The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Tree Hugger"to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
8 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like the idea of your tree hugging. I know that children will hug a tree at times. A walk is a good thing. I ride my bike in the basement so my walking is in inside. Thank you for explaining your seasons in Canada.
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I like the idea of your tree hugging. I know that children will hug a tree at times. A walk is a good thing. I ride my bike in the basement so my walking is in inside. Thank you for explaining your seasons in Canada.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
Comment from padumachitta
Hi I did some corrections, not to the end though, sorry.
After Coronella started to travel around the globe, most countries put their citizens in forced locked down in their own homes or in special places, that they called quarantine areas.
I am living in Alberta, and our provincial government relaxed a little bit (on)the rules of confinement and walking policy. Last week they sent us a pamphlet in which we were advice(d), for mental health, to walk at least 20 minutes a day.
Did you know, that a study performed by the University of Calgary, declared Edmonton as being on the 89(th) place for people that are walking daily. This study is based on data from Apple, I bet if they were consulting also, the smart section we will be on first place. Yeah, I am the proud owner of a Smart Samsung phone, and I am not payed for advertisement, damn it!
If we take a look at Belgium, the government advised the population to eat only twice a week... potatoes and to start walking it out. Like really, potatoes? French fries, mais oui!
Well for once, I am done fasting so I am staying away from the carb section. Bring me some meat( ) and let the Keto fiesta begin( )!
O. K. let's go back (to) the walking advisement: since I am a true Canadian, from time to time, I executed(turned) myself right away in that direction. I am walking at least 10 minutes during my lunch break, and at least another 20 in the afternoon or evening. O.K., don't judge me, they gave me a minimum, but not maximum so theoretically as long as I keep the distance from other people, I can walk as long as I want!
No worries, we have supervised freedom. I ( )see every 5 min a Police car patrolling the area. At first, I didn't understand why, but then I realized they were keeping an eye at the park across the street, and making sure that people were maintaining ( ) physical distance and also that they were not using the barbecue area, since there('s) a fire ban on that.
I will not be around much in May. I am taking part in a flash fiction course. I can not use anything I post here, as most publishers consider this site as 'out in public domain!'
I'll drop by when I can. See ya later.
Be safe and well,
padumachitta
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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Hi I did some corrections, not to the end though, sorry.
After Coronella started to travel around the globe, most countries put their citizens in forced locked down in their own homes or in special places, that they called quarantine areas.
I am living in Alberta, and our provincial government relaxed a little bit (on)the rules of confinement and walking policy. Last week they sent us a pamphlet in which we were advice(d), for mental health, to walk at least 20 minutes a day.
Did you know, that a study performed by the University of Calgary, declared Edmonton as being on the 89(th) place for people that are walking daily. This study is based on data from Apple, I bet if they were consulting also, the smart section we will be on first place. Yeah, I am the proud owner of a Smart Samsung phone, and I am not payed for advertisement, damn it!
If we take a look at Belgium, the government advised the population to eat only twice a week... potatoes and to start walking it out. Like really, potatoes? French fries, mais oui!
Well for once, I am done fasting so I am staying away from the carb section. Bring me some meat( ) and let the Keto fiesta begin( )!
O. K. let's go back (to) the walking advisement: since I am a true Canadian, from time to time, I executed(turned) myself right away in that direction. I am walking at least 10 minutes during my lunch break, and at least another 20 in the afternoon or evening. O.K., don't judge me, they gave me a minimum, but not maximum so theoretically as long as I keep the distance from other people, I can walk as long as I want!
No worries, we have supervised freedom. I ( )see every 5 min a Police car patrolling the area. At first, I didn't understand why, but then I realized they were keeping an eye at the park across the street, and making sure that people were maintaining ( ) physical distance and also that they were not using the barbecue area, since there('s) a fire ban on that.
I will not be around much in May. I am taking part in a flash fiction course. I can not use anything I post here, as most publishers consider this site as 'out in public domain!'
I'll drop by when I can. See ya later.
Be safe and well,
padumachitta
Comment Written 03-May-2020
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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Good luck with the flash fiction course hand have lots of fun writing new stories:) Thank you for the corrections and for the review.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
in which we were advice [ advised ]
89--->89th
payed-->paid
Thank you, Iza, for taking me on your stroll around your neighborhood. I enjoyed walking with you. I like how you interspersed your thoughts throughout your discussion. Thanks for sharing. Be safe.
