Residue
Some things never leave.10 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Good syllable count. The lines connect grammatically so they flow well. Nice presentation. I like the topic. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hello my friend
Good syllable count. The lines connect grammatically so they flow well. Nice presentation. I like the topic. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hello there.
Thank you for liking Residue and its presentation. I'm glad the topic came through well and that it wasn't too difficult to understand.
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No, it's not hard to understand. I get it.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Powerful idea expressed in this short poem. Memories reside whether for good or for bad. It is very tough to deal with significant memories from the past, especially when they're tied to memories from our childhood and sense of belonging. Bill
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Powerful idea expressed in this short poem. Memories reside whether for good or for bad. It is very tough to deal with significant memories from the past, especially when they're tied to memories from our childhood and sense of belonging. Bill
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hello there. Thank you for liking the idea expressed in this poem. That was what I was trying to get at with what it was about: failed relationships and how they might always seem to linger no matter how much we try to forget.
Comment from RShipp
You have completed the requirements for a 5-syllable/ 7- syllable/ 5-syllable poem.
It can take a long time to get rid of the baggage of a bad relationship!
Well done!
Best of luck in the 5-7-5 poetry contest.
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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You have completed the requirements for a 5-syllable/ 7- syllable/ 5-syllable poem.
It can take a long time to get rid of the baggage of a bad relationship!
Well done!
Best of luck in the 5-7-5 poetry contest.
Comment Written 06-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Thank you for liking this poem Indeed that's what I was hoping for, that the message of bad relationships can be difficult to get over.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hold on to a few and sweep the rest away - time to start making more! ;) :) An awesome metaphorical offering for the contest today, anon -- thanx so much for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Hold on to a few and sweep the rest away - time to start making more! ;) :) An awesome metaphorical offering for the contest today, anon -- thanx so much for sharing and best of luck at the polls! ;)
Comment Written 05-May-2020
reply by the author on 08-May-2020
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Thank you for liking the metaphorical angle of my poem and for having wished me luck at the polls.
Comment from Supe
Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest. You managed to say it all in such a few words. What a clever message. Sad but true. No need for an illustration. You've said it all.
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest. You managed to say it all in such a few words. What a clever message. Sad but true. No need for an illustration. You've said it all.
Comment Written 05-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thank you very much for liking this poem and for wishing me luck in the contest.
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you are welcome.
Comment from rspoet
You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with very good description of the emptiness of a failed relationship.
Yes, some remain, perhaps until they are replaced by better memories.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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You've written an excellent 5-7-5 poem for the contest
with very good description of the emptiness of a failed relationship.
Yes, some remain, perhaps until they are replaced by better memories.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Hello there. Thank you for liking the haiku and for wishing me luck in the contest. That was exactly what I meant to convey in this particular haiku: a failed relationship and the emptiness that sometimes follows.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry is in good form, Mystery Author. Your words are well-chosen and create great imagery for anyone who has been in the same position. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
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Your contest entry is in good form, Mystery Author. Your words are well-chosen and create great imagery for anyone who has been in the same position. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 04-May-2020
Comment from January L'Angelle
This poem is heartwarming. I like poems that tell a story, like this one does. The poem is well thought out. It makes me think of lost love or loving someone who has passed away. Well penned. -January L.
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This poem is heartwarming. I like poems that tell a story, like this one does. The poem is well thought out. It makes me think of lost love or loving someone who has passed away. Well penned. -January L.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
Comment from humpwhistle
'Litter' is the key word here. The remnants of a love affair
do get left behind in the form of painful memories. Nice job of giving these remnants an unique image.
Best of luck with voters.
Peace, Lee
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'Litter' is the key word here. The remnants of a love affair
do get left behind in the form of painful memories. Nice job of giving these remnants an unique image.
Best of luck with voters.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 04-May-2020
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
Very nice 5-7-5 prompt entry. Best of luck. "Residue," the title is very interesting. I suppose we all have had our share of "litter" in our lives. I usually scrub harder in my life to forget those that have forgotten me. Best wishes.
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Very nice 5-7-5 prompt entry. Best of luck. "Residue," the title is very interesting. I suppose we all have had our share of "litter" in our lives. I usually scrub harder in my life to forget those that have forgotten me. Best wishes.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
