Moving On
Perhaps you just need to hear their voice one more time...23 total reviews
Comment from Ben Colder
Excellent write. I see nothing wrong and the story line is great. Telephone line to Heaven. Wow, this is a powerful line. Thanks for sharing and best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Excellent write. I see nothing wrong and the story line is great. Telephone line to Heaven. Wow, this is a powerful line. Thanks for sharing and best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Thank you for your time and your review!
Comment from Alison Ogilvie-Holme
Wow! I thought that this story was excellent in every way! The writing style itself is beautiful and the plot is so original and touching! Loved it!!!!
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Wow! I thought that this story was excellent in every way! The writing style itself is beautiful and the plot is so original and touching! Loved it!!!!
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 03-May-2020
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Wow, Alison!! Thank you so much for this awesome review and those bright, shiny stars! :) You've certainly made the day kick off to a great start - here's wishing you a wonderful start to your week! Take care!
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You are most welcome! It is such a standout story! Just a thought, have you ever entered any stories in the WOW! Women on Fiction quarterly contest? I?m certainly no expert, but this story seems very much in line with some of the past winners (in terms of the types of stories they prefer). Good luck!
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Never even heard of it... I've almost given up on those competitions: I've spent pretty much all my savings and have never won anything. But thank you for the encouragement, it is good to hear. :)
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One final thought and then I promise to leave you alone, Lol! The WOW - Women on Fiction flash fiction competition is online and it only costs $10.00 to enter. The contest accepts previously published stories and simultaneous contest entries, and they cap it off at 300 to allow for fair competition. Anyways, I think they would really like your story! Cheers!
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Thank you. :) For that amount, I will look into it. :)
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Not sure how this one was 'infectious', but thank you for your review. :) :) :)
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I was talking about your energy.... :)
Comment from Diana L Crawford
Oh my! Chills all over. Great story set up. Drew me in right off and I love your detail work. Perfect scenario to let pain go!
Thank you!!
xoxo
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Oh my! Chills all over. Great story set up. Drew me in right off and I love your detail work. Perfect scenario to let pain go!
Thank you!!
xoxo
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Diana! It was one of those that I just needed an 'escape' from working but once the idea started to take shape on the screen, I ended up with a 'teary typing' finish! Hello Kleenex! Thank you for your review!
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It is beautifully done! xoxo
Comment from Dawn Munro
JEEZ>thanks for the beauty, but wow -- sad! I want to see what this one does in the booth! Wonderfully evocative writing -- I was able to envision it all, almost 'hear' his voice...
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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JEEZ>thanks for the beauty, but wow -- sad! I want to see what this one does in the booth! Wonderfully evocative writing -- I was able to envision it all, almost 'hear' his voice...
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Yeah, it just kindof happened that way.... It was one of those that I just needed an 'escape' from working but once the idea started to take shape on the screen, I ended up with a 'teary typing' finish! Hello Kleenex! Thank you so much, Dawn, for your awesome review and those lovely stars! :) ;)
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Most deserve. I loved it!
Comment from zanya
Profound emotion so effectively evoked here in this story of a love who has now passed away and is deeply mourned and missed - but redemption comes amidst the pain - well -delineated - not too heavy on the supernatural! which makes it just right !
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Profound emotion so effectively evoked here in this story of a love who has now passed away and is deeply mourned and missed - but redemption comes amidst the pain - well -delineated - not too heavy on the supernatural! which makes it just right !
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you for your review, Zanya - I tried to give the 'supernatural' a partnership to the human condition rather than something out to destroy it... :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is such a lovely piece of writing. At the end, my eyes filled with tears. Just the thought of such grief-stricken sorrow is so real it hurts. There comes a time when it must be let go.
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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This is such a lovely piece of writing. At the end, my eyes filled with tears. Just the thought of such grief-stricken sorrow is so real it hurts. There comes a time when it must be let go.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Rebecca! It was one of those that I just needed an 'escape' from working but once the idea started to take shape on the screen, I ended up with a 'teary typing' finish! Hello Kleenex! Thank you for your review!
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I'll remember this piece a long time.
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Thank you, Rebecca - that means a lot. :)
Comment from damommy
This is soooo beautiful. I knew when the Conch shell appeared that Steven had brought it back. She hadn't let go of the past, and it was time. What a wonderful way to be told that. (Darn it, no sixes left!)
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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This is soooo beautiful. I knew when the Conch shell appeared that Steven had brought it back. She hadn't let go of the past, and it was time. What a wonderful way to be told that. (Darn it, no sixes left!)
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Oh, I'm so very glad you enjoyed this one -- your review is confirmation that my 'teary typing' was worth it (Kleenexes are a bit low now, though - lol!). Enjoy the weekend!
Comment from Cass Carlton
This is a beautiful piece. It contains sorrow, and grief, but also a message of hope. Set against the back drop of the sea the story tells of a young woman grieving at the loss of her beloved husband. She finds a lovely shell
but cannot see the message it contains for her.At last she listens to the shell to hear her husband's voice speaking to her, telling her to say "Goodbye ". When she does the grief she had held at bay engulfs her while the shell washes out to sea again. This is a well crafted story. Well told well done cheers Cass
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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This is a beautiful piece. It contains sorrow, and grief, but also a message of hope. Set against the back drop of the sea the story tells of a young woman grieving at the loss of her beloved husband. She finds a lovely shell
but cannot see the message it contains for her.At last she listens to the shell to hear her husband's voice speaking to her, telling her to say "Goodbye ". When she does the grief she had held at bay engulfs her while the shell washes out to sea again. This is a well crafted story. Well told well done cheers Cass
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review, Cass! I'm so glad that you enjoyed Camille's story!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like the presumed and fictive reincarnation of the deceased husband coming back as a shell: "
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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I like the presumed and fictive reincarnation of the deceased husband coming back as a shell: "
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you for your time and your review, Iza! Glad you enjoyed Camille's story!