Respectfully, Jan
Keto festival beiging--->begin
every 5 min a Police--->every five minutes a police
since there it's a fire ban--->since there is a fire ban
I dash out to take a pick--->take a peek
this is how we call what other-->others
recharging battery, strategy---> no comma needed
Toilet paper--> toilet
I left the warm-->warmth
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in which we were advice [ advised ]
89--->89th
payed-->paid
Thank you, Iza, for taking me on your stroll around your neighborhood. I enjoyed walking with you. I like how you interspersed your thoughts throughout your discussion. Thanks for sharing. Be safe.
Respectfully, Jan
Keto festival beiging--->begin
every 5 min a Police--->every five minutes a police
since there it's a fire ban--->since there is a fire ban
I dash out to take a pick--->take a peek
this is how we call what other-->others
recharging battery, strategy---> no comma needed
Toilet paper--> toilet
I left the warm-->warmth
Comment Written 02-May-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
LOL!! ;) Oh, you are certainly are a card, my lady!! ;) ;) Loved this one as it is just so full of your personality!! ;) Thanx for sharing, Iza! :)
in which we were advice --> in which we were advised
know, that a study performed by the University of Calgary, declared --> know that a study performed by the University of Calgary declared
were consulting also, the --> were also consulting the
Well for once, I am done fasting so I am --> Well I, for one, am done fasting, so I am
back at the --> back to the
I executed myself right away in that direction. --> [not really sure what this is supposed to mean, but it says you killed yourself right away... lol! :) ;) Maybe try:] I got myself moving in that direction right away.
there it's a fire ban on that --> there is a fire ban in effect.
Now, that poor city, has --> Now that poor city has
of fire, than Ms. Coronella, because you --> of fire than of Ms. Coronella because you
noon; happy I am rushing out --> noon, and I am rushing happily out
Canada is tradition, once Victoria Day hits, this is year is 18th of May, everybody --> Canada, it is tradition that, once Victoria Day (May 18th this year) hits, everybody
it's the official --> is the official
neighborhood it's awesome and was blessed --> neighborhood is awesome and blessed
oasis; yup, in Alberta, this is how we call what other are wrongly advertise --> oasis. Yup, in Alberta, we call 'physical distancing' what others are wrongly advertising
Our Prime, got --> Our Prime Minister got
of choice, a beautiful --> of choice: a beautiful
occasionally, do hug --> occasionally do hug
part of my getting close to nature and recharging battery, strategy --> part of my 'getting close to nature and recharging battery' strategy
out, that I sneak out from his stash a bottle of his precious disinfectant. --> out that I sneak a bottle of his precious disinfectant from his stash.
stock on Toilet paper, but on --> stock up on toilet paper but on
left the warm of --> let the warmth of
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LOL!! ;) Oh, you are certainly are a card, my lady!! ;) ;) Loved this one as it is just so full of your personality!! ;) Thanx for sharing, Iza! :)
in which we were advice --> in which we were advised
know, that a study performed by the University of Calgary, declared --> know that a study performed by the University of Calgary declared
were consulting also, the --> were also consulting the
Well for once, I am done fasting so I am --> Well I, for one, am done fasting, so I am
back at the --> back to the
I executed myself right away in that direction. --> [not really sure what this is supposed to mean, but it says you killed yourself right away... lol! :) ;) Maybe try:] I got myself moving in that direction right away.
there it's a fire ban on that --> there is a fire ban in effect.
Now, that poor city, has --> Now that poor city has
of fire, than Ms. Coronella, because you --> of fire than of Ms. Coronella because you
noon; happy I am rushing out --> noon, and I am rushing happily out
Canada is tradition, once Victoria Day hits, this is year is 18th of May, everybody --> Canada, it is tradition that, once Victoria Day (May 18th this year) hits, everybody
it's the official --> is the official
neighborhood it's awesome and was blessed --> neighborhood is awesome and blessed
oasis; yup, in Alberta, this is how we call what other are wrongly advertise --> oasis. Yup, in Alberta, we call 'physical distancing' what others are wrongly advertising
Our Prime, got --> Our Prime Minister got
of choice, a beautiful --> of choice: a beautiful
occasionally, do hug --> occasionally do hug
part of my getting close to nature and recharging battery, strategy --> part of my 'getting close to nature and recharging battery' strategy
out, that I sneak out from his stash a bottle of his precious disinfectant. --> out that I sneak a bottle of his precious disinfectant from his stash.
stock on Toilet paper, but on --> stock up on toilet paper but on
left the warm of --> let the warmth of
Comment Written 02-May-2020
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Love this! So you are a tree-hugger, Iza. I have a fantastic big, impressive oak tree, giving maybe a hundred different birds nest-places in his branches. It gives me in the summer a large round of shadow under it. We need that when the sun becomes scorching hot.
