Ol' Glory!
U.S. Joint Services Commandos annihilate the Viet Cong!57 total reviews
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Bill,
MARVELOUS piece of War and History Poetry meeting the desired norms,
having impressive phraseology, ENCHANTING FLOW from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting in your heart your DUTY as well as your BEAUTY!
3rd line of the 1st Stanza and last line of the last Stanza are particularly noteworthy.
BEST OF LUCK in all respects!
reply by the author on 07-May-2020
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Hello Bill,
MARVELOUS piece of War and History Poetry meeting the desired norms,
having impressive phraseology, ENCHANTING FLOW from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting in your heart your DUTY as well as your BEAUTY!
3rd line of the 1st Stanza and last line of the last Stanza are particularly noteworthy.
BEST OF LUCK in all respects!
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 07-May-2020
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A "SALUTE," RP! Quite an "Awesome review," my dear friend. I am nominating you for the reviewers award. Great hearing from you. Thanks for the kind words and taking the time to read my work. Both of which are an honor. Best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
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Hi Bill, Most Welcome!
I'm sure your this poem is going to be declared as CONTEST WINNER. when I voted, it was on the Top with 9, far above than all others.
I always try my best never to miss your work.
Your( Including Cathy )style in Prose as well as in Verse is really SUPERB, and deserves A BIG SALUTE
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Thanks for the Nomination!
With best wishes,
~ RP
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Ben1
This is a good poem I like the way the soldier still fought through the war for his lover, for love is probably one of the biggest motivators. War is indeed hell but with something good to think about you can just make it through it. I like how you said that her waiting at home muffled the gun fire, if was a change from gunfire muffling other stuff. We do indeed need to give our veterans a lot of respect and it is sad that some of them are frowned upon. Good job and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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This is a good poem I like the way the soldier still fought through the war for his lover, for love is probably one of the biggest motivators. War is indeed hell but with something good to think about you can just make it through it. I like how you said that her waiting at home muffled the gun fire, if was a change from gunfire muffling other stuff. We do indeed need to give our veterans a lot of respect and it is sad that some of them are frowned upon. Good job and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A "SALUTE," Ben! Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read my work. All of which is an honor. Best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
Comment from Margaret Bednar
The back and forth between war and your love, the rhyming, the alliteration - the whole poem is well expressed and written. I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 07-May-2020
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The back and forth between war and your love, the rhyming, the alliteration - the whole poem is well expressed and written. I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 07-May-2020
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Thanks for the "Excellent Review" and God Bless. Bill
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A snippet of your history in this fight in Vietnam that was doomed from the start and the leaders knew it too and continued to allow soldiers to die on foreign soil in order to save themselves. Your words are hard hitting, sad and it was pure luck who survived. It was like fighting in the dark against those who knew the terrain and had the tenacity and cruelty to win against an often naive army life lambs to the slaughter. But these soldiers were proud, fighting for their country in a war they could not win, but they still tried and loss their life. The Americans first on one side and then on the other and faced with an impossible task were send to their deaths and the strain was left forever for the country to mourn. These are heartfelt words Bill and I hope that you are now living in peace, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A snippet of your history in this fight in Vietnam that was doomed from the start and the leaders knew it too and continued to allow soldiers to die on foreign soil in order to save themselves. Your words are hard hitting, sad and it was pure luck who survived. It was like fighting in the dark against those who knew the terrain and had the tenacity and cruelty to win against an often naive army life lambs to the slaughter. But these soldiers were proud, fighting for their country in a war they could not win, but they still tried and loss their life. The Americans first on one side and then on the other and faced with an impossible task were send to their deaths and the strain was left forever for the country to mourn. These are heartfelt words Bill and I hope that you are now living in peace, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A "SALUTE," Dolly! Great hearing from you. Thanks for the review, kind words and taking the time to read my story. All of which is an honor. FYI, I did not serve in Vietnam; yet, in Iraq during Desert Storm. Most of the events in Ol' Glory are true. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Love Bill x
Comment from Tootie
