Oh Life!
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Comment from chelsmor
Beautiful tanka with exquisite artwork - that graphic simply inspires the impact of your words and taken together you have created am amazing work of art.
Excellent in every way. Chelsmor
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Beautiful tanka with exquisite artwork - that graphic simply inspires the impact of your words and taken together you have created am amazing work of art.
Excellent in every way. Chelsmor
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from Twigs13
Nicely done with a powerful message and true to form. I have no suggestions to change a thing. ! Thank you for sharing your work with us I truly enjoyed this one.
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Nicely done with a powerful message and true to form. I have no suggestions to change a thing. ! Thank you for sharing your work with us I truly enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from StoryMonkey
Errors! by ALCREATOR WRITER
Hello Alcreator,
So much said in so few words . . . very nice. In my opinion, few are the writers who can convey a message so clearly in short form - many take the abstract route and call it art, whereas I call it something else entirely - lol. But you did well - good job!
One thing that doesn't quite feel right to me is the picture - it seems a bit flashy for this poem. It makes me want to put on some Jimi Hendrix and turn on, tune in, drop out. - JR
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Errors! by ALCREATOR WRITER
Hello Alcreator,
So much said in so few words . . . very nice. In my opinion, few are the writers who can convey a message so clearly in short form - many take the abstract route and call it art, whereas I call it something else entirely - lol. But you did well - good job!
One thing that doesn't quite feel right to me is the picture - it seems a bit flashy for this poem. It makes me want to put on some Jimi Hendrix and turn on, tune in, drop out. - JR
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from mamaboots
Hello Alcreator,
I really enjoyed this one and would give it a 6 if I could. Good message, well-written and fits the form as you have written in your notes. I have no suggestions for this wonderful poem.
Thanks for sharing,
mamaboots
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Hello Alcreator,
I really enjoyed this one and would give it a 6 if I could. Good message, well-written and fits the form as you have written in your notes. I have no suggestions for this wonderful poem.
Thanks for sharing,
mamaboots
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from panpie308
Hello Alcreator Writer, I have read several of your writings and I have enjoyed each of them. I guess I have been too intimidated to review before, but this tanka motivated me to write. I love Haiku, tanka, senryu?, these forms of poetry. So much said, in so few words. This one is perfect, I truly enjoyed reading and pondering!
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Hello Alcreator Writer, I have read several of your writings and I have enjoyed each of them. I guess I have been too intimidated to review before, but this tanka motivated me to write. I love Haiku, tanka, senryu?, these forms of poetry. So much said, in so few words. This one is perfect, I truly enjoyed reading and pondering!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from mslink1
You have said it wisely. God is the only perfect one. Mankind traded in his perfect
righteous spirit (that God gave Adam and Eve) for a spirit (nature) of rebellion against his maker.
A thing called choice...remember, He also created Lucifer, but gives the angels, free will, such as He has us.
Utopia, yes it would be great, but until we reign with Jesus Christ, we will never experience it.
Beautiful poem A.W. and as most of yours are, lol, thought provoke. Mary
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You have said it wisely. God is the only perfect one. Mankind traded in his perfect
righteous spirit (that God gave Adam and Eve) for a spirit (nature) of rebellion against his maker.
A thing called choice...remember, He also created Lucifer, but gives the angels, free will, such as He has us.
Utopia, yes it would be great, but until we reign with Jesus Christ, we will never experience it.
Beautiful poem A.W. and as most of yours are, lol, thought provoke. Mary
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from terryangelo
I agree with you about the world being a different place if humans were perfect. I would argue the premise of a perfect god, since he is supposed to have created man in his image.
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I agree with you about the world being a different place if humans were perfect. I would argue the premise of a perfect god, since he is supposed to have created man in his image.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2006
Comment from cutie
Mistake is a think of style.
Everyone sees other's mistake
but our own mistakes may come us non-mistake.
We can only find out what the difference between mistake and non-mistake
is by taking an external reference.
But this external's reference's trustability is controversial.
So what can i do?
mistake?
when all ability given our hands,we have to do the easiest always?
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Mistake is a think of style.
Everyone sees other's mistake
but our own mistakes may come us non-mistake.
We can only find out what the difference between mistake and non-mistake
is by taking an external reference.
But this external's reference's trustability is controversial.
So what can i do?
mistake?
when all ability given our hands,we have to do the easiest always?
Comment Written 21-Jul-2006
Comment from sharon fallis
I see you are doing some thinking! Man [is perfect] because when God created him, he created him perfect. Thus he will always be perfect, as God doesn't do good one day and then evil the next. He is ONLY LOVE, and can't be changed nor can you. An error happened way back when, and we [who are also created to create] made these bodies and made a treaty with the Ego, not to go back to God. The Ego is who causes Hate, Wars, Strife, and says we are to Fear God.
This is NOT TRUE. God gave us the Holy Spirit, who has been around since the begenning---to help us get away from our bodies and the Ego. Sounds complicated, but really very simple. All we need do is: Read ----A Course in Miracles, actually study it to learn how to return to Heaven [Eternity] and the Sonship of God, with all of our 'Brothers'. Then the world as we know it will disappear, as it is "all" an illusiion. Love and light Sharon
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I see you are doing some thinking! Man [is perfect] because when God created him, he created him perfect. Thus he will always be perfect, as God doesn't do good one day and then evil the next. He is ONLY LOVE, and can't be changed nor can you. An error happened way back when, and we [who are also created to create] made these bodies and made a treaty with the Ego, not to go back to God. The Ego is who causes Hate, Wars, Strife, and says we are to Fear God.
This is NOT TRUE. God gave us the Holy Spirit, who has been around since the begenning---to help us get away from our bodies and the Ego. Sounds complicated, but really very simple. All we need do is: Read ----A Course in Miracles, actually study it to learn how to return to Heaven [Eternity] and the Sonship of God, with all of our 'Brothers'. Then the world as we know it will disappear, as it is "all" an illusiion. Love and light Sharon
Comment Written 21-Jul-2006
Comment from sengwriter
Aw,
Remember the famous saying - "Only the Satan commits no mistake...."?
It automatically comes into my mind as I read this beautiful cute composition here.
You've really uttered the real truth of life.
No one is perfectly perfect in this world from the day one.
I really enjoyed this beautiful tanka.
All the best, Bhalo Aachen to?
Gautam
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Aw,
Remember the famous saying - "Only the Satan commits no mistake...."?
It automatically comes into my mind as I read this beautiful cute composition here.
You've really uttered the real truth of life.
No one is perfectly perfect in this world from the day one.
I really enjoyed this beautiful tanka.
All the best, Bhalo Aachen to?
Gautam
Comment Written 21-Jul-2006
