Of Hearts and Heartaches
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "My Heartaches"Poems about falling in or out of love.
4 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, My Heartaches, is presented in a 5-7-5 formatting and admits that pain has been caused and that it has cut both ways.
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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This senryu, My Heartaches, is presented in a 5-7-5 formatting and admits that pain has been caused and that it has cut both ways.
Comment Written 18-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-May-2020
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review and comment on my poem. Much appreciated.
Comment from R. Hiland
The short forms are so much harder than they seem. I like the rhyme. No, it's not necessary but here it focuses attention on the heartache, which is the point, so --good job!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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The short forms are so much harder than they seem. I like the rhyme. No, it's not necessary but here it focuses attention on the heartache, which is the point, so --good job!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review. Really appreciate your comments.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
This meets the 5-7-5 syllable count and it sticks with the human condition. It is either to spark a laugh, a knowing moment, or an ironic twist. I prefer a laugh or irony, but your choice does offer us a bit of rhyme (which isn't required) but I think lends it a nice touch.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This meets the 5-7-5 syllable count and it sticks with the human condition. It is either to spark a laugh, a knowing moment, or an ironic twist. I prefer a laugh or irony, but your choice does offer us a bit of rhyme (which isn't required) but I think lends it a nice touch.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your kind comments. Appreciate you taking the time to review.
Comment from AJ McCall
Everyone should write a poem like this to make sure they tell those who they hurt how they're sorry and if they can be forgiven. I think 'my' should've been capitalized. The picture is very interesting. Great poem!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Everyone should write a poem like this to make sure they tell those who they hurt how they're sorry and if they can be forgiven. I think 'my' should've been capitalized. The picture is very interesting. Great poem!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you for your review and comments. Appreciate you taking the time to read.
