Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
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Comment from January L'Angelle
I like the poem and the words are poignant. The idea about saving Mother Earth and what man is doing to her is the message that I got. The rhymes were great but something in the meter was a bit off for me. I had a hard time reading the fourth line on each stanza. I don't know if they were supposed to be long but they were longer and throwing the meter off for me. I still enjoyed the words that you chose and gave you a five. Best of everything. -January L.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I like the poem and the words are poignant. The idea about saving Mother Earth and what man is doing to her is the message that I got. The rhymes were great but something in the meter was a bit off for me. I had a hard time reading the fourth line on each stanza. I don't know if they were supposed to be long but they were longer and throwing the meter off for me. I still enjoyed the words that you chose and gave you a five. Best of everything. -January L.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank for Your Time to Read and Review this poem offering. This poem has a 3 line 8 syllable count then the 4th line has the 8th word rhyming with the last word in line 3 but 12 syllable line. Minimum of 3 paragraphs long stanzas.
Blessings to you and Thanks again.
Comment from roof35
You made me think just as I am sure you intended to do. Your presentation of your poem is full of style. It is a bit "dark" but well done.
Your picture is interesting and I am glad you explained the meaning.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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You made me think just as I am sure you intended to do. Your presentation of your poem is full of style. It is a bit "dark" but well done.
Your picture is interesting and I am glad you explained the meaning.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you and Sorry the picture's writing is sloppy, I have only the top finger portion of my writing hand. Blessings to you for your review and time.