Broken Resonance
A 5-7-5 contest entry13 total reviews
Comment from Lucy de Welles
This one says so much. Just the picture is worth a thousand words. Can feel a strong emotional pull from the text. Colors match the pain of the atmosphere of this one.
Well done!
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This one says so much. Just the picture is worth a thousand words. Can feel a strong emotional pull from the text. Colors match the pain of the atmosphere of this one.
Well done!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thank you, Lucy! ;) Yvette
Comment from Margaret Bednar
What we don't say can be as damaging as what we do say. Very fine sentiment in 17 syllables. It isn't easy to do. You met the rules for the 5-7-5. Nicely penned. No cons.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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What we don't say can be as damaging as what we do say. Very fine sentiment in 17 syllables. It isn't easy to do. You met the rules for the 5-7-5. Nicely penned. No cons.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Broken Resonance, has the right set up and seems to state that true friends will wait and listen for what is wrong while others will simply tell you what's wrong with you.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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This 5-7-5, Broken Resonance, has the right set up and seems to state that true friends will wait and listen for what is wrong while others will simply tell you what's wrong with you.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This was well done. You got a lot of feeling into a small space. Really well done with this poem. I enjoyed reading it, and your artwork is also nice.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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This was well done. You got a lot of feeling into a small space. Really well done with this poem. I enjoyed reading it, and your artwork is also nice.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write here and I felt the grief in your words as words can often hurt others and can break hearts at times, a clever and sincere write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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A poignant write here and I felt the grief in your words as words can often hurt others and can break hearts at times, a clever and sincere write, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Lovely entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. Beautiful presentation. Good connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Hello my friend
Lovely entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. Beautiful presentation. Good connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Oh, true words! A broken heart speaks loudly without making a single sound. Hence, the broken heart speaks louder than murmured fake words. Good job!
Patty
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Oh, true words! A broken heart speaks loudly without making a single sound. Hence, the broken heart speaks louder than murmured fake words. Good job!
Patty
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from rama devi
Sad and laced with longing in between the lines. Expressive. Fine work. Good presentation. Good phonics in phrasing with the assonance of I, alliteraiton of H and M and also consonance of R.
My only suggestion is to consider replacing the word THE with a more descriptive word, to get maximum mileage in meaning from that syllable. It's fine to keep THE is you prefer.
Just a thought! This is a fine entry. Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Sad and laced with longing in between the lines. Expressive. Fine work. Good presentation. Good phonics in phrasing with the assonance of I, alliteraiton of H and M and also consonance of R.
My only suggestion is to consider replacing the word THE with a more descriptive word, to get maximum mileage in meaning from that syllable. It's fine to keep THE is you prefer.
Just a thought! This is a fine entry. Good luck!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you for your suggestion. I've given it a go, but I'm not sure I'll leave it... 8-) Thank you so much!!
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Sure! Happy to help. :)
Comment from Susan X Smith
The message conveyed by this poem is true to life, if not original with this piece. Your words are well chosen and I love the picture that complements the words. Thanks for sharing..
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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The message conveyed by this poem is true to life, if not original with this piece. Your words are well chosen and I love the picture that complements the words. Thanks for sharing..
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review.
Comment from Kathleen S.
Your poem is quite beautiful. I love the picture you've chosen for it as well. I believe there is always two sides to the story, so although the heart hears silence it may not always be silent... Still the end result is the same isn't it? (well sometimes)
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Your poem is quite beautiful. I love the picture you've chosen for it as well. I believe there is always two sides to the story, so although the heart hears silence it may not always be silent... Still the end result is the same isn't it? (well sometimes)
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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You are quite right, Kathleen, the result is certainly the same. Thank you, thank you, for this wonderful review and such bright shiny stars! I am so glad this touched you! May you have a great weekend out there!
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You are welcome. May you have a great weekend too.
