Oh Life!
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Comment from Beatlegirl61
I have to agree here...Some errors ATE natural and realistic!1 Who EVER said God was perfect anyway?? I really enjoyed the theme of this piece and felt it was outstanding...i enjoyed the slant metering as well...Nice job!!
take care, be well and peace!! Carol ::))
'beatle' quote today: "Half of right is only half of what's wrong..." lol's
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I have to agree here...Some errors ATE natural and realistic!1 Who EVER said God was perfect anyway?? I really enjoyed the theme of this piece and felt it was outstanding...i enjoyed the slant metering as well...Nice job!!
take care, be well and peace!! Carol ::))
'beatle' quote today: "Half of right is only half of what's wrong..." lol's
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Swtdreamz
If man were perfect!
There had been another world
of true unreal. - if man were perfect- it would be like the stepford wives or something- scary
Mistake is fate; wink not God
Who's only error-err free. - well sometimes mistakes can be fun "funny"
good job
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If man were perfect!
There had been another world
of true unreal. - if man were perfect- it would be like the stepford wives or something- scary
Mistake is fate; wink not God
Who's only error-err free. - well sometimes mistakes can be fun "funny"
good job
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Irina
"Mistake is fate"
Interesting idea, ALCREATOR WRITER!
So it's not too bad men are not perfect! WE live in the real world then!
Wonderful haiku, my friend! Thanks!
Irina.
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"Mistake is fate"
Interesting idea, ALCREATOR WRITER!
So it's not too bad men are not perfect! WE live in the real world then!
Wonderful haiku, my friend! Thanks!
Irina.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from mamre07
I love the way you express this truth with eloquence. Some people are delusional and try to impress others with their perfection. Thanks for this write.
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I love the way you express this truth with eloquence. Some people are delusional and try to impress others with their perfection. Thanks for this write.
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from AlvinTEthington
The rules for tanka are changing; it used to be that the first three lines had to be about nature and the 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic structure had to be strictly followed. Now, it is more important (at least as I understand it) for the poem to be an integrated whole. However, you do show a change from exterior to interior from lines 3 to 4, which is very traditional. Excellent tanka.
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The rules for tanka are changing; it used to be that the first three lines had to be about nature and the 5/7/5/7/7 syllabic structure had to be strictly followed. Now, it is more important (at least as I understand it) for the poem to be an integrated whole. However, you do show a change from exterior to interior from lines 3 to 4, which is very traditional. Excellent tanka.
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from orozco123
I love this. The message is one that so many forget. Man is fallible, God is not. What fun would it be if we could not learn and grow from our mistakes?
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I love this. The message is one that so many forget. Man is fallible, God is not. What fun would it be if we could not learn and grow from our mistakes?
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Great job on this. Done to perfect form of a tanka. I have written some of these and though they may seem easy to people I know they aren't. Nice work on this!
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Great job on this. Done to perfect form of a tanka. I have written some of these and though they may seem easy to people I know they aren't. Nice work on this!
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from Zenbud
Mistakes are what beauty is made of . . . nothing is perfect because we all see with our own small world of conditioning . . . excellent brief verse of wit and insight. Zenbud
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Mistakes are what beauty is made of . . . nothing is perfect because we all see with our own small world of conditioning . . . excellent brief verse of wit and insight. Zenbud
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from Brindle
Don't really know...Quite nice, this...Hmm. Can't say I understand it though. And it has no rhymes or anything, is that deliberate?
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Don't really know...Quite nice, this...Hmm. Can't say I understand it though. And it has no rhymes or anything, is that deliberate?
Comment Written 16-May-2006
Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This is a Tanka poem with perfect syllable counting.
This passes on the right message, the truth that man is bound to make mistakes.
This also clarifies that GOD does not make blunders.
This is great in its message coverage here.
It has served its purpose fully.
It is a pure professional work of commendation.
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This is a Tanka poem with perfect syllable counting.
This passes on the right message, the truth that man is bound to make mistakes.
This also clarifies that GOD does not make blunders.
This is great in its message coverage here.
It has served its purpose fully.
It is a pure professional work of commendation.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
