In Season's Trust ...
Synergy/Rhyming Poem23 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Exceptional, dear Susan. I love the sweet art you chose to crown your fine piece. All stories and poetry need art in my opinion. Yours fits together like hand in glove. Sending you my best today as always, along with six stars.
Sal xoxo
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Exceptional, dear Susan. I love the sweet art you chose to crown your fine piece. All stories and poetry need art in my opinion. Yours fits together like hand in glove. Sending you my best today as always, along with six stars.
Sal xoxo
Comment Written 17-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2020
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Thank you Sally
Comment from Bill Schott
This synergy/rhyming poem, In Season's Trust, follows the formatting as noted and presents a most naturally occurring verse. The images described fall unforced onto the work and create a gentle scene.
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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This synergy/rhyming poem, In Season's Trust, follows the formatting as noted and presents a most naturally occurring verse. The images described fall unforced onto the work and create a gentle scene.
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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Aw thanks for reading and for the review! Much appreciated :-)
Comment from rspoet
Well, dang, Susan, you nailed your own form. :))
Wonderful rhymes and smooth iambic tetrameter.
You've loaded the Synergy with marvelous imagery
as the seasons inevitably turn and all must adapt.
Excellent use of the many poetical devices:
personification, alliteration, assonance, even the swaps
read well.
Great presentation, picture, colors.
Six songbirds of delight.
Robert
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Well, dang, Susan, you nailed your own form. :))
Wonderful rhymes and smooth iambic tetrameter.
You've loaded the Synergy with marvelous imagery
as the seasons inevitably turn and all must adapt.
Excellent use of the many poetical devices:
personification, alliteration, assonance, even the swaps
read well.
Great presentation, picture, colors.
Six songbirds of delight.
Robert
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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You're speaking my language! Thanks Robert for such a wonderful review! Now, this form is my own creation... Sooooo maybe :-) ya might want to try it??? Just a thought :-) Thanks again for reading/reviewing and 6 stars!!! Yay!
Comment from AJ McCall
I love the scene of nature in this poem. It flows well. I admire how you incorporated the animals into the lines and at the same time describe the tree and the moss and the moon. Very well done.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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I love the scene of nature in this poem. It flows well. I admire how you incorporated the animals into the lines and at the same time describe the tree and the moss and the moon. Very well done.
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Well, thank you for taking the time to read and review! Much appreciated.
Comment from Richard J
Ohhh, an "original" form, and by one the site's Premiere Poetesses!
I love the form's name, Synergy, as-well ... easy to remember and fits the particulars perfectly.
I surely plan to compose a poem of my own in this beautiful, yet, challenging-looking format.
According to the form's directives, you've hit every spot perfectly, and your syntactic flow in vivid imagery and imaginative metaphor is to die for.
The story, itself, full of Nature's endless wonders, is well worth the read. But, your presentation, enthralling artwork choice, and brilliant originality, make this piece one to read again and again.
Totally smitten, Susan, I'm off for another read ... thank you for the deeelightful treat! ~ Richard : )
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Ohhh, an "original" form, and by one the site's Premiere Poetesses!
I love the form's name, Synergy, as-well ... easy to remember and fits the particulars perfectly.
I surely plan to compose a poem of my own in this beautiful, yet, challenging-looking format.
According to the form's directives, you've hit every spot perfectly, and your syntactic flow in vivid imagery and imaginative metaphor is to die for.
The story, itself, full of Nature's endless wonders, is well worth the read. But, your presentation, enthralling artwork choice, and brilliant originality, make this piece one to read again and again.
