Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Had never heard of the Emerald Tablets before - a cool choice for your focus! ;) ;) For an acrostic, however, you should align your text in a vertical alignment on the left... I would suggest 'bold' and, perhaps, 'one size larger' on your first letter of each line to make the 'acrostic' much more obvious to the reader. ;) :) Liked the monorhyme of the first stanza there!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Remnantsof a legends fade --> Remnants of legends fade
his reviews outcome --> his review's outcome
Philosopher's, paper's of Sir --> philosophers, papers of Sir
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Had never heard of the Emerald Tablets before - a cool choice for your focus! ;) ;) For an acrostic, however, you should align your text in a vertical alignment on the left... I would suggest 'bold' and, perhaps, 'one size larger' on your first letter of each line to make the 'acrostic' much more obvious to the reader. ;) :) Liked the monorhyme of the first stanza there!! ;) :) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Remnantsof a legends fade --> Remnants of legends fade
his reviews outcome --> his review's outcome
Philosopher's, paper's of Sir --> philosophers, papers of Sir
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Advice, I definitely Appreciate it, be making the corrections shortly.
Blessings.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I liked this poem for its clever subject matter, but I did notice a few errors in it. I would be willing to help. The second line is missing a space, and it also doesn't make sense. Try maybe.
remnants of a great legend's fade
It needs the apostrophe.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I liked this poem for its clever subject matter, but I did notice a few errors in it. I would be willing to help. The second line is missing a space, and it also doesn't make sense. Try maybe.
remnants of a great legend's fade
It needs the apostrophe.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for the Review and Advice, I'll be making corrections shortly. Blessings to you for your Help.
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Always happy to.