What's a Meta-phor?
A bit of fun with metaphors19 total reviews
Comment from Gert sherwood
I like how you use a methapor and how you say
'life is a gamble.' And an excellent Nanni contest entry using the 25 syllables with meaningful words.
Best to you in the contest.
Gert
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I like how you use a methapor and how you say
'life is a gamble.' And an excellent Nanni contest entry using the 25 syllables with meaningful words.
Best to you in the contest.
Gert
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Gert
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Hello mysterious writer
You are welcome.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Naani about using metaphors to spice up a story that can make it more interesting to the reader to speculate what the writer means by his word play in his writings.
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A very well-written Naani about using metaphors to spice up a story that can make it more interesting to the reader to speculate what the writer means by his word play in his writings.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from sunnilicious
You're hilarious. You have a great sense of humor. Good rhyming with gamble-preamble and dance-chance. Good alliteration with gamble-game. Good play on metaphors with one example. Clever. I enjoyed reading your poem. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
I would edit the last period to an exclaimation mark for sarcasm. Take it or leave it.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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You're hilarious. You have a great sense of humor. Good rhyming with gamble-preamble and dance-chance. Good alliteration with gamble-game. Good play on metaphors with one example. Clever. I enjoyed reading your poem. Nice work. Good luck in the contest :)
I would edit the last period to an exclaimation mark for sarcasm. Take it or leave it.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you for your thoughts.
Comment from zanya
Yes I like the proposition posed- and especially the final line - it's lighthearted and reflective all at the same time - and that's an achievement-thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Yes I like the proposition posed- and especially the final line - it's lighthearted and reflective all at the same time - and that's an achievement-thanks for sharing
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you for an insightful review.
Comment from RodG
Is life a gamble ALWAYS? What risks are you urging the reader to take? And what is it a "preamble" to? Take a bit more time to clarify your message. Is this the kind of advice a child should listen to?
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Is life a gamble ALWAYS? What risks are you urging the reader to take? And what is it a "preamble" to? Take a bit more time to clarify your message. Is this the kind of advice a child should listen to?
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Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thanks for your thoughts.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! ;) Love that awesome metaphor for belief in eternity or even the meaning of life itself, yeah?! ;) Great job! Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
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LOL!! ;) Love that awesome metaphor for belief in eternity or even the meaning of life itself, yeah?! ;) Great job! Thanx so much for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from LisaMay
You have been very skilful in combining rhyming with your observation on life's possibilities in an admirable economy of well-chosen words. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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You have been very skilful in combining rhyming with your observation on life's possibilities in an admirable economy of well-chosen words. Well done.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I like the way you use your metaphors here to build up the bigger picture and message. The question I think works well, to break up the metaphors and draws in the reader to think about it themselves before delivering the final message.
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I like the way you use your metaphors here to build up the bigger picture and message. The question I think works well, to break up the metaphors and draws in the reader to think about it themselves before delivering the final message.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
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Thank you so much.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I loved the poem, but I don't know about the title because the poem isn't about metaphors. It instead is all metaphors, and that's something I love. Keep up your creative writing for sure.
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I loved the poem, but I don't know about the title because the poem isn't about metaphors. It instead is all metaphors, and that's something I love. Keep up your creative writing for sure.
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Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thanks so much.
