The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "You took her"to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
13 total reviews
Comment from elchupakabra
I just jumped in on this chapter so I have not read the rest of the book, but I enjoyed what I have read here. This is really great work, thank you for sharing. I will have to check out the rest of the book sometime. Later daze.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I just jumped in on this chapter so I have not read the rest of the book, but I enjoyed what I have read here. This is really great work, thank you for sharing. I will have to check out the rest of the book sometime. Later daze.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Daze:) I am so happy you like it:)
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was a very good piece describing the pain and destruction of this stupid, useless pandemic. I am so very sorry for your loss. I lost my uncle during this mess (not due to Coronavirus, but still no one could be with him). May God bless you and yours.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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This was a very good piece describing the pain and destruction of this stupid, useless pandemic. I am so very sorry for your loss. I lost my uncle during this mess (not due to Coronavirus, but still no one could be with him). May God bless you and yours.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much Monica, and my condolences to you too.
Comment from sibhus
Ha, ha whoa this is some crazy shite. Good crazy shite. This is a blast is it horror if you LAO while your reading it. Great writing, and such a great fit for the crazy times that we are going through. This makes for an excellent enty to the contest, and good luck.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Ha, ha whoa this is some crazy shite. Good crazy shite. This is a blast is it horror if you LAO while your reading it. Great writing, and such a great fit for the crazy times that we are going through. This makes for an excellent enty to the contest, and good luck.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much and stay safe:)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I'm so sorry to hear that your grandmother passed away. Travel will hopefully get better. Don't ever give up on your health, stay well. Probably they will postpone the funeral until things get better.
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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I'm so sorry to hear that your grandmother passed away. Travel will hopefully get better. Don't ever give up on your health, stay well. Probably they will postpone the funeral until things get better.
Comment Written 01-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-May-2020
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Thank you so much Rosemary for your good wishes and for thinking about my grandmother. Have a lovely week end.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, Yes!! Open it up and set it free -- this world needs to love and soar again!! ;) Scary (sad!) but true approach to the Horror Contest, my lady -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Yes, Yes!! Open it up and set it free -- this world needs to love and soar again!! ;) Scary (sad!) but true approach to the Horror Contest, my lady -- thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much, Ms. Yvette
Comment from DeboraDyess
Oh, sweet Iza, I'm so sorry Losing a grandmother in any situation is painful, but this one...I cannot imagine.
There are some corrections, if you're interested. I know part of this wwas grieving, but it's also a contest entry, so I'm treating it as such.
A suggestion - put one character in italics, the other without. That will mae a super easy read for reviewers. There own't be confusion as to who is saying what.
You took() her, you crazy bitch!>>Comma not needed
Yes, I am! I am Coronella(,) the new God in town!
Love the line about 'bleach you right here and right now! Great!
want, I can take you(,) too!
I am not Chinese anymore(;) I am fucking UNIVERSAL and I('ve) come to reinstall THE ORDER.
I (extra space here - delete) wanted to see() if my vodoo works on them(,) too..
to have some fight; so I start>>I think I'd start a new sentence at 'So'.
In every country I went to,) I attacked different
and copy(/)paste their habits.>>I think it's correct to have a slash here and no space.
even in their precious locked down homes>>Scary. But I can feel the sarcasm in the statement.
- God is not sleeping; >>True! He is our hope.
- I am not scared of your God. >>While it goes against my grain (and yours), I think Coronella would say ''god', no capital.
Why don't you understand(? S)he was old, she wanted to be with her husband.
- You took my grandmother by not allowing me to travel back home and pay my respects.>>Technically, Coronella didn't take her. But she DID prevent you from saying goodbye and being with her. That might be more accurate, if you're shooting for accurate. In grief and anger, 'accurate' doesn't really count for much.
- Yeah, sure pin it(no need to space down)
on me! It's not my fault() that your hometown doesn't perform on-line services.
