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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "A Warm Day In February"The fifteen Years of My Life
10 total reviews
Comment from forestport12
This proves the most compelling story is a true one and often when you share the strange but true and yes sometimes miraculous things. It's like after reading it to yourself, you might say, "I never would have believed it if I hadn't been there. Worthy!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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This proves the most compelling story is a true one and often when you share the strange but true and yes sometimes miraculous things. It's like after reading it to yourself, you might say, "I never would have believed it if I hadn't been there. Worthy!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. It happened a long time ago but it is still very fresh in my mine. I really appreciate the six stars.
Comment from Sankey
Glad for Brett's Challenge. He is one of my favourite Prose writers. This was a great story. True I am guessing? Very real in some places of USA I am sure. Noo spags. I wish you well.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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Glad for Brett's Challenge. He is one of my favourite Prose writers. This was a great story. True I am guessing? Very real in some places of USA I am sure. Noo spags. I wish you well.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review. Yes it is very true. I was only ten but I remember it like it was yesterday. I can't believe you gave me another one of those sixes. This was in Mississippi. They are pretty much all over the US except the North and far West.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This rings like a true story. However if so what a horrible thing to live through, and even more difficult to write about. In either case, the author did a convincing job of detailed description.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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This rings like a true story. However if so what a horrible thing to live through, and even more difficult to write about. In either case, the author did a convincing job of detailed description.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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This is very much a true story. It happened to me many years ago but it is still very fresh in my mind. Than you for reading and commenting. I've written stories and poems about it before.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is an amazing non-fiction story. Your family was spared for a reason. So many killed and injured and your family came through it fine. Wonderful story!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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This is an amazing non-fiction story. Your family was spared for a reason. So many killed and injured and your family came through it fine. Wonderful story!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much Rebecca, I really appreciate the review and comments.
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You're welcome. Good luck in the contest.
Comment from zanya
Simply a superb read filled with emotion and drama and colour and an act of God and great dialogue - from grown-ups and kids - perspective is well balanced - I feel like I have just survived a tornado !!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Simply a superb read filled with emotion and drama and colour and an act of God and great dialogue - from grown-ups and kids - perspective is well balanced - I feel like I have just survived a tornado !!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the wonderful comments and six star review. It is so much appreciated.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Wow! What a harrowing experience! You've recounted it in such amazing detail, it must be seared into your memory. This is really a wonderful story of your family's survival of a deadly tornado, although it was tragic for so many others. It's incredible that you were able to rebuild in such a short time. Sadly, there must have been many funerals in that small town, and a tremendous need for outside assistance from doctors and nurses -- maybe the Red Cross?
I found a lot of errors for you, and have included the suggested corrections:
Tomorrow would be Valentine Day.
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Tomorrow would be Valentine's Day.
We were supposed to have our school Valentine Party
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We were supposed to have our school Valentine's Party
an emergency meeting with the Mississippi's governor,
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an emergency meeting with Mississippi's governor,
Just yesterday, we been given a mimeographed sheet
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Just yesterday, we'd been given a mimeographed sheet
"No, you may not! You know its too early.
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"No, you may not! You know it's too early.
You need shoes with rubber soles in case there is lightening.
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You need shoes with rubber soles in case there is lightning.
in an unpainted frame house that must of have been built
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in an unpainted frame house that must have been built
They had no electricity nor running water.
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They had no electricity or running water.
Grandma cooked on iron wood stove.
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Grandma cooked on an iron wood stove.
In the fenced pasture. There there two cows, with calves, a mule, and a horse.
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In the fenced pasture, there were two cows with calves, a mule, and a horse.
often stopped by to purchace a bottle of it.
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often stopped by to purchase a bottle of it.
occasionally he had a flair-up,
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occasionally he had a flare-up,
and grandpa was yelling at him.
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and Grandma was yelling at him.
and make sure there no snakes in there.
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and make sure there are no snakes in there."
Eva was my grandma's old maid sister
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Eva was my Grandma's old maid sister
I jumped back on my bike and took off peddling as fast as I could.
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I jumped back on my bike and took off pedaling as fast as I could.
The Sky had gotten darker,
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The sky had gotten darker,
Mom, opened the back door to look out,
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Mom opened the back door to look out,
Mon wasted no time getting to me.
