Honey Bee
A bee doing his job.6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This bee poem, Honey Bee, takes the reader through the bee's progress, from stopping by Miss Flower's display to manufacturing that sweet honey. Nice.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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This bee poem, Honey Bee, takes the reader through the bee's progress, from stopping by Miss Flower's display to manufacturing that sweet honey. Nice.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2020
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Thanks for the read and the feedback.
Comment from faith bosire
Wow this is a good poem about how functional and hardworking a bee is.
Great work it's short and straight to the heart keep it up but also add something prompting
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Wow this is a good poem about how functional and hardworking a bee is.
Great work it's short and straight to the heart keep it up but also add something prompting
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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What needs improvement? I would appreciate your advice.
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OK you could add the color of the morning glory and it's sweetness which attracts all the honey bees.
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Thanks for the ideas.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
A very descriptive entry. I like the language you have chosen to describe the Bee. I also like how your sentences flow over the lines and into the next. I think it is really effective.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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A very descriptive entry. I like the language you have chosen to describe the Bee. I also like how your sentences flow over the lines and into the next. I think it is really effective.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks much for your read and your feedback.
Comment from Martie Zuckerman
Your words are wonderfully descriptive and create great visuals. Love the choice of "his uniform" and the fact that he "ambles". Just terrific! Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Your words are wonderfully descriptive and create great visuals. Love the choice of "his uniform" and the fact that he "ambles". Just terrific! Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your encouraging comments.
Comment from Puzzle
I love how you referred to his coloring as a uniform! I never thought of it like that before! This was super cute and a bit informative. I enjoyed it. And I like the black and yellow layout. Nice!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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I love how you referred to his coloring as a uniform! I never thought of it like that before! This was super cute and a bit informative. I enjoyed it. And I like the black and yellow layout. Nice!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the read and encouraging review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and
presentation.
-Did you see Google's
art for Earth Day? It
was really cute.
-You have written a
very good poem for the contest.
-The imagery paints a vivid
word picture.
-I especially like the opening
lines with his "black and
yellow uniform" and being
"a team player."
-A good second verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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-Nice image and
presentation.
-Did you see Google's
art for Earth Day? It
was really cute.
-You have written a
very good poem for the contest.
-The imagery paints a vivid
word picture.
-I especially like the opening
lines with his "black and
yellow uniform" and being
"a team player."
-A good second verse, too.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020
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Thanks so much for the read and encouraging review.
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You are quite welcome.