From my soul, through my heart, by your hand, you have written an AMAZING and heart-wrenching poem, Co-Author! This is a prime example of your AWESOMENESS! A Big "SALUTE" to you! I know this poem will be added to our already written Chapter 28 after the contest. HURRAH! You are SO TALENTED, and it is an HONOR to write by your side. This is a WINNER--the BEST war and history poem I've read. Wishing you a much deserved win in the contest. God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and Mountains and Mountains of Love, Cathy
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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From my soul, through my heart, by your hand, you have written an AMAZING and heart-wrenching poem, Co-Author! This is a prime example of your AWESOMENESS! A Big "SALUTE" to you! I know this poem will be added to our already written Chapter 28 after the contest. HURRAH! You are SO TALENTED, and it is an HONOR to write by your side. This is a WINNER--the BEST war and history poem I've read. Wishing you a much deserved win in the contest. God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and Mountains and Mountains of Love, Cathy
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Right back at ya on all the kind words, Co-Author! I'm looking forward to including this presentation in Chapter 28 of "Love Long Distance." Win, lose, or draw! Half of the credit for this one . . . "BELONGS TOO YOU!" Best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration and a Tennessee River full of Love too YOU, Bill
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
Writing from the perspective of a participant in the action is a real thrill to read and a great tribute to our fighting forces. The idea when in a war, a just war, if there ever is one, as you state, should be won quickly and not linger on and on. This poem is written well with beat, cadence, and rhyme and certainly fits the bill of war and history. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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Writing from the perspective of a participant in the action is a real thrill to read and a great tribute to our fighting forces. The idea when in a war, a just war, if there ever is one, as you state, should be won quickly and not linger on and on. This poem is written well with beat, cadence, and rhyme and certainly fits the bill of war and history. Buona Fortuna in the contest. giovanni
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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Greetings, my friend! It is an honor meeting you. A "SALUTE" for the "Exceptional" review, kind words and taking the time to read my work. "Ol' Glory" will be featured in "Love Long Distance, Chapter 28" once the contest concludes. Cathy and I hope to see you there. Best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill.
Comment from ameen786
Rat a tat/kaboom-kaboom...love your application of "Onomatopoei"-a wonderful poem my friend, excellent rhymes and great flow; a delightful read, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Rat a tat/kaboom-kaboom...love your application of "Onomatopoei"-a wonderful poem my friend, excellent rhymes and great flow; a delightful read, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A "SALUTE," ameen786! Thanks for the excellent review, kind words and taking time to read my work. All of which is an honor. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
Comment from Ben Colder
On a hill, all did matter, a Chinese Machine Gun started to chatter. Hey, Commando. You did well with this. Good dedication. Stay safe out there. I know all Vets appreciate it.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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On a hill, all did matter, a Chinese Machine Gun started to chatter. Hey, Commando. You did well with this. Good dedication. Stay safe out there. I know all Vets appreciate it.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hey, Ben . . . a "SALUTE!" Thanks for the review, kind words and taking time to read my work. All of which is an honor. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
Comment from Elon Vaughn
I am 72 years old, which means I have or had a lot of classmates and friends who fought in Viet Nam. What a sad thing that these young men (babies, really) were not heralded as heroes as were soldiers of earlier wars. I am so sorry for your loss. I know it must have been horrific for everyone. The piece is nicely done and gives a little comfort and hope.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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I am 72 years old, which means I have or had a lot of classmates and friends who fought in Viet Nam. What a sad thing that these young men (babies, really) were not heralded as heroes as were soldiers of earlier wars. I am so sorry for your loss. I know it must have been horrific for everyone. The piece is nicely done and gives a little comfort and hope.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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A "SALUTE," Elon! Thanks for the condolences. review, kind words and taking time to read my work. All of which is an honor. I did not serve in Vietnam; yet, Iraq during Desert Storm. Most parts of Ol' Glory actually happened. Best wishes for an awesome weekend and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
An Elite Commando Team destroys Viet Cong Guerrillas!
Ol' Glory!
by Commando
Hello my friend
A wonderful entry for the
~~~RHYMING POEM~~~WAR and HISTORY writing prompt contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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An Elite Commando Team destroys Viet Cong Guerrillas!
Ol' Glory!
by Commando
Hello my friend
A wonderful entry for the
~~~RHYMING POEM~~~WAR and HISTORY writing prompt contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hello, my friend! A "SALUTE" too you for the review, kind words and taking time to read my work. All of which are an honor. Best wishes and God Bless. Respectfully with Admiration, Bill
