Voted For Prom Queen Vampire
My survival vote.8 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an interesting entry for the I Voted contest.
I noticed one typo you might want to fix:
"I voted for Cara as the porm queen vampire of Stateside High School." (prom queen)
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
This is an interesting entry for the I Voted contest.
I noticed one typo you might want to fix:
"I voted for Cara as the porm queen vampire of Stateside High School." (prom queen)
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you! I will fix the mistake. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
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You're quite welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Excellent entry for the I voted writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. I like your take on the prompt.
I love horror and comedy so I really like your entry... it's funny.
Well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
Hello my friend
Excellent entry for the I voted writing prompt contest. You followed the rules of the contest well. I like your take on the prompt.
I love horror and comedy so I really like your entry... it's funny.
Well done.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from D.S. Knight
1. A fun twist on the whole "I voted" requirement
2. Did you deliberately twist the spelling of "prom" in the first sentence to "porm" to imply this girl was not such a nice girl? Or, is it simply a misspelling?
3. Either the punctuation is incorrect deliberately leading to some ambiguity or your revision process needs strengthening
4. Fanstory has some editing "lessons" that may be useful for you
5. Thanks for an interesting read
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
1. A fun twist on the whole "I voted" requirement
2. Did you deliberately twist the spelling of "prom" in the first sentence to "porm" to imply this girl was not such a nice girl? Or, is it simply a misspelling?
3. Either the punctuation is incorrect deliberately leading to some ambiguity or your revision process needs strengthening
4. Fanstory has some editing "lessons" that may be useful for you
5. Thanks for an interesting read
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you! I have fixed the mistake. You can check it again. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
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It is a misspelling. We are here to learn. Thank you!
Comment from Susan X Smith
This was an interesting take on the writing prompt, a novel idea, but I really didn't understand the last line. Otherwise it was fun to read and a cute picture.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
This was an interesting take on the writing prompt, a novel idea, but I really didn't understand the last line. Otherwise it was fun to read and a cute picture.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
WoW, a thriller offering for the contest and the show must go on, vote or not:)
I finished the whole event, and my vote I tell you was full of survival. I gutted out the voting booth with it.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
WoW, a thriller offering for the contest and the show must go on, vote or not:)
I finished the whole event, and my vote I tell you was full of survival. I gutted out the voting booth with it.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
In paragraph one porm queen should be prom queen.
Also in the same paragraph if one is prom queen the other should be prom king. No need to capitalize the word king.
The last line of paragraph four seems to missing an "a" between "of" and "concern".
In that same line "queen" should be "queen's"
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that provides assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
In paragraph one porm queen should be prom queen.
Also in the same paragraph if one is prom queen the other should be prom king. No need to capitalize the word king.
The last line of paragraph four seems to missing an "a" between "of" and "concern".
In that same line "queen" should be "queen's"
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that provides assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from R.Peyregne
I am slightly confused by this writing. There are some misspelled words; additionally, I am not really sure what the foundation of your story is? You voted a Vampire into the Prom Queen spot, Ok, and... I guess I would like to have a little bit more? Your last sentence is the most confusing, what did you "gut out the voting booth"? I appreciate that you are putting yourself out there and writing, and I love your zest for the Supernatural, I would love to see you expand upon the story. Thank you for your writing.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
I am slightly confused by this writing. There are some misspelled words; additionally, I am not really sure what the foundation of your story is? You voted a Vampire into the Prom Queen spot, Ok, and... I guess I would like to have a little bit more? Your last sentence is the most confusing, what did you "gut out the voting booth"? I appreciate that you are putting yourself out there and writing, and I love your zest for the Supernatural, I would love to see you expand upon the story. Thank you for your writing.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Diana Kane
Oh I thought this was so much fun. It was well written. I just wish that could've got more descriptions of how his fear manifested. Other than that I thought it was fun and unexpected. good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
Oh I thought this was so much fun. It was well written. I just wish that could've got more descriptions of how his fear manifested. Other than that I thought it was fun and unexpected. good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!