Satan Finally Wins
Horror story17 total reviews
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I don't feel this really tells a cohesive story. It's just a description of dying people and zombues. Also, who said Satan's minions were zonbies? Not sure about this one.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I don't feel this really tells a cohesive story. It's just a description of dying people and zombues. Also, who said Satan's minions were zonbies? Not sure about this one.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Huguette M. Forest-Coultry
I would have liked to know more about Bill's demons. Satan loves coming through the back door and pollutes us all with those frightening images.
Yes, I do feel that Devil permeating our lives, trying to gain ownership of our soul-beings. Vigilance, discernment and faith are the great tools I use to send him back from whence he came.
He does punish us if we ignore who he is and the permanent havoc he creates, destroying souls who likely say, "How is it he captured me and I didn't see it." So I would have liked to read how you think he does what he does.
Satan IS death. He IS real. And the prevalence of DIS-ORDER, Greed, Egoism and the misuse of Power on this planet reflects his successes.
The photo suits the piece.
Stay well. Stay safe.
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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I would have liked to know more about Bill's demons. Satan loves coming through the back door and pollutes us all with those frightening images.
Yes, I do feel that Devil permeating our lives, trying to gain ownership of our soul-beings. Vigilance, discernment and faith are the great tools I use to send him back from whence he came.
He does punish us if we ignore who he is and the permanent havoc he creates, destroying souls who likely say, "How is it he captured me and I didn't see it." So I would have liked to read how you think he does what he does.
Satan IS death. He IS real. And the prevalence of DIS-ORDER, Greed, Egoism and the misuse of Power on this planet reflects his successes.
The photo suits the piece.
Stay well. Stay safe.
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a good story, Raul. Well not good in terms of Satan winning, but good in terms of the component elements of a story. The setting is dire, and the consequences are heinous.
Excellent work and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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This is a good story, Raul. Well not good in terms of Satan winning, but good in terms of the component elements of a story. The setting is dire, and the consequences are heinous.
Excellent work and many thanks for sharing. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 17-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story! :)
Comment from w.j.debi
Okay, this makes the chills go down my spine. Let's hope this is NOT the way things end. You make it quite clear that we are in trouble if Satan wins because there will be never-ending suffering.
Well done. I see you took third in the contest. Congratulations.
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Okay, this makes the chills go down my spine. Let's hope this is NOT the way things end. You make it quite clear that we are in trouble if Satan wins because there will be never-ending suffering.
Well done. I see you took third in the contest. Congratulations.
Comment Written 16-May-2020
reply by the author on 16-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story! Yes, I took third. Thank you! :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
I love scary stories and movies...so you know I loved this flash fiction. Great entry for the Horror writing prompt contest. Good word count. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Hello my friend
I love scary stories and movies...so you know I loved this flash fiction. Great entry for the Horror writing prompt contest. Good word count. Well done.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you, my friend! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is indeed a spooky story and should do well in the Horror writing contest. I generally do not read horror stories, but the picture and the subject drew me in. Hell will be excruciating. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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This is indeed a spooky story and should do well in the Horror writing contest. I generally do not read horror stories, but the picture and the subject drew me in. Hell will be excruciating. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Spooky! Nice imagery and flow of words. You've written well within the laid out rules for the contest. My very best wishes in this regard. Cheers and kudos!
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Spooky! Nice imagery and flow of words. You've written well within the laid out rules for the contest. My very best wishes in this regard. Cheers and kudos!
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Shirley McLain
That is the real horror of this world is when Satan comes around. You did a wonderful job with your story. I saw no errors. Take care and enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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That is the real horror of this world is when Satan comes around. You did a wonderful job with your story. I saw no errors. Take care and enjoy your afternoon. Shirley
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Shadow of Death sounds like a very scary guy who brings redemption to the sinners, so don't you dare crossing his path:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Shadow of Death sounds like a very scary guy who brings redemption to the sinners, so don't you dare crossing his path:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fearful write as Satan does his dastardly deeds and we succumb to the fire and death becomes us, a fearful write as we all fear hell. This is a horror story! love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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A fearful write as Satan does his dastardly deeds and we succumb to the fire and death becomes us, a fearful write as we all fear hell. This is a horror story! love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
