True Treasure
20 line poem18 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Well done Susan, a very interesting form indeed, the first two fives are together, but then that doesn't matter because they are still rhymed. Beautifully written with a classic style and, sweetly arranged and and an excellent presentation, articulate and language rich, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Well done Susan, a very interesting form indeed, the first two fives are together, but then that doesn't matter because they are still rhymed. Beautifully written with a classic style and, sweetly arranged and and an excellent presentation, articulate and language rich, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Hey Roy, thank you so much for reading and for the review!!
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Bless you
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
True treasure is love only selfless heart has the worth money cannot buy when greater joy exists beyond the person; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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True treasure is love only selfless heart has the worth money cannot buy when greater joy exists beyond the person; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. Good luck. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you for reading and for the review!! Much appreciated. :-)
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Once again I am SO sorry not having more six stars to give away. This poem is extraordinarily beautiful. The form was until now unknown to me. When read aloud I can hear the lovely musicality in it. Chardelle...I must remember this. As a 20-line poem for the contest, it surely is a winner.
I am happy to have found this poem. Very well done.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Once again I am SO sorry not having more six stars to give away. This poem is extraordinarily beautiful. The form was until now unknown to me. When read aloud I can hear the lovely musicality in it. Chardelle...I must remember this. As a 20-line poem for the contest, it surely is a winner.
I am happy to have found this poem. Very well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I am just pleased you like this poem! Thank you for taking the time to read and review!
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Susan, you are most welcome
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I love the last stanza, it stands out as conclusion of the entire poem -
Still, things of this earth yield definite worth ...
no greater joy exists beyond you!
For money can't buy
(no longer care why),
when selfless hearts remain ~ within view.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I love the last stanza, it stands out as conclusion of the entire poem -
Still, things of this earth yield definite worth ...
no greater joy exists beyond you!
For money can't buy
(no longer care why),
when selfless hearts remain ~ within view.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Aw Thanks for reading and for the review!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This was very well written. I love the gemstone metaphor. Gemstone is one word. Not sure if you wanted it to be two. Either way, this was a really nice poem that I enjoyed reading a great deal.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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This was very well written. I love the gemstone metaphor. Gemstone is one word. Not sure if you wanted it to be two. Either way, this was a really nice poem that I enjoyed reading a great deal.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Hmmm I do have it as one word...do you see it differently? Thank you so much for the review!
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Oh, no. I must have just seen it wrong. Sorry. Excellent poem anyway.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, how lovely and almost 'dreamy' in its romantic story-telling in rhyme - that pen of yours has certainly not lost its touch, my lady! ;) :) Thank you for sharing that smile and 'warm fuzzy' for the day! ;)
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Oh, how lovely and almost 'dreamy' in its romantic story-telling in rhyme - that pen of yours has certainly not lost its touch, my lady! ;) :) Thank you for sharing that smile and 'warm fuzzy' for the day! ;)
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Awww I'm smiling over here! Thanks for reading and for this awesome review!
Comment from Jacob David Collins
It's true, a person may have all the money in the world, but it won't make them anymore happier. For me the things that bring happiness are being around loved ones and friends. This is a really beautiful piece of writing that I thought was very well written.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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It's true, a person may have all the money in the world, but it won't make them anymore happier. For me the things that bring happiness are being around loved ones and friends. This is a really beautiful piece of writing that I thought was very well written.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you kindly for reading, reviewing and for 6 shiny stars! Much appreciated :-)
Comment from country ranch writer
All the money in the world won't bring tou happiness if you have no one to share it with you go down a lonely street as empty as it can be.be careful what you wish for.
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reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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All the money in the world won't bring tou happiness if you have no one to share it with you go down a lonely street as empty as it can be.be careful what you wish for.
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Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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yep, thanks for reading!! :-)
