As The Day Winds Down
Summer Haiku For Contest14 total reviews
Comment from Lance S. Loria
Nicely written Haiku. I really like the connection of drooping flowers and grandma nodding off. Congratulations on your contest win. Complimentary artwork coupled with matched font and background colors. Perfect!!
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Nicely written Haiku. I really like the connection of drooping flowers and grandma nodding off. Congratulations on your contest win. Complimentary artwork coupled with matched font and background colors. Perfect!!
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 12-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this vividly descriptive, appealing haiku about the winding down of the day and
Grandma's energy.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this vividly descriptive, appealing haiku about the winding down of the day and
Grandma's energy.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you very much for reading :) you're very kind.
Comment from ESOSTINE
I quite love this. The poem shows that even flowers go to sleep at dusk like human should. "Grand ma nods in peace" resonates with me. Very rhythmic and easy to understand. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I quite love this. The poem shows that even flowers go to sleep at dusk like human should. "Grand ma nods in peace" resonates with me. Very rhythmic and easy to understand. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this and the scene you've set for us. I can see grandma sitting in her rocking chair on the porch. This is good work and I enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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I like this and the scene you've set for us. I can see grandma sitting in her rocking chair on the porch. This is good work and I enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku about the sunset after a long day, the sunflowers heads start to droop and grandma needs a good sleep when peace fills her heart after a good day's hard work.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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A very well-written haiku about the sunset after a long day, the sunflowers heads start to droop and grandma needs a good sleep when peace fills her heart after a good day's hard work.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great haiku with the perfect merging of the image you selected and enhancing it with the wording that ties together the sunflower with the respect for the grandmother. The sun, the flower, and the grandmother are ending their day together in peace. Bill
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Great haiku with the perfect merging of the image you selected and enhancing it with the wording that ties together the sunflower with the respect for the grandmother. The sun, the flower, and the grandmother are ending their day together in peace. Bill
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you, Bill, I appreciate your review. Thank you very much for the six stars.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, As the Day Winds Down, presented as a 5-7-5, brings a close to the day, the flowers need for sunlight, and the people's desire to stay conscious.
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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This haiku, As the Day Winds Down, presented as a 5-7-5, brings a close to the day, the flowers need for sunlight, and the people's desire to stay conscious.
Comment Written 11-May-2020
reply by the author on 11-May-2020
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Thank you, Bill, I appreciate your review.
Comment from humpwhistle
A very nice comparison between the drooping sunflowers, and the nodding grannie. Very visual, and apt. A lovely, and peaceful haiku.
I wish you the very best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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A very nice comparison between the drooping sunflowers, and the nodding grannie. Very visual, and apt. A lovely, and peaceful haiku.
I wish you the very best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought tranquility to these words as both the sunflower and Grandma bow their heads in sleep, ambient words, much enjoyed, a fine Haiku, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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You brought tranquility to these words as both the sunflower and Grandma bow their heads in sleep, ambient words, much enjoyed, a fine Haiku, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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Thank you very much, Dolly.
Comment from tfawcus
This is an incredibly strong word picture that you have painted of the somnolent ease of a summer's evening. I didn't know of the meaning of sunflowers, but that information makes the connection between your satori line and the others much stronger in the mind. It's good to see a haiku so carefully constructed and mindful of the Japanese tradition. I imagine that it will do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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This is an incredibly strong word picture that you have painted of the somnolent ease of a summer's evening. I didn't know of the meaning of sunflowers, but that information makes the connection between your satori line and the others much stronger in the mind. It's good to see a haiku so carefully constructed and mindful of the Japanese tradition. I imagine that it will do well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you very much, Tony. I appreciate your review and kind words. It means a lot coming from you.
