A Chosen Path
maybe a Petarchan Sonnet27 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Excellent faith based poem that describes Christ's journey in life. "And showed us the way to faith filled life" is a great line that captures well what we need to learn from His teaching and life. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Excellent faith based poem that describes Christ's journey in life. "And showed us the way to faith filled life" is a great line that captures well what we need to learn from His teaching and life. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thanks for the nice review and high rating, Elaine. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I love the Topic of your poem! It's very well written problem and I have to agree. really enjoyed reading your poem and I think you use perfect words to describe Jesus and His Love for us.
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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I love the Topic of your poem! It's very well written problem and I have to agree. really enjoyed reading your poem and I think you use perfect words to describe Jesus and His Love for us.
Comment Written 19-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thanks for the nice review and high rating, Alexandra. Both are much appreciated
Joan
Comment from Wendy G
I am not a sufficiently wise or knowledgeable person to comment on whether it is Petrarchan or not, but I do know that I enjoyed it, and felt uplifted by your true words. To me it is beautifully written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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I am not a sufficiently wise or knowledgeable person to comment on whether it is Petrarchan or not, but I do know that I enjoyed it, and felt uplifted by your true words. To me it is beautifully written.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thanks for the high praise, Wendy. I appreciate all the stars.
Joan
Comment from Aiona
Joan, I love that you worked to fill in a Petrachan sonnet structure. I had to Google to figure out the differences between a Shakespearean sonnet versus a Petrachan sonnet structure.
The rhyme scheme fits the bill: ABBAABBA CDECDE
And each line has ten beats/syllables, except the third line has 9 syllables: "Telling us we had nothing to fear"
I don't see a definite iambic pentameter meter though.
As for the topic, the Petrachan sonnet has a volta between the octave and the sestet. I feel that the volta comes between the 10th and the 11th lines, when you switch from His teaching during his life, to His teaching by His sacrifice on the cross.
Or perhaps even with his resurrection and forgiveness, you can find a volta, in which case, it's before the final couplet, which is often more found in a Shakespearean sonnet, per Google-pedia.
Whatever the case, it's a lovely work!
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Joan, I love that you worked to fill in a Petrachan sonnet structure. I had to Google to figure out the differences between a Shakespearean sonnet versus a Petrachan sonnet structure.
The rhyme scheme fits the bill: ABBAABBA CDECDE
And each line has ten beats/syllables, except the third line has 9 syllables: "Telling us we had nothing to fear"
I don't see a definite iambic pentameter meter though.
As for the topic, the Petrachan sonnet has a volta between the octave and the sestet. I feel that the volta comes between the 10th and the 11th lines, when you switch from His teaching during his life, to His teaching by His sacrifice on the cross.
Or perhaps even with his resurrection and forgiveness, you can find a volta, in which case, it's before the final couplet, which is often more found in a Shakespearean sonnet, per Google-pedia.
Whatever the case, it's a lovely work!
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 19-May-2023
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Thanks for the thorough review. I am glad you looked it up to see that I did these things incorrectly. I will check them out. I have always had a hard time with iambic pentameter.
Joan
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine faithful poem full of deep devotion and belief here and I enjoyed this honest and sincere write full of passion and forgiveness, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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A fine faithful poem full of deep devotion and belief here and I enjoyed this honest and sincere write full of passion and forgiveness, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Thanks for these raves, Dolly. They are much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent Petarchan Sonnet to celebrate God's glory. The One who provides and love us unconditionally. He forgives us and we can find peace in Him.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Excellent Petarchan Sonnet to celebrate God's glory. The One who provides and love us unconditionally. He forgives us and we can find peace in Him.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 18-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Hi MariVal,
Thanks for the nice comments and all the stars.
Have a nice day.
Joan
Comment from Janel Mock
God bless! Thank you for writing this! Our lord and savior has loved us even before we were born and has a very special path for all if we allow him to do what he does best. I appreciate your poem! ~Janel
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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God bless! Thank you for writing this! Our lord and savior has loved us even before we were born and has a very special path for all if we allow him to do what he does best. I appreciate your poem! ~Janel
Comment Written 17-May-2023
reply by the author on 18-May-2023
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Hi Janel.
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment from Gloria ....
Hi Joan. This is a lovely poem, but as for a Petrarchan sonnet you are missing five lines in the octave, but the sestet is written to order, minus the iambic metre. You may need to find the missing lines. lol
Great job and as always a pleasure to read your work. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Hi Joan. This is a lovely poem, but as for a Petrarchan sonnet you are missing five lines in the octave, but the sestet is written to order, minus the iambic metre. You may need to find the missing lines. lol
Great job and as always a pleasure to read your work. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Hey Gloria,
This is not the way I wrote it. Someone stole those lines. I have found them. Please reread the poem. I have always had problems with iambic pentameter. I have read somewhere that is is easier to write iambic pentameter using British English than American English.
Joan
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Yes I know that wasn't how you originally wrote it. But the missing lines are found now. If you ever want to run something by me for iambic metre just ask. :)
Comment from Regina Elliott
Dear poet, a very beauteous
Christian poem filled with
lovely ethereal imagery.
I really enjoyed reading such
a positive and heavenly
sonnet. May you have a
wondrous rest of the week.
Many blessings to you. ~
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Dear poet, a very beauteous
Christian poem filled with
lovely ethereal imagery.
I really enjoyed reading such
a positive and heavenly
sonnet. May you have a
wondrous rest of the week.
Many blessings to you. ~
Comment Written 16-May-2023
reply by the author on 17-May-2023
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Thanks for such kind comments and for all the stars, Regina.
Joan
Comment from Sanku
In His passion he gave us many signs /of his love and forgiveness...It is absolutely right .If we live by holding on to the tenets we have the world of peace within us...
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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In His passion he gave us many signs /of his love and forgiveness...It is absolutely right .If we live by holding on to the tenets we have the world of peace within us...
Comment Written 08-Nov-2022
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2022
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Hi Sanku,
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Both are much appreciated.
Joan
