Always a Tomorrow
A 5-7-5 contest offering18 total reviews
Comment from jaded831
Very profound, it's all about forgiveness of self. If we can forgive ourselves we can move forward. It is easy to see why you won. I read it over more than once to get the meaning. I hope I'm right.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Very profound, it's all about forgiveness of self. If we can forgive ourselves we can move forward. It is easy to see why you won. I read it over more than once to get the meaning. I hope I'm right.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful and insightful review! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from suep
When one thing ends there is often something better ahead. I really enjoyed your 5-7-5 and the use of road/trail, and the 'b' alliteration in the middle. The artwork is awesome and a great complement for your work! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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When one thing ends there is often something better ahead. I really enjoyed your 5-7-5 and the use of road/trail, and the 'b' alliteration in the middle. The artwork is awesome and a great complement for your work! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Patty Palmer
I like your poem. It's true that at the end of the road it's time to take a good look at yourself and figure which road you'll choose to take your life down. It will be up to you to find the right trail for yourself.
Good luck with the contest!
Patty
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I like your poem. It's true that at the end of the road it's time to take a good look at yourself and figure which road you'll choose to take your life down. It will be up to you to find the right trail for yourself.
Good luck with the contest!
Patty
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you!!
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from Margaret Bednar
A very clever 5-7-5 and the image certainly inspires as well. I know you had to meet the requirements and have to leave it but I'd prefer the "of" wrapped to the third line. I can find no fault with this poem.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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A very clever 5-7-5 and the image certainly inspires as well. I know you had to meet the requirements and have to leave it but I'd prefer the "of" wrapped to the third line. I can find no fault with this poem.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
What a more poetic way to say some of the cliche's. The one when one door shuts, another one opens. Or I like the one about every new beginning has an ending or visa versa. Your message appeals to me and I am sure other readers. I like the idea of doing what I've dreamed of doing. It is no one else's dream. It is mine & I will shape it best for the way that will it will do me best. There is no need for discouragement. We can redefine & reshape, forge on. Well written. I am voting for this one.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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What a more poetic way to say some of the cliche's. The one when one door shuts, another one opens. Or I like the one about every new beginning has an ending or visa versa. Your message appeals to me and I am sure other readers. I like the idea of doing what I've dreamed of doing. It is no one else's dream. It is mine & I will shape it best for the way that will it will do me best. There is no need for discouragement. We can redefine & reshape, forge on. Well written. I am voting for this one.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you for this awesome review, Liz - and you got out of it exactly what I was hoping to convey... ALWAYS a tomorrow, even if we have to make it so! 8-)
Comment from dragonpoet
This is good 5-7-5 poem which remends all ends can become new beginnings on another path.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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This is good 5-7-5 poem which remends all ends can become new beginnings on another path.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you!!
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You're welcome.
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Comment from LisaMay
I don't know whether you chose the picture first or found it to accompany your poem, but the combined presentation is visually and verbally uplifting. You may well have a winner with this beautifully crafted poem about forging your own path in life towards a unique identity.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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I don't know whether you chose the picture first or found it to accompany your poem, but the combined presentation is visually and verbally uplifting. You may well have a winner with this beautifully crafted poem about forging your own path in life towards a unique identity.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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The picture was the result of nearly half an hour of searching! Had this vision in my 'head' of what I wanted to accompany my poem, and nothing was matching it - ugh. And then, this suddenly appeared... it was a definite 'yes'!!! Thank you so much for your review and for the bright array of stars! I am truly honored... Take care out there!
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It was meant to be. Serendipity combined with excellence=success.
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Wow. Your confidence is definitely appreciated - thank you!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about reaching the end of the road, depends on our perception of life, it may the beginning of new things never seen before.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about reaching the end of the road, depends on our perception of life, it may the beginning of new things never seen before.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review, Sandra!!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I really liked this, and it was also more profound than you would think possible for such a small poem. This was really great. Nicely done, and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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I really liked this, and it was also more profound than you would think possible for such a small poem. This was really great. Nicely done, and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this inspirational piece. The metaphor are well-chosen and timely. Graduates
are seeing the end of one road, the beginning of another.
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this inspirational piece. The metaphor are well-chosen and timely. Graduates
are seeing the end of one road, the beginning of another.
Comment Written 19-May-2020
reply by the author on 19-May-2020
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Many thanks for your review!