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Mom wasted no time getting to me.
"How did we get here?," I asked.
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"How did we get here?" I asked.
she lead the way up the road,
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she led the way up the road,
We all alive.
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We're all alive.
and had kept going hoping to find us here.
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he had kept going, hoping to find us here.
'We have to go somewhere
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"We have to go somewhere
It cooling off, " Dad said.
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It's cooling off," Dad said.
it wasn't long until neighbor's began
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It wasn't long until neighbors began
we were in an new house
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we were in a new house
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I'm wondering if they cancelled school and called the emergency governor's meeting because they were expecting storms -- probably, yes? Obviously your mother was a woman of great faith. I believe God really answered those prayers to get you all through the tornado, unscathed. So you do have a purpose! May He continue to keep you safe through these times that are scary in other ways.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Wow! What a harrowing experience! You've recounted it in such amazing detail, it must be seared into your memory. This is really a wonderful story of your family's survival of a deadly tornado, although it was tragic for so many others. It's incredible that you were able to rebuild in such a short time. Sadly, there must have been many funerals in that small town, and a tremendous need for outside assistance from doctors and nurses -- maybe the Red Cross?
I found a lot of errors for you, and have included the suggested corrections:
Tomorrow would be Valentine Day.
-->
Tomorrow would be Valentine's Day.
We were supposed to have our school Valentine Party
-->
We were supposed to have our school Valentine's Party
an emergency meeting with the Mississippi's governor,
-->
an emergency meeting with Mississippi's governor,
Just yesterday, we been given a mimeographed sheet
-->
Just yesterday, we'd been given a mimeographed sheet
"No, you may not! You know its too early.
-->
"No, you may not! You know it's too early.
You need shoes with rubber soles in case there is lightening.
-->
You need shoes with rubber soles in case there is lightning.
in an unpainted frame house that must of have been built
-->
in an unpainted frame house that must have been built
They had no electricity nor running water.
-->
They had no electricity or running water.
Grandma cooked on iron wood stove.
-->
Grandma cooked on an iron wood stove.
In the fenced pasture. There there two cows, with calves, a mule, and a horse.
-->
In the fenced pasture, there were two cows with calves, a mule, and a horse.
often stopped by to purchace a bottle of it.
-->
often stopped by to purchase a bottle of it.
occasionally he had a flair-up,
-->
occasionally he had a flare-up,
and grandpa was yelling at him.
-->
and Grandma was yelling at him.
and make sure there no snakes in there.
-->
and make sure there are no snakes in there."
Eva was my grandma's old maid sister
-->
Eva was my Grandma's old maid sister
I jumped back on my bike and took off peddling as fast as I could.
-->
I jumped back on my bike and took off pedaling as fast as I could.
The Sky had gotten darker,
-->
The sky had gotten darker,
Mom, opened the back door to look out,
-->
Mom opened the back door to look out,
Mon wasted no time getting to me.
-->
Mom wasted no time getting to me.
"How did we get here?," I asked.
-->
"How did we get here?" I asked.
she lead the way up the road,
-->
she led the way up the road,
We all alive.
-->
We're all alive.
and had kept going hoping to find us here.
-->
he had kept going, hoping to find us here.
'We have to go somewhere
-->
"We have to go somewhere
It cooling off, " Dad said.
-->
It's cooling off," Dad said.
it wasn't long until neighbor's began
-->
It wasn't long until neighbors began
we were in an new house
-->
we were in a new house
***
I'm wondering if they cancelled school and called the emergency governor's meeting because they were expecting storms -- probably, yes? Obviously your mother was a woman of great faith. I believe God really answered those prayers to get you all through the tornado, unscathed. So you do have a purpose! May He continue to keep you safe through these times that are scary in other ways.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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I really appreciate the review and for you taking so much time to find typos and other things I missed. I had corrected about ten of them but you found many more. I really liked your wonderful comments. I don't think they canceled school because of the weather. Back then we didn't get prior weather warning like we do today. No one knew before hand. My mother did have a lot of faith. Many things happen that defy explanation such as how do we get placed so gently in a sitting position and why did Mom feel we were peacefully floating. I think it was a miracle. I would nominate you for reviewing but I already have. You've helped before.
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You're very welcome, my friend. I was happy to help. Your comments are interesting to read. I do think your lives were preserved miraculously. Such an amazing story!