- I don't need the on-line circus;>>In the US, at least, we say 'online'
she spent the night alone in the chapel from the cemetery>>'by the cemetary'?
pm. She died at 6 a.m. >>You did PM one way and AM a different way. No matter which, but make it the same.
I am coming...(Y)ou will just feel my feverish breeze in your neck>>GREAT line
... that is how you will (k)now I have come!
some holly water>>holy water
an easy pray>>prey
but she got outlucked.>>she is out of luck??Never heard the word 'outlucked'. I like it, but I don't think it's a read word.
disinfectant>>disinfectant
sanctuary! (Y)ou can't stand
against, God!>>Wonderful!
dig out(,) to drill(,) to fan(,) to fish out(,) to grout(,) to poke(,) to rake(,) to ransack(,) to rummage(,) to scan(,) to scrutinize(,) to stir(,) to trim and to grub.
to participate (in or with) her last rites.
And on a personal note:
Sweetie, I am so sorry for your loss. Not just for your grandmother who, based on your faith, I'm assuming woke up with God at 6:01AM this morning, but also for the loss of your closure. I am sad for your family, as they try to figure out which 10 people who loved her can go to the funeral.
There is no death, Iza. Life only for those of us who love the Lord. Tae comfort in that.
I also want to comfort you with these words from the Bible:
For this we say unto you by the word of the Lord, that we which are alive and remain unto the coming of the Lord shall not prevent them which are asleep.
For the Lord himself shall descend from heaven with a shout, with the voice of the archangel, and with the trump of God: and the dead in Christ shall rise first:
Then we which are alive and remain shall be caught up together with them in the clouds, to meet the Lord in the air: and so shall we ever be with the Lord.
Wherefore comfort one another with these words
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Oh, sweet Iza, I'm so sorry Losing a grandmother in any situation is painful, but this one...I cannot imagine.
There are some corrections, if you're interested. I know part of this wwas grieving, but it's also a contest entry, so I'm treating it as such.
A suggestion - put one character in italics, the other without. That will mae a super easy read for reviewers. There own't be confusion as to who is saying what.
You took() her, you crazy bitch!>>Comma not needed
Yes, I am! I am Coronella(,) the new God in town!
Love the line about 'bleach you right here and right now! Great!
want, I can take you(,) too!
I am not Chinese anymore(;) I am fucking UNIVERSAL and I('ve) come to reinstall THE ORDER.
I (extra space here - delete) wanted to see() if my vodoo works on them(,) too..
to have some fight; so I start>>I think I'd start a new sentence at 'So'.
In every country I went to,) I attacked different
and copy(/)paste their habits.>>I think it's correct to have a slash here and no space.
even in their precious locked down homes>>Scary. But I can feel the sarcasm in the statement.
- God is not sleeping; >>True! He is our hope.
- I am not scared of your God. >>While it goes against my grain (and yours), I think Coronella would say ''god', no capital.
Why don't you understand(? S)he was old, she wanted to be with her husband.
- You took my grandmother by not allowing me to travel back home and pay my respects.>>Technically, Coronella didn't take her. But she DID prevent you from saying goodbye and being with her. That might be more accurate, if you're shooting for accurate. In grief and anger, 'accurate' doesn't really count for much.
- Yeah, sure pin it(no need to space down)
on me! It's not my fault() that your hometown doesn't perform on-line services.
- I don't need the on-line circus;>>In the US, at least, we say 'online'
she spent the night alone in the chapel from the cemetery>>'by the cemetary'?
pm. She died at 6 a.m. >>You did PM one way and AM a different way. No matter which, but make it the same.
I am coming...(Y)ou will just feel my feverish breeze in your neck>>GREAT line
... that is how you will (k)now I have come!
some holly water>>holy water
an easy pray>>prey
but she got outlucked.>>she is out of luck??Never heard the word 'outlucked'. I like it, but I don't think it's a read word.
disinfectant>>disinfectant
sanctuary! (Y)ou can't stand
against, God!>>Wonderful!
dig out(,) to drill(,) to fan(,) to fish out(,) to grout(,) to poke(,) to rake(,) to ransack(,) to rummage(,) to scan(,) to scrutinize(,) to stir(,) to trim and to grub.
to participate (in or with) her last rites.