That tree needs a hug. he deserves it, for all the good he does to me. After I read this chapter about Coronella, I am even more convinced that I should follow your example. In an hour or so I'll go do it, hugging and listening with my ear on its bark.
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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Love this! So you are a tree-hugger, Iza. I have a fantastic big, impressive oak tree, giving maybe a hundred different birds nest-places in his branches. It gives me in the summer a large round of shadow under it. We need that when the sun becomes scorching hot.
That tree needs a hug. he deserves it, for all the good he does to me. After I read this chapter about Coronella, I am even more convinced that I should follow your example. In an hour or so I'll go do it, hugging and listening with my ear on its bark.
Comment Written 02-May-2020
reply by the author on 05-May-2020
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Hi :) I hope your tree gave you some energy and hope. Thank you for reading and reviewing:) you are the best.
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Big smiles. My oak was so pleased!
Comment from DeboraDyess
This is great! We're not as tightly controlled here (small town in Texas), so my heart goes out to you each time I read. :)
What are your first 2 languages? Romianian, I'd guess and ...
Please know that, as I correct, I'm admiring you so much!
not payed for>>paid to advertise, or paid for advertising, either one.
Bring me some meats and let the Keto fiesta beging!>>Super funny line, but change beging to begin.
see a Police car>>see a police car
eye at the park >>eye (on)the park>> here, at least...
a pick at the neighborhood gardens>>Hmm...Do you mean 'pic' as in 'picture' or 'peak' as in 'a little look'?
in Canada is tradition>>it's tradition
hits, this is year is 18th of May, >>This reads a bit awkwardly. Perhaps reword it like this (or something like it)>>hits, this year on the 18th of May,
Victoria Day, in Canada, it's the official day when spring starts.>>Again, consider rewording. >>IN Canada, the official start date for spring is Victoria Day or IN Canada, spring officially starts on Victoria Day.
neighborhood it's awesome >>neighborhood (is) awesome
I occasionally, do hug trees. >>Okay, here's on of English's weird things...If you start a stance with 'occasionally', you need a comma after. But by saying 'I occasionally hug' you do not. SO...Either <> OR <> Weird, I know. lol
Yup, he will kill me if he founds out, that I sneak out from his stash a bottle of his precious disinfectant. >>LOVE the sentence, but it may need to reworded for flow. <
no ned to capitalize 'T' in toilet paper
I'd make the sentence about stockpiling hand sanitizer it's own paragraph or put it with the previous paragraph.
I left the warm of his embrace >>I'd say 'felt' or 'used' instead of 'left'.
Enjoyed your tree hugging adventure and your side-tracking onto other subjects. It made it feel like we were 'talking', as that's the way many conversations flow. :)
Blessings and stay healthy!
Deb
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This is great! We're not as tightly controlled here (small town in Texas), so my heart goes out to you each time I read. :)
What are your first 2 languages? Romianian, I'd guess and ...
Please know that, as I correct, I'm admiring you so much!
not payed for>>paid to advertise, or paid for advertising, either one.
Bring me some meats and let the Keto fiesta beging!>>Super funny line, but change beging to begin.
see a Police car>>see a police car
eye at the park >>eye (on)the park>> here, at least...
a pick at the neighborhood gardens>>Hmm...Do you mean 'pic' as in 'picture' or 'peak' as in 'a little look'?
in Canada is tradition>>it's tradition
hits, this is year is 18th of May, >>This reads a bit awkwardly. Perhaps reword it like this (or something like it)>>hits, this year on the 18th of May,
Victoria Day, in Canada, it's the official day when spring starts.>>Again, consider rewording. >>IN Canada, the official start date for spring is Victoria Day or IN Canada, spring officially starts on Victoria Day.
neighborhood it's awesome >>neighborhood (is) awesome
I occasionally, do hug trees. >>Okay, here's on of English's weird things...If you start a stance with 'occasionally', you need a comma after. But by saying 'I occasionally hug' you do not. SO...Either <> OR <
Yup, he will kill me if he founds out, that I sneak out from his stash a bottle of his precious disinfectant. >>LOVE the sentence, but it may need to reworded for flow. <
no ned to capitalize 'T' in toilet paper
I'd make the sentence about stockpiling hand sanitizer it's own paragraph or put it with the previous paragraph.
