Oh Life!
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Comment from proudgranny
I like the way you said it. Man is not perfect. I wish in some of my reviews people would realize that I am just a struggling writer who only wants to learn. Sometimes when I asked questions about their poems they are offended. Never you, but others. I am far from perfect and I loved your poem which reminds me that God made me that way for a reason. Great Job!
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I like the way you said it. Man is not perfect. I wish in some of my reviews people would realize that I am just a struggling writer who only wants to learn. Sometimes when I asked questions about their poems they are offended. Never you, but others. I am far from perfect and I loved your poem which reminds me that God made me that way for a reason. Great Job!
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from mayflowerbg
People from the English speaking world don't like when we don't observe the rules of grammar. To the point: ' If man were perfect!', this is second conditional, so in the next sentence you must use future in the past and it should read like this: "there would be another..."; the number of syllables would be the same and the poem would be grammatically correct.
'Mistake is fate' - I like the idea that people are doomed to make mistakes. "God is the only error - err free" - this is an indisputable truth.
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People from the English speaking world don't like when we don't observe the rules of grammar. To the point: ' If man were perfect!', this is second conditional, so in the next sentence you must use future in the past and it should read like this: "there would be another..."; the number of syllables would be the same and the poem would be grammatically correct.
'Mistake is fate' - I like the idea that people are doomed to make mistakes. "God is the only error - err free" - this is an indisputable truth.
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
If I were perfect, I would be dead. Something I never understood in Christian Science literature was that we are perfect. It would be a mighty boring world if we were. We would never have peer corrections and that is too much fun to give up. Alcreator, you've done it again - briefly, profoundly!
Adora
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If I were perfect, I would be dead. Something I never understood in Christian Science literature was that we are perfect. It would be a mighty boring world if we were. We would never have peer corrections and that is too much fun to give up. Alcreator, you've done it again - briefly, profoundly!
Adora
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Gert sherwood
Dear ALCREATOR WRITER, great thoughts in such a perfect short form (that is one thing we can make perfect forms in poetry .
You are right only God is perfect. I wonder if He planned it this way.
Gert sherwood
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Dear ALCREATOR WRITER, great thoughts in such a perfect short form (that is one thing we can make perfect forms in poetry .
You are right only God is perfect. I wonder if He planned it this way.
Gert sherwood
Comment Written 30-May-2006
Comment from Fairwind
Message is clear however with all this mess of error
out there. Where is the true, where is the error free?
To what exactly am I being involked to or for?
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Message is clear however with all this mess of error
out there. Where is the true, where is the error free?
To what exactly am I being involked to or for?
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from lkdunny
A very real look at man and his behavior. Perfect we may want to be, a feat that will never happen. A well written piece that makes one think when reading. Well done. lkdunny
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A very real look at man and his behavior. Perfect we may want to be, a feat that will never happen. A well written piece that makes one think when reading. Well done. lkdunny
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Ponder
Hi Alcreator Writer,
This is another interesting poem with a unique collection of words,
However it is not a true Tanka as this line only has only 4 syllables.
of true unreal
The effect of the poem is not altered by this. I found that I had to read this poem several time to get the full effect and am still not sure about the phrase - wink not God, does this mean that God doesn't wink?
Ponder
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
This is another interesting poem with a unique collection of words,
However it is not a true Tanka as this line only has only 4 syllables.
of true unreal
The effect of the poem is not altered by this. I found that I had to read this poem several time to get the full effect and am still not sure about the phrase - wink not God, does this mean that God doesn't wink?
Ponder
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Georgina Lenty
This writing here reminds me of a quote from Peter O'Toole's character in "The Lion In Winter", where he says:
"Like the strand askew, nothing in this world has any business being perfect."
I really enjoyed this work!
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This writing here reminds me of a quote from Peter O'Toole's character in "The Lion In Winter", where he says:
"Like the strand askew, nothing in this world has any business being perfect."
I really enjoyed this work!
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from kurfess
If man were perfect!
There had been another world
of true unreal.
Mistake is fate; wink not God
Who's only error-err free.
If I understand this correctly, man is not perfect, we're destined to make mistakes, only God is perfect. I fully agree. I just think this is taking the long way around saying it, and says it awkwardly. "Wink not God" reminds me a bit of Yoda, and saying God's only error is err free... is that just a clever play on words? Because God doesn't make errors. I'm a little confused.
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If man were perfect!
There had been another world
of true unreal.
Mistake is fate; wink not God
Who's only error-err free.
If I understand this correctly, man is not perfect, we're destined to make mistakes, only God is perfect. I fully agree. I just think this is taking the long way around saying it, and says it awkwardly. "Wink not God" reminds me a bit of Yoda, and saying God's only error is err free... is that just a clever play on words? Because God doesn't make errors. I'm a little confused.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from MikeSamford
Hard for thinking people to argue with this one God and we all know that he makes no mistakes just look at me! Or you! We are perfect, though we make mistakes, "He" does not.
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Hard for thinking people to argue with this one God and we all know that he makes no mistakes just look at me! Or you! We are perfect, though we make mistakes, "He" does not.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
