Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is an interesting short story in which you have incorporated several elements in a short space:
Dad upstairs
Friends making noise
Jake's desire to take Deb to the dance
Deb building a fire
Deb's dad a chef
Jake, burning with love, never gets to ask Deb to the dance.
Best of luck in the contest.
Marilyn

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya

Comment from January L'Angelle

Excellent

This is very sweet. I like your story about the love of a young boy and a girl who knows how to work a pizza oven. The story itself worked and the dialogue was great! Respectfully, -January L.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020

Thanks for reviewing zanya

Comment from richie b

Good

This is my first viewing of a contest using this format. You have a clever mind to write this story. This contest inspires creativity and you passed the test!

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020

Thanks for those encouraging words zanya