I left the warm of his embrace >>I'd say 'felt' or 'used' instead of 'left'.
Enjoyed your tree hugging adventure and your side-tracking onto other subjects. It made it feel like we were 'talking', as that's the way many conversations flow. :)
Blessings and stay healthy!
Deb
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Trees love us right back. Tree hugging does help.
Notice a few typos: "let the Keto fiesta beging!" (begin)
"I dash out to take a pick at the neighborhood gardens and my lovely kitties. " (peek)
"barbecue area, since there it's a fire ban on that." (there is)
"yup, in Alberta, this is how we call what other are wrongly advertise as Social distancing!" (what others are wrongly advertising)
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Trees love us right back. Tree hugging does help.
Notice a few typos: "let the Keto fiesta beging!" (begin)
"I dash out to take a pick at the neighborhood gardens and my lovely kitties. " (peek)
"barbecue area, since there it's a fire ban on that." (there is)
"yup, in Alberta, this is how we call what other are wrongly advertise as Social distancing!" (what others are wrongly advertising)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020
Comment from gingermo
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this diary entry. I could relate to the tree hugging as I do this myself occasionally and believe there is an energy exchange. The personification of the virus, (coronella,) was most effective. You ask for a editing of your writing and even though I am no expert I will do the best I can. I appreciated the humor in the reference to the husband and his hand sanitizer and the disinfection before and after the tree hugging.
Line 4: advice/advised
Line 8: 89th place. I would replace the comma with a full stop.
Line 9: Exchange 'will' by 'would.'
Line 11: 'potatoes only twice a week'
Line 16: Exchange 'at' by 'to'
Line 23: Exchange 'at' by 'on.'
Line 24: Full stop after street. Then 'They were making sure the people
Line 25: Exchange 'its' by 'is'
Line 33: Delete 'the'
Lines 36- 37: Reconstruction...'In Canada , Victoria Day is the traditional day for the arrival of spring. This year its on the eighteenth of May and everyone etc.
Line 44: exchange 'something' by 'anything'
Line 46: exchange 'its' by 'is'
Line 47: exchange 'that' by 'so'
Line 50: delete comma after anybody and put it after distancing.
Line 51: replace 'others are' with 'others'
Line 58: replace 'images is coming to life' with 'come to life'
Line 61: replace 'founds out that' with 'if he finds out I sneak a bottle of his precious disinfectant from his secret stash.
Line 68: replace ' I left the warm of his embrace to extract my sadness and despair' by 'I felt the warmth of his embrace extracting my sadness and despair.'+
I hope this review is encouraging rather than discouraging. The suggestions seem a lot but they are trivial. I congratulate you on writing
English so well even though it is your third language.
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I thoroughly enjoyed reading this diary entry. I could relate to the tree hugging as I do this myself occasionally and believe there is an energy exchange. The personification of the virus, (coronella,) was most effective. You ask for a editing of your writing and even though I am no expert I will do the best I can. I appreciated the humor in the reference to the husband and his hand sanitizer and the disinfection before and after the tree hugging.
Line 4: advice/advised
Line 8: 89th place. I would replace the comma with a full stop.
Line 9: Exchange 'will' by 'would.'
Line 11: 'potatoes only twice a week'
Line 16: Exchange 'at' by 'to'
Line 23: Exchange 'at' by 'on.'
Line 24: Full stop after street. Then 'They were making sure the people
Line 25: Exchange 'its' by 'is'
Line 33: Delete 'the'
Lines 36- 37: Reconstruction...'In Canada , Victoria Day is the traditional day for the arrival of spring. This year its on the eighteenth of May and everyone etc.
Line 44: exchange 'something' by 'anything'
Line 46: exchange 'its' by 'is'
Line 47: exchange 'that' by 'so'
Line 50: delete comma after anybody and put it after distancing.
Line 51: replace 'others are' with 'others'
Line 58: replace 'images is coming to life' with 'come to life'
Line 61: replace 'founds out that' with 'if he finds out I sneak a bottle of his precious disinfectant from his secret stash.
Line 68: replace ' I left the warm of his embrace to extract my sadness and despair' by 'I felt the warmth of his embrace extracting my sadness and despair.'+
I hope this review is encouraging rather than discouraging. The suggestions seem a lot but they are trivial. I congratulate you on writing
English so well even though it is your third language.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2020