And on a personal note:
Sweetie, I am so sorry for your loss. Not just for your grandmother who, based on your faith, I'm assuming woke up with God at 6:01AM this morning, but also for the loss of your closure. I am sad for your family, as they try to figure out which 10 people who loved her can go to the funeral.
There is no death, Iza. Life only for those of us who love the Lord. Tae comfort in that.
I also want to comfort you with these words from the Bible:
For this we say unto you by the word of the Lord, that we which are alive and remain unto the coming of the Lord shall not prevent them which are asleep.
For the Lord himself shall descend from heaven with a shout, with the voice of the archangel, and with the trump of God: and the dead in Christ shall rise first:
Then we which are alive and remain shall be caught up together with them in the clouds, to meet the Lord in the air: and so shall we ever be with the Lord.
Wherefore comfort one another with these words
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Hi Deb, so sorry for my delay in answering your heart touching feedback. You prayers have been heard. Last week my sister showed me via What's my grandmother grave. Have a blessed day my dear friend.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
My sincere condolences on the loss of your beloved Grandmother, Iza. You did a great job with this posting. I like the way you formatted your lines. I lie the back and forth of the talk with you and the virus. It reads well. Thank you for sharing this poignant contest entry.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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My sincere condolences on the loss of your beloved Grandmother, Iza. You did a great job with this posting. I like the way you formatted your lines. I lie the back and forth of the talk with you and the virus. It reads well. Thank you for sharing this poignant contest entry.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much Jan.
Comment from BethShelby
I'm so sorry about your grandmother. You personified Coronella and had quite a conversation with her. You had her talking back. This was interesting dialogue. I'm sure there are many who would like to scream and her. I don't know if this is serious rant or creative writing but I hope we'll be ready for this virus and that we can defeat it.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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I'm so sorry about your grandmother. You personified Coronella and had quite a conversation with her. You had her talking back. This was interesting dialogue. I'm sure there are many who would like to scream and her. I don't know if this is serious rant or creative writing but I hope we'll be ready for this virus and that we can defeat it.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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This is a serious rant, my grandma is no more. Thank you so much for reading and so sorry for my delay.
Comment from estory
What you speak of here is the frustrations we feel in not being able to spend time with our sick elderly, and not being able to mourn them properly when they die. We see you lashing out at the coronavirus with that holy water; and there's also a fair amount of wit and humor in this exchange between you and the virus. I think its great that you give the virus a personality and that gives us something to argue with, something to direct our anger at. We also see the triumph of faith and God over evil in the end of this chapter. It is our way out. estory
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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What you speak of here is the frustrations we feel in not being able to spend time with our sick elderly, and not being able to mourn them properly when they die. We see you lashing out at the coronavirus with that holy water; and there's also a fair amount of wit and humor in this exchange between you and the virus. I think its great that you give the virus a personality and that gives us something to argue with, something to direct our anger at. We also see the triumph of faith and God over evil in the end of this chapter. It is our way out. estory
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you so much my dear friend and please forgive my delay in answering your kindness and sincere words.
Comment from royowen
You've told the truth about this Coronavirus Iza, it's so true that this virus cannot stand against the Lord, in fact if God said to it "go back to hell where you belong" and it must obey. Beautifully written, Iza, you've done a great job my friend, blessings, Roy
Typo : If my vo(o)doo 2: this (it's) blaspheme. Is?
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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You've told the truth about this Coronavirus Iza, it's so true that this virus cannot stand against the Lord, in fact if God said to it "go back to hell where you belong" and it must obey. Beautifully written, Iza, you've done a great job my friend, blessings, Roy
Typo : If my vo(o)doo 2: this (it's) blaspheme. Is?
Comment Written 28-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2020
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Thank you and so sorry for this delay.
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Bless you Iza
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Bless you Iza