Aaron's Dragons
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Aaron Makes a Decision"An aging knight finds a clutch of dragon eggs
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Comment from lyenochka
I like how the dragons got involved in trying to tame the spoiled princess. That was a cute bedroom scene. Hooray for Pink and Black! And Aaron is very rational and compassionate at the same time. I hope they all can get to a place that will be safe. Will the princess join them and learn how to think of others in the process?
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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I like how the dragons got involved in trying to tame the spoiled princess. That was a cute bedroom scene. Hooray for Pink and Black! And Aaron is very rational and compassionate at the same time. I hope they all can get to a place that will be safe. Will the princess join them and learn how to think of others in the process?
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2021
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Thanks. I see the princess maturing a bit in the next while. Her childish ways don't serve her any more. I think I'll be able to get back to it shortly and come up with some new chapters.
Comment from Sylvia Page
The terror on the girl's face would have told Pink everything, had she been a little better at reading human expression. Instead, the dragon glared at her, waiting for a reply." (remove closing speech mark (") after reply.
Aaron was kept busy the (entire ) day, meeting with traders... Suggest entire day instead of the repetitive rest of the day.
I like your story, it is full of imagery and mischief the dragons are fond of making.
Best wishes
Sylvia
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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The terror on the girl's face would have told Pink everything, had she been a little better at reading human expression. Instead, the dragon glared at her, waiting for a reply." (remove closing speech mark (") after reply.
Aaron was kept busy the
I like your story, it is full of imagery and mischief the dragons are fond of making.
Best wishes
Sylvia
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thanks for the great review and for catching that spag. I'll get it fixed up.
Comment from JudyE
Hopefully the dragons will help sort out the princess.
I picked up a few points. Please ignore any that you don't agree with.
"I dare because someone has to. I know you've lost your father, and your life has changed. I'm sorry for that, but if you continue to carry on like you do, you're going to end up dead. - speech marks needed after 'dead'
"You're the fool! Nobody would dare. Don't forget who I am! - speech marks needed after 'am'
Green appeared, flying around the room squawking loudly. - maybe comma after 'room'?
The terror on the girl's face would have told Pink everything, had she been a little better at reading human expression. Instead, the dragon glared at her, waiting for a reply." - delete speech marks at end
She carried it to the kitchens and returned to her bed, where she stayed for the rest of the day.
Aaron was kept busy the rest of the day, - you've used 'rest of the day' twice in close proximity. Maybe one could be changed.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Hopefully the dragons will help sort out the princess.
I picked up a few points. Please ignore any that you don't agree with.
"I dare because someone has to. I know you've lost your father, and your life has changed. I'm sorry for that, but if you continue to carry on like you do, you're going to end up dead. - speech marks needed after 'dead'
"You're the fool! Nobody would dare. Don't forget who I am! - speech marks needed after 'am'
Green appeared, flying around the room squawking loudly. - maybe comma after 'room'?
The terror on the girl's face would have told Pink everything, had she been a little better at reading human expression. Instead, the dragon glared at her, waiting for a reply." - delete speech marks at end
She carried it to the kitchens and returned to her bed, where she stayed for the rest of the day.
