Lonely Tears
A Sedoka Poem11 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Excellent entry for the Sedoka Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. The presentation is beautiful. You followed the rules correctly. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-May-2020
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Hello my friend
Excellent entry for the Sedoka Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. The presentation is beautiful. You followed the rules correctly. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is something to ponder. The lonely tears could be a father that had to let her baby girl grow up. Perhaps she has gone off and got married. Fortunately for him, she has given him grandchildren. The little girl that use to roam the beach with him is now his granddaughter. I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
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This is something to ponder. The lonely tears could be a father that had to let her baby girl grow up. Perhaps she has gone off and got married. Fortunately for him, she has given him grandchildren. The little girl that use to roam the beach with him is now his granddaughter. I like what you've done with this and enjoyed reading this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 07-May-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Bill Schott
This sedoka poem, Lonely Tears, has the proper formatting and gives off a sense of loss that is eventually replaced, or overpowered, by refocusing on all who are still here. Nice.
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This sedoka poem, Lonely Tears, has the proper formatting and gives off a sense of loss that is eventually replaced, or overpowered, by refocusing on all who are still here. Nice.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
You wrote a poem with tears creating puddles from two different perspectives. It should do well as a Sedoka Poem contest entry . Well done!
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You wrote a poem with tears creating puddles from two different perspectives. It should do well as a Sedoka Poem contest entry . Well done!
Comment Written 07-May-2020
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Thank you very much
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You're welcome.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very creatively-composed, moving, and inspirational in description of the present compared to the future. We just have to be patient--though it's not easy! I really love line 5. Note: Line 6 has eight syllables.
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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Your poem is very creatively-composed, moving, and inspirational in description of the present compared to the future. We just have to be patient--though it's not easy! I really love line 5. Note: Line 6 has eight syllables.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and help
Comment from SS. Anjum
Love it!..... these lines have such deep meaning to it.....though they're seem many people around the sad truth of life is that we all are still very lonely, especially at nights we can sense.
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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Love it!..... these lines have such deep meaning to it.....though they're seem many people around the sad truth of life is that we all are still very lonely, especially at nights we can sense.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
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Thank you for your wonderful comments
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
On a new day, walking with dear father in combined footsteps the child will have freedom and sadness will go away; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
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On a new day, walking with dear father in combined footsteps the child will have freedom and sadness will go away; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep posting. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-May-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A sentimental write about the freedom we once had and how we were together with our families and now we are driven apart and the joy has gone, hopefully not forever, poignant words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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A sentimental write about the freedom we once had and how we were together with our families and now we are driven apart and the joy has gone, hopefully not forever, poignant words here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-May-2020
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Thank you very much, always appreciated
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Sedoka about the loneliness of one person can become a great partnership when they are doing the same things willingly and with love.
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A very well-written Sedoka about the loneliness of one person can become a great partnership when they are doing the same things willingly and with love.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
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Thank you very much
Comment from LisaMay
I like how your poem creates a feeling of sad, solitary emotion, then it brightens in the 2nd stanza, imparting an upbeat mood with companionship and sunshine to evaporate the tears.
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reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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I like how your poem creates a feeling of sad, solitary emotion, then it brightens in the 2nd stanza, imparting an upbeat mood with companionship and sunshine to evaporate the tears.
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Comment Written 06-May-2020
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Thank you very much your comments are appreciated
