A Chosen Path
maybe a Petarchan Sonnet27 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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I have enjoyed reading your wonderful and beautiful poetry. The sentences flow with clarity. It is clear and concise. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Nice. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the comments and all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Benjohnsonjr
An extremely good rendition of a difficult form. As a Christian I love the back that you've focused on the person and work of Christ and how our lives can be transformed by him. As a poet, I think you've done a wonderful job with the rhyme scheme. The only line that jarred me a little was:
"What tenets every human should hold dear"
I would have perhaps said "The tenets every human should hold dear", but that's just a matter of preference. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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An extremely good rendition of a difficult form. As a Christian I love the back that you've focused on the person and work of Christ and how our lives can be transformed by him. As a poet, I think you've done a wonderful job with the rhyme scheme. The only line that jarred me a little was:
"What tenets every human should hold dear"
I would have perhaps said "The tenets every human should hold dear", but that's just a matter of preference. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2022
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Hi Ben,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I will check on your correction.
Joan
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your poem, DP. You did a good job with the rhymes
and pacing. Your words were well thought out and told a great
and true story. As I'm not familiar with this style, I will not comment
on it. I do know it has a different rhyme scheme than an English
sonnet. Your words painted a picture for readers.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I enjoyed your poem, DP. You did a good job with the rhymes
and pacing. Your words were well thought out and told a great
and true story. As I'm not familiar with this style, I will not comment
on it. I do know it has a different rhyme scheme than an English
sonnet. Your words painted a picture for readers.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing. I am glad you liked it
Maybe I?ll put the rules in the notes.
Joan
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You have been writing for quite a long time, and I see numerous ribbons of The Best kind. How many fans have you that peek in every time you submit a piece, Well done and obviously appreciated.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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You have been writing for quite a long time, and I see numerous ribbons of The Best kind. How many fans have you that peek in every time you submit a piece, Well done and obviously appreciated.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Yes, I have. I have several fans with which a swap reviews each time we post. Thanks for your review, Tom.
Joan
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was a very beautiful poem. I loved how softly this was written. There is a gentleness to it. I compare the tone to the way I picture Christ. His calm demeanor. The sense of peace. Well written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This was a very beautiful poem. I loved how softly this was written. There is a gentleness to it. I compare the tone to the way I picture Christ. His calm demeanor. The sense of peace. Well written. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks for your kind words and high rating. Gretchen. I am glad you think it felt gentle.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
You took us from the Nativity to Easter in your lovely Petrarchan Sonnet and summarized the gospel in these fourteen lines. It seems that the rhyme scheme is different from the Shakespearean one. Thanks for repromoting to share!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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You took us from the Nativity to Easter in your lovely Petrarchan Sonnet and summarized the gospel in these fourteen lines. It seems that the rhyme scheme is different from the Shakespearean one. Thanks for repromoting to share!
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I am glad you liked it, Helen. The rhyme scheme it set by the way Petrarch wrote his sonnets. It is also called and Italian sonnet.
Joan
Comment from Teri7
This is a very beautiful and very well written and so true poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive and true words. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This is a very beautiful and very well written and so true poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive and true words. Thank you for sharing. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I am honored by your six-star review, Teri. Thank you very much.
Joan
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are heartfelt, meaningful, descriptive and creative.
The read of these beautiful words convey hope. I really loved the last stanza as it confirms so clearly the love of our Savior. The poem flows and
connects well. Hope you are having a great Sunday!....Maria
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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The author's words are heartfelt, meaningful, descriptive and creative.
The read of these beautiful words convey hope. I really loved the last stanza as it confirms so clearly the love of our Savior. The poem flows and
connects well. Hope you are having a great Sunday!....Maria
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the nice review and the good day wishes. I hope you had a good Sunday too, Maria
Joan
Comment from justafan
I'm not one who knows about the different types of poetry, so I can't rate on that. I rate by what touches me and this absolutely does.
Beautiful work and lifted my spirits :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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I'm not one who knows about the different types of poetry, so I can't rate on that. I rate by what touches me and this absolutely does.
Beautiful work and lifted my spirits :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. I am glad it touched you and lifted your spirits.
I am honored by the six star rating
Joan
Comment from Eternal Muse
This has great imagery and visuals. I am not sure about a Plutarchan sonnet, but I wonder if iambic pentamer is a requirement. Iambic pentamer or tetrameter are usually requirement for a sonnet. You don't have an iambic meter.
It's great as a stand alone poem but I am not sure this qualifies as a sonnet.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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This has great imagery and visuals. I am not sure about a Plutarchan sonnet, but I wonder if iambic pentamer is a requirement. Iambic pentamer or tetrameter are usually requirement for a sonnet. You don't have an iambic meter.
It's great as a stand alone poem but I am not sure this qualifies as a sonnet.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2022
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Thanks for the positive comments and the constructive criticism,. I have problems with iambic pentameter, that is why I included 'maybe' in the description of the poem
Joan
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Remember, the iambic meter is da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM, da-DUM (lol). 10 syllables, 5 metric "feet". Look in my portfolio, I have a lot of sonnets there, it's my favorite form.
