensing you
    and your pain

    Pushed
    listing
    to the right
    by you

    Slowly
    to wash my face
    Pour my coffee

    To return to my bed
    For yoga
    Where you disappear
    for the day

    Sunk
    in between the sheets

    Fading into the bed
    As I walk away
    Gingerly
    Spritely

    'til
    the next
    morning

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello my friend

Great entry for the Senryu Yourself contest. Good syllable count and connection between the lines. Nice flow. Good luck in the contest.

Seeing myself, 3

and saw the Joker in the mirror, 9

made fun of me.4

The text doesn't make sense at times...you can improve it...

Looking at myself, 5

I saw the Joker 5

Making fun of me.5



 Comment Written 29-May-2020

reply by the author on 29-May-2020
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Bill Pinder
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Great job with the senryu presenting a satirical poem about yourself. Looks like the Joker face from the Batman movie. Good luck in the contest. Bill

 Comment Written 29-May-2020

reply by the author on 29-May-2020
    Thank you! The Joker face is creepy I agree. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! I hope I win.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Some nice ambiguity here. Does this mean you see yourself as a comicbook villain? Or just that someone unexpected looks back at you from the mirror? Or are you a practical joker?

Does The Joker deserve capitals, or is that part of the ambiguity?

Well done.

Steve

 Comment Written 28-May-2020

reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    No, it is just a contest entry. Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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The joker making fun of me, nice personification:) transfer of personalities with the help of a mirror.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 28-May-2020

reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you! Thanks for the encouragement! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Mark D. R.
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I would be very scared if I saw the Joker as my mirror image (-; But your post has a nuanced viewpoint. You chose an excellent image to match your short verse for this poking yourself poem entry. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-May-2020

reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! I hope I win.
Comment from w.j.debi
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This is a fun commentary on what most of us find in the mirror. Yep, that old joker just keeps coming back to get us. Excellent presentation. Your choice of artwork is perfect for your verse.
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-May-2020

reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! I hope I win.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
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I loved this poem. It was funny and sarcastic. You relaly had fun with this writing prompt. I am glad that you shared this poem with us. It was an interesting writing prompt.

 Comment Written 28-May-2020

reply by the author on 28-May-2020
    Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!