Doctor Knight
cure for Coronella8 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Once Upon a Time... writing prompt.
This short story is cute and well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Once Upon a Time... writing prompt.
This short story is cute and well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-fifty-word story, Doctor Knight, tells an odd tale of how a virus gets from China to America. I'm not sure where the racist question existed, but still an interesting tale.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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This one-hundred-fifty-word story, Doctor Knight, tells an odd tale of how a virus gets from China to America. I'm not sure where the racist question existed, but still an interesting tale.
Comment Written 29-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review.
Comment from TheMissRed
Intriguing. I've not heard the term "coronella," and the story for the child is definitely interesting. I am wondering about the lack of traditional dialogue (quotation marks). It threw me off and distracted me. Using that format would not have added to the word count.
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Intriguing. I've not heard the term "coronella," and the story for the child is definitely interesting. I am wondering about the lack of traditional dialogue (quotation marks). It threw me off and distracted me. Using that format would not have added to the word count.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 28-May-2020
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Coronella is my own term for Covid and I am using the dialogue lines, because this is how we write in Eastern Europe. Thank you so much for reviewing, and I am so sorry for creating you a little bit of discomfort with my style.
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Oh, I had no idea! I've learned something new!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello
An interesting entry for the Once upon a time.... writing prompt contest.
A good childrens' story of about 150 words about a pandemic. The story is amusing and probably would capture the child's interest but with a sense of what a pandemic is.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Hello
An interesting entry for the Once upon a time.... writing prompt contest.
A good childrens' story of about 150 words about a pandemic. The story is amusing and probably would capture the child's interest but with a sense of what a pandemic is.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you so much, my dear friend for reading and reviewing.
Comment from oliver818
This is a very interesting take on the Coronavirus situation, I enjoyed reading it. I like the ah you dumb everything down for the kid. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This is a very interesting take on the Coronavirus situation, I enjoyed reading it. I like the ah you dumb everything down for the kid. Thanks for sharing this and have a really great day
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you so much for this encouraging review:) You are the best
Comment from Aiona
Heh! How is the lockdown affecting you up in Canada? I liked this story because it is so light-hearted.
A few typos:
1. "What's a Coronella is this a kind of yucky medicine?"
I think this is meant to be two sentences, right?
There should be a question mark between "Coronella" and "is."
Example:
"What's a Coronella? Is this a kind of yucky medicine?"
2. Horrified I looked at my child and sight.
I think you meant "sighed," right?
Example:
Horrified I looked at my child and sighed.
Thank you for a fun read!
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Heh! How is the lockdown affecting you up in Canada? I liked this story because it is so light-hearted.
A few typos:
1. "What's a Coronella is this a kind of yucky medicine?"
I think this is meant to be two sentences, right?
There should be a question mark between "Coronella" and "is."
Example:
"What's a Coronella? Is this a kind of yucky medicine?"
2. Horrified I looked at my child and sight.
I think you meant "sighed," right?
Example:
Horrified I looked at my child and sighed.
Thank you for a fun read!
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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To tell you the true, in Alberta, so far we are ok. My problem is that we can't travel anywhere outside Canada. Thank you for the awesome review and for the corrections.
Comment from Puzzle
well that's a very interesting way to explain everything to a child! lol. i like the dialogue between the child and the adult. i think it sounds pretty real. great job
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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well that's a very interesting way to explain everything to a child! lol. i like the dialogue between the child and the adult. i think it sounds pretty real. great job
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your awesome review.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This seems well-done in the sense of making a coherent way to tell a child where the virus that is in the news came from, without assigning blame to anything or anyone specific. Thank you for a nice share.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This seems well-done in the sense of making a coherent way to tell a child where the virus that is in the news came from, without assigning blame to anything or anyone specific. Thank you for a nice share.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you