It's so nice to be appreciated :-)
- Mary Kay
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Beth, this was you! I guess I didn't recognize your writing, because you were writing about a completely different time of your life than I'm usually reading about, in your ongoing book. This had to have taken place before 1950, maybe the late 40s? It's just amazing that you lived through it, and I truly believe it was a miracle.
Congratulations on winning the contest!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very well-told account of a Spring tornado coming through... tornadoes are an awful even that can turn your life upside down (or worse), but they almost always 'change' something when they hit close to home. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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A very well-told account of a Spring tornado coming through... tornadoes are an awful even that can turn your life upside down (or worse), but they almost always 'change' something when they hit close to home. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the contest! ;)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Comment from royowen
I think if we survive anything as intense as that storm, God does have a reason and a mission for life, I've survived a few life threatening instances in my life, and now I know the reason,.. to pick up some typos here, heh heh. Well done nicely written, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : We have (lightening) lightning. One lightens a load. 2 : dug into (a) small embankment. 3: we (are) all alive, 4: it('s) cooling off. 5 : It was not long before the neighbour(')s
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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I think if we survive anything as intense as that storm, God does have a reason and a mission for life, I've survived a few life threatening instances in my life, and now I know the reason,.. to pick up some typos here, heh heh. Well done nicely written, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : We have (lightening) lightning. One lightens a load. 2 : dug into (a) small embankment. 3: we (are) all alive, 4: it('s) cooling off. 5 : It was not long before the neighbour(')s
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review an comments. I know you are right. I do thank you for showing me my typos.
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Don?t be discouraged, it was my sad humour, this happens to all of us, especially me. A good story most absorbing, Roy
Comment from samandlancelot
So scary. You told your story well with good pacing. I wondered all the way through if anyone would be hurt. Sorry for those who were hurt, but amazed that none of your family was hurt.
Four stars for the corrections needed. Let me know if you make the changes, and I'll raise your rating.
we (had) been given a mimeographed sheet to bring home,
Grandma cooked on (an) iron wood stove.
dug into the side of (a) small embankment.
In the fenced pasture. There (delete period & "There") there two cows,
attempting to put on his brogans, and grandpa (grandma) was yelling at him.
Mom, (delete comma) opened the back door to look out, and the wind tore it from her grip.
The door slammed shut with (a) loud clap.
Mon (Mom) wasted no time getting to me.
she lead (led) the way up the road,
Two heads appeared at the door looking over (delete 'over') out over a ripped off porch.
We (we're) all alive
and had (delete 'and had') kept going hoping to find us
here.
It (It's) cooling off, " Dad said.
it (It) wasn't long until neighbor's (neighbors) began to show up and offer help.
we were in an (change 'an' to 'a') new house and things had settled
Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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So scary. You told your story well with good pacing. I wondered all the way through if anyone would be hurt. Sorry for those who were hurt, but amazed that none of your family was hurt.
Four stars for the corrections needed. Let me know if you make the changes, and I'll raise your rating.
we (had) been given a mimeographed sheet to bring home,
Grandma cooked on (an) iron wood stove.
dug into the side of (a) small embankment.
In the fenced pasture. There (delete period & "There") there two cows,
attempting to put on his brogans, and grandpa (grandma) was yelling at him.
Mom, (delete comma) opened the back door to look out, and the wind tore it from her grip.
The door slammed shut with (a) loud clap.
Mon (Mom) wasted no time getting to me.
she lead (led) the way up the road,
Two heads appeared at the door looking over (delete 'over') out over a ripped off porch.
We (we're) all alive
and had (delete 'and had') kept going hoping to find us
here.
It (It's) cooling off, " Dad said.
it (It) wasn't long until neighbor's (neighbors) began to show up and offer help.
we were in an (change 'an' to 'a') new house and things had settled
Patricia
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for finding all those typo and errors. I think I've fixed them all, but you don't need to do anything because you gave me five stars.
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Ok. That saved me a step. Take care.
Comment from thoughtgame2
Very good and intriguing story, it lets you know the power of the master of this world. say we all have a number...but they never say the number can change for all of us . Live right .Thank you.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Very good and intriguing story, it lets you know the power of the master of this world. say we all have a number...but they never say the number can change for all of us . Live right .Thank you.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
