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Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "St. Louis Chapter 27 part 3"Can McKenzie solve Megan Nelson?s murder?
18 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
This is well written. I was curious about the four men all slipping past the police, and the explosion diversion. Do you think that is well used troupe?
It is up to you of course. Based on the fighting scene, I'm guessing you want to keep the graphic violence to a minimum.
Well done.
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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This is well written. I was curious about the four men all slipping past the police, and the explosion diversion. Do you think that is well used troupe?
It is up to you of course. Based on the fighting scene, I'm guessing you want to keep the graphic violence to a minimum.
Well done.
Comment Written 28-May-2020
reply by the author on 29-May-2020
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Yes, I am not into violence and the audience I am writing for does not do violence. Thank you for understanding. I appreciate the kind review. I am sorry you read it after the promotion had ended.
Comment from Opeyemi Diamond
A very lovely chapter of the story... I enjoyed every bit of it. Can't wait for the next chapter, it's really a suspense. Thank you so much for taking your time to write auch a great piece. Well done
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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A very lovely chapter of the story... I enjoyed every bit of it. Can't wait for the next chapter, it's really a suspense. Thank you so much for taking your time to write auch a great piece. Well done
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from estory
I liked how the opening scene explodes this into action, and we get all that great realistic dialogue that is your trademark to follow; the discussion over the escape of the four hooded men in the white van. We feel the frenzied rush to intercept them in the police transcripts, and the uncertainty hanging in the air if they will get away is there too. Nicely orchestrated. I think the suspense level is really good and you have us hooked. Awaiting your next chapter...estory
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I liked how the opening scene explodes this into action, and we get all that great realistic dialogue that is your trademark to follow; the discussion over the escape of the four hooded men in the white van. We feel the frenzied rush to intercept them in the police transcripts, and the uncertainty hanging in the air if they will get away is there too. Nicely orchestrated. I think the suspense level is really good and you have us hooked. Awaiting your next chapter...estory
Comment Written 27-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Bill Pinder
I like your idea to add a chapter about being kidnapped. It raises the intensity of the story and keeps the reader's interest. Looking forward to the next chapter. If you chose to, you could slow it down and write a whole chapter based on the fight when they first enter the house before she's kidnapped. Bill
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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I like your idea to add a chapter about being kidnapped. It raises the intensity of the story and keeps the reader's interest. Looking forward to the next chapter. If you chose to, you could slow it down and write a whole chapter based on the fight when they first enter the house before she's kidnapped. Bill
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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I will think about it. Thank you for the suggestion and the review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Poor Mac treated like a rag doll, always in the fire , kidnapped, hurt, put in the hospital. I hope they will find her pretty fast. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Poor Mac treated like a rag doll, always in the fire , kidnapped, hurt, put in the hospital. I hope they will find her pretty fast. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Wow! This clips along. The abduction was shocking as you write there were policemen in her backyard! A lot is going on, but I followed the action and wanted to read more. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. No cons.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Wow! This clips along. The abduction was shocking as you write there were policemen in her backyard! A lot is going on, but I followed the action and wanted to read more. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. No cons.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I wish this was a longer chapter, it was so intense and vividly written. Poor Logan is going to be blaming himself for not being there. I'm glad Edger is going to be okay, I would have been most upset if he'd died. Now what will be happening to Mac? They'll have all the police, helicopters, everything out after those thugs. Well done, Barbara, excellent chapter. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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I wish this was a longer chapter, it was so intense and vividly written. Poor Logan is going to be blaming himself for not being there. I'm glad Edger is going to be okay, I would have been most upset if he'd died. Now what will be happening to Mac? They'll have all the police, helicopters, everything out after those thugs. Well done, Barbara, excellent chapter. :) Sandra
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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The next chapter is fairly long and with a lot of information and I didn't want to make it even longer. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is an intense scene. Your latest posts make me wish I didn't have to wait long to learn more. I like your characters and hate to see them get hurt because they seem very real. Nicely written chapter.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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This is an intense scene. Your latest posts make me wish I didn't have to wait long to learn more. I like your characters and hate to see them get hurt because they seem very real. Nicely written chapter.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ben Colder
Wow! Talking about drama. You sent me in circles resting with hope toward the entire scene. Good one. One of your best. That Chopper will spot them. Keep it rolling you broke the ice here.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Wow! Talking about drama. You sent me in circles resting with hope toward the entire scene. Good one. One of your best. That Chopper will spot them. Keep it rolling you broke the ice here.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Why a cliffhanger right there? Ha ha This so exciting! Everything that is happening is so real, the characters' conversations are natural and flowing. Well done!
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Why a cliffhanger right there? Ha ha This so exciting! Everything that is happening is so real, the characters' conversations are natural and flowing. Well done!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You write so well. It's very enjoyable.