Aaron was kept busy the rest of the day, - you've used 'rest of the day' twice in close proximity. Maybe one could be changed.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Best wishes
Judy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thanks for catching that. I'll fix it up right away. Glad you liked my story.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Yup dragon and humans not quite the harmony, but these are mystical times and everything is possible:"
"The thing is, they're dragons. They're feisty. I'm not sure they can conform to human rules. There are some people who don't want them here, and I'm afraid it's only a matter of time before they have to defend themselves. They can and will, and then I'll be in a real bind."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Yup dragon and humans not quite the harmony, but these are mystical times and everything is possible:"
"The thing is, they're dragons. They're feisty. I'm not sure they can conform to human rules. There are some people who don't want them here, and I'm afraid it's only a matter of time before they have to defend themselves. They can and will, and then I'll be in a real bind."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed my story. The dragons are friendly enough, but they're not meant to live in such close proximity to so many people.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Cindy, this is a brilliant chapter and it's very well written. A lot of things are going on, but I liked how the princess was told off, and called a spoiled prat, even. Well done. All best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Hi Cindy, this is a brilliant chapter and it's very well written. A lot of things are going on, but I liked how the princess was told off, and called a spoiled prat, even. Well done. All best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. The part about the princess was a fun write, where Aaron realized he couldn't keep the dragons in the palace was a little harder.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job, Cindy, with this action-filled chapter. I enjoyed reading it. I like the way the dragons interacted with all the various people. I really liked it when Aaron called the princess a spoiled brat. I'm not sure of the fact of sending the dragons and Duane to the secluded cabin. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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You did a good job, Cindy, with this action-filled chapter. I enjoyed reading it. I like the way the dragons interacted with all the various people. I really liked it when Aaron called the princess a spoiled brat. I'm not sure of the fact of sending the dragons and Duane to the secluded cabin. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks. Aaron knows keeping the dragons in the palace is going to end badly. They're not happy and there are people who don't want them there. The princess's reality check was a fun write. I haven't decided yet what she's going to do with it.
Comment from damommy
I can't you how thrilled I was to see those darling dragons back, and they're talking! I hate that Aaron has to send them away. They did a good job with the princess, making her realize she should behave better. I hope there's more stories to come.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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I can't you how thrilled I was to see those darling dragons back, and they're talking! I hate that Aaron has to send them away. They did a good job with the princess, making her realize she should behave better. I hope there's more stories to come.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks. I finally found some time to finish this chapter. We'll see what the princess does with her reality check, and Aaron won't lose his dragons entirely. He realizes that neither they nor Duane are suited for palace life. With Covid happening I'm crazy busy. I have to take care of the seniors, and some staff quit in fear, and some left because they couldn't get child care. Hopefully things will get back to normal soon and I can finish my book. Thanks again for the six!
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How good of you to do that work.
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm glad the princess got what she deserved, put in her place. Maybe now she won't make things so difficult for Aaron. I hate to see the dragons go, but he's right it probably is for the best. I'm sure they will be a lot happier, not being so confined, having to adhere to such strict rules. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting, believable start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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I'm glad the princess got what she deserved, put in her place. Maybe now she won't make things so difficult for Aaron. I hate to see the dragons go, but he's right it probably is for the best. I'm sure they will be a lot happier, not being so confined, having to adhere to such strict rules. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting, believable start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks. I'm so glad you liked this chapter. Somebody had to give this girl a reality check before she got herself killed. It was hard to write the part where Aaron had to let the dragons go, but he couldn't keep them with him forever.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
A decision has to be taken, and Aaron takes a decision, I like the orderly progressive taletelling and good plot development, brief but to the point and contributory dialogues; resolved and intended ending; well said; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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A decision has to be taken, and Aaron takes a decision, I like the orderly progressive taletelling and good plot development, brief but to the point and contributory dialogues; resolved and intended ending; well said; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Comment from tfawcus
It's great to dip into this fascinating tale again. Love your characterisation of the dragons. I think this is the first time I've met the princess. She sounds like a young lady who needs taking down a peg or two - and the dragons don't seem to be holding back on that score. Interesting developments and always something glowering over the horizon to keep your readers turning the pages.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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It's great to dip into this fascinating tale again. Love your characterisation of the dragons. I think this is the first time I've met the princess. She sounds like a young lady who needs taking down a peg or two - and the dragons don't seem to be holding back on that score. Interesting developments and always something glowering over the horizon to keep your readers turning the pages.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thanks Tony. I think Aaron and the dragons have given her a reality check. Will it work as intended? We'll see. Thanks again for an awesome review and all the wonderful stars.
