Satan Finally Wins
Horror story17 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
I don't feel a part of the horror as much as I would if it was more first person perhaps. It's like it's being narrated - of course, the scene is of horror and the devil and he'll is always scary so you have a good start.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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I don't feel a part of the horror as much as I would if it was more first person perhaps. It's like it's being narrated - of course, the scene is of horror and the devil and he'll is always scary so you have a good start.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads up. The contest announcement says that the story must be based on 1 of the following themes:
The stranger
shadow on the landing
sharp fangs
the cat
horror of the unknown
The story doesn't seem to be based on 1 of the themes. Good luck.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I wanted to give you a heads up. The contest announcement says that the story must be based on 1 of the following themes:
The stranger
shadow on the landing
sharp fangs
the cat
horror of the unknown
The story doesn't seem to be based on 1 of the themes. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Thank you1 I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Oscar J. Perez
What a wickedly wonderful world this would be whe/if Satan finally overcomes love and God completely. You did a great job of painting this hauntingly fiery picture for me. Awesome ð??¥
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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What a wickedly wonderful world this would be whe/if Satan finally overcomes love and God completely. You did a great job of painting this hauntingly fiery picture for me. Awesome ð??¥
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from laMont Flanagan
The story lacks a basic plot and is a diatribe of what Satan may do upon his ascension to earth. The dramatic account of blood dripping is not an event of horror but what is done to the souls of men would have been more creative.
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reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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The story lacks a basic plot and is a diatribe of what Satan may do upon his ascension to earth. The dramatic account of blood dripping is not an event of horror but what is done to the souls of men would have been more creative.
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Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This would definitely be a moment of true horror. I have to imagine you are speaking of that time when the Lord has returned to claim His chosen and left to take them all to Paradise with Him, leaving all the rest forsaken to the wiles of the devil. Only thing is, I'm of the mindset that at that time the Earth will be destroyed by fire. So, that makes me think this may be just a horrid imaginative scenario. Either way, it is not something I want to consider.
Nice work. Thanks? Good luck in the voting!
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This would definitely be a moment of true horror. I have to imagine you are speaking of that time when the Lord has returned to claim His chosen and left to take them all to Paradise with Him, leaving all the rest forsaken to the wiles of the devil. Only thing is, I'm of the mindset that at that time the Earth will be destroyed by fire. So, that makes me think this may be just a horrid imaginative scenario. Either way, it is not something I want to consider.
Nice work. Thanks? Good luck in the voting!
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from artisart4u
We can't let him win, we got to stay on top of things the best we can.
I really enjoy reading this serious flash fiction.
You stayed within the word count.
Good luck with your horror story.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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We can't let him win, we got to stay on top of things the best we can.
I really enjoy reading this serious flash fiction.
You stayed within the word count.
Good luck with your horror story.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Enzo Lance
Good job in bringing us to the actual setting of the story using only few words of a flash fiction. I just observed that you used present tense in telling us your flash fiction except for one line " Satan Rised from Hell and punishes humans for no reason". I believed that would be rises to keep the uniformity of tenses except if it was used only as event reference.
Anyways, well done and goodluck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Good job in bringing us to the actual setting of the story using only few words of a flash fiction. I just observed that you used present tense in telling us your flash fiction except for one line " Satan Rised from Hell and punishes humans for no reason". I believed that would be rises to keep the uniformity of tenses except if it was used only as event reference.
Anyways, well done and goodluck in the contest.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you! I did fix the mistake. Thanks for the advice. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