Totally smitten, Susan, I'm off for another read ... thank you for the deeelightful treat! ~ Richard : )
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Hi Richard :-) Thanks for this great review! I so appreciate it. 6 stars too? Awwww
Comment from smileycloud
such a beautiful poem with picturesque imagery that can bring the entire terrain to life and the reader can almost feel the seasons change
I truly love the river's description "earth's liquid soul meanders by;"
it is such a slow and easy going poem where one can stop and survey the scenes depicted
such endearing story has been told here with adorable language almost from a time gone by or from a magical fairy tale
even though the poem is certainly capable of standing alone for sure your chosen pictured image is like a crowning glory to the story
thank you for sharing
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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such a beautiful poem with picturesque imagery that can bring the entire terrain to life and the reader can almost feel the seasons change
I truly love the river's description "earth's liquid soul meanders by;"
it is such a slow and easy going poem where one can stop and survey the scenes depicted
such endearing story has been told here with adorable language almost from a time gone by or from a magical fairy tale
even though the poem is certainly capable of standing alone for sure your chosen pictured image is like a crowning glory to the story
thank you for sharing
have a smiley day
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Well, I think this review might actually be better then the poem! Thank you for reading and leaving me such an amzing review! and 6 stars! Awww thanks again.
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you are very welcome and your work is certainly deserving
:):):)
Comment from Bichon
This was truly such a beautiful poem. You have explained so many aspects of the nature scene so well in lovely rhyme. I loved the cloning line so much,
"Bear nature's trust"
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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This was truly such a beautiful poem. You have explained so many aspects of the nature scene so well in lovely rhyme. I loved the cloning line so much,
"Bear nature's trust"
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Thank you so much for this review! and 6 stars! :-))))
Comment from WalkerMan
What a delight this is, enhanced by the Synergy form you created for it.
Because nearly every poem I write is in its own unique form, I particularly appreciate seeing you reach this stage in your own poetic endeavors. Your modesty keeps you from fully recognizing this, but in less than four years' time you have blossomed from novice to poetic master. Brava!
It is lovely how you show how all Nature's creatures, both flora and fauna, adapt in harmony to each other according to each season's characteristics. Thus the gorgeous painting you chose as illustration is most appropriate.
Here are some passages I especially like:
all seasons drift through moonlight streams.
Warm, cozy nest waits newborn gift,
sustaining life when Nature deems.
Li'l critters forage mossy ground;
creations' callings intertwine.
earth's liquid soul meanders by;
Superb. Your unconditional love for all life comes through in this, as does the unwavering faith behind it.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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What a delight this is, enhanced by the Synergy form you created for it.
Because nearly every poem I write is in its own unique form, I particularly appreciate seeing you reach this stage in your own poetic endeavors. Your modesty keeps you from fully recognizing this, but in less than four years' time you have blossomed from novice to poetic master. Brava!
It is lovely how you show how all Nature's creatures, both flora and fauna, adapt in harmony to each other according to each season's characteristics. Thus the gorgeous painting you chose as illustration is most appropriate.
Here are some passages I especially like:
all seasons drift through moonlight streams.
Warm, cozy nest waits newborn gift,
sustaining life when Nature deems.
Li'l critters forage mossy ground;
creations' callings intertwine.
earth's liquid soul meanders by;
Superb. Your unconditional love for all life comes through in this, as does the unwavering faith behind it.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Aw Thanks Mike for such a beautiful review! yes, I know you remember some of my early work...yikes!
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You are most welcome, Susan. I have always liked your posts, and it has been a joy seeing them get better and better as your skills improved. Now you are at a level where your full creativity can be expressed in
such lovely works as this one. -- Mike
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Beautiful Susan. Very well written and rhymed. I can't see any way it could
be any better. Sometimes I wonder if such beauty still exists. About all we
can see today are houses and freeways.
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Beautiful Susan. Very well written and rhymed. I can't see any way it could
be any better. Sometimes I wonder if such beauty still exists. About all we
can see today are houses and freeways.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
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Hi Willie! Thank you for taking the time to read and review! and 6 stars! Oh it does, you just have to go out of the way now to find it :-)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Susan, this is a beautiful descriptive poem and a wonderful journey through the year. The rhyme scheme is consistent throughout and you have tackled the form which is quite difficult, perfectly. It is a favourite subject of mind, nature in all its glory and you have made a great job in covering all that nature has gifted us with. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Hello Susan, this is a beautiful descriptive poem and a wonderful journey through the year. The rhyme scheme is consistent throughout and you have tackled the form which is quite difficult, perfectly. It is a favourite subject of mind, nature in all its glory and you have made a great job in covering all that nature has gifted us with. Good Luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you Dorothy for this wonderful review! Much appreciated.
