Keep Up with the Joneses
How far will I go19 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
This sonnet is perfectly modeled on the Shakespearean scheme: in the first quatrain, it exposes the robbery and its metaphor which have been extended in the second quatrain as the Peripeteia has been applied in the third. The couplet " the guillotine erected for her spouse
conveniently, the felon and the louse" has well summarized the thematic subject and given a completely new image of its theme as required by the Sonnet Poetry Contest. I love it. Great work
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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This sonnet is perfectly modeled on the Shakespearean scheme: in the first quatrain, it exposes the robbery and its metaphor which have been extended in the second quatrain as the Peripeteia has been applied in the third. The couplet " the guillotine erected for her spouse
conveniently, the felon and the louse" has well summarized the thematic subject and given a completely new image of its theme as required by the Sonnet Poetry Contest. I love it. Great work
Comment Written 05-May-2020
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2020
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Thanks again.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
He needs the guillotine. Seems like that treachery is a double-edged sword. Perhaps, more than one person's fate should be as the last couplet suggests. Interesting poem.
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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He needs the guillotine. Seems like that treachery is a double-edged sword. Perhaps, more than one person's fate should be as the last couplet suggests. Interesting poem.
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you, Brett. I appreciate your review and comments.
Patricia
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Patricia. I don't imaging the Jones's have one of these, so it appears to me they will have to try to keep up with you. That's a funny story. You better keep an eye on the bench or they might try to get that too!
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Hello Patricia. I don't imaging the Jones's have one of these, so it appears to me they will have to try to keep up with you. That's a funny story. You better keep an eye on the bench or they might try to get that too!
Good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you, Robert. I appreciate your review and comments.
Patricia
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You're welcome
Comment from Ashtar Zaidi
Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Great Job... !! I really enjoyed it, deep ideas, your energy is infectious, the way how you explained it was fantastic, thank you so much for sharing it, God Bless You... ~Ashtar~
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 04-May-2020
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Thank you, Ashtar. I appreciate your review and comments.
Patricia
Comment from Kermit R. Mullins
The "Guillotine" certainly caught my attention when I clicked on your poem. Are you OK? Anything you need to talk about? I'm here for you. JUST KIDDING. Don't ask me why, but it set me in a humorous mood and was easy to follow. Inside my mind I was thinking of some ways myself. Best regards.
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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The "Guillotine" certainly caught my attention when I clicked on your poem. Are you OK? Anything you need to talk about? I'm here for you. JUST KIDDING. Don't ask me why, but it set me in a humorous mood and was easy to follow. Inside my mind I was thinking of some ways myself. Best regards.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you, Kermit. I appreciate your offer. I really do.
Have a good day.
Patricia
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Samandlancelot, a well written sonnet - true to form. Good abab rhyme and pentameter rhythm throughout. Lovely neighbours you have but the mention of the guillotine made me laugh - great picture.
This is 'keeping up with the Jones's' carried out to a higher level. An amusing and good read. Good Luck and warm wishes - Dorothy x
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Hello Samandlancelot, a well written sonnet - true to form. Good abab rhyme and pentameter rhythm throughout. Lovely neighbours you have but the mention of the guillotine made me laugh - great picture.
This is 'keeping up with the Jones's' carried out to a higher level. An amusing and good read. Good Luck and warm wishes - Dorothy x
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you, Dorothy. I appreciate your review and all of your comments.
Patricia
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Wow! This is a different side of you! I love it. I was shocked that this was even your writing. Great photo to match. The sonnet is an area I do not venture into, but should try sometime. Probably never! Great job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Wow! This is a different side of you! I love it. I was shocked that this was even your writing. Great photo to match. The sonnet is an area I do not venture into, but should try sometime. Probably never! Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Wendy,
I've been writing more of these, lately. I don't know where they're coming from. I like the structure, rhyme and meter of a sonnet. You might like it if you try it.
Thank you for your encouraging feedback.
Patricia
Comment from smileycloud
a nice sonnet
meter and true and near rhymes look fine , it is tricky with "conveniently" being only 4 sylls and not 5 like it sounds out , lol
I see the problem clearly outlined in the 1st stanza and
your summing up couplet certainly took quite a turn from the expected and did solve the problem for sure
nicely done
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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a nice sonnet
meter and true and near rhymes look fine , it is tricky with "conveniently" being only 4 sylls and not 5 like it sounds out , lol
I see the problem clearly outlined in the 1st stanza and
your summing up couplet certainly took quite a turn from the expected and did solve the problem for sure
nicely done
have a smiley day
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 02-May-2020
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Thank you, Smiley Cloud. "conveniently" is a dialect issue. Dictionary.com shows it as 4 syllables, which is how I speak it. I appreciate your feedback.
Have a good day.
Patricia
Comment from sunnilicious
Well you know how to tell a story. Sonnets are usually for romance, however, this appeared to have worked together well for you. Astounding visual imagery created. Well thought out. Nicely written. Excellent work.
Peace be upon you :)
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Well you know how to tell a story. Sonnets are usually for romance, however, this appeared to have worked together well for you. Astounding visual imagery created. Well thought out. Nicely written. Excellent work.
Peace be upon you :)
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Sunnilicious. I aprpeciate your review and comments.
Patricia
Comment from royowen
I was watching a show on the "adventures" of Mary Queen of Scots, who was eventually beheaded, it took three goes to perform the grisly act. Funny what Guillotines do to one. Beautifully written Sonnet Patricia, it looks very much like the classical style of the sonnet, it's most smooth, great language and rhyming, well done, great use of device. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I was watching a show on the "adventures" of Mary Queen of Scots, who was eventually beheaded, it took three goes to perform the grisly act. Funny what Guillotines do to one. Beautifully written Sonnet Patricia, it looks very much like the classical style of the sonnet, it's most smooth, great language and rhyming, well done, great use of device. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you, Roy. I appreciate your review and encouraging comments.
Patricia
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Bless you