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Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job f getting the point across. The writer taps into the readers mind as the writer puts the readers mind to work. The message is clear as wisdom is a major key to life.
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The writer does a good job f getting the point across. The writer taps into the readers mind as the writer puts the readers mind to work. The message is clear as wisdom is a major key to life.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Galactia
Lovely little poem, i like the alliterations of the (F) words (Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast.)
when i read it i percceive it telling me that many of us believe in false teachings/ belief. Or you can also read it as, a growth within yourself what you may of believed to be right has altered when your older and you learn from your experience in life making you more wiser.
great job
Regards
Tia
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Lovely little poem, i like the alliterations of the (F) words (Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast.)
when i read it i percceive it telling me that many of us believe in false teachings/ belief. Or you can also read it as, a growth within yourself what you may of believed to be right has altered when your older and you learn from your experience in life making you more wiser.
great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Tina McKala
good poem. interesting way of delivering the message, the "f"sounds of the last line and "s"sounds of the third line were effective.
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good poem. interesting way of delivering the message, the "f"sounds of the last line and "s"sounds of the third line were effective.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Cedar
This is another piece of interesting writing. I can feel the beat of this one much better. However, I still don't totally understand your meaning, but we're getting there.
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This is another piece of interesting writing. I can feel the beat of this one much better. However, I still don't totally understand your meaning, but we're getting there.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I can go with this one, it is in the same theme of many others in the 5-7-5 style, but you continue to make it 'yours' the difference is subtle but there. I like the way you have described 'fools'! Another most interesting read. :) Sandra
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I can go with this one, it is in the same theme of many others in the 5-7-5 style, but you continue to make it 'yours' the difference is subtle but there. I like the way you have described 'fools'! Another most interesting read. :) Sandra
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from gene roush
I love the first line it chimes of truth.
The rest of the poem doesn't rise to that level for me. And even though the last line is also very good it doesn't seem to fit the theme.
You set the bar high with the first line, it was excellent. thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I love the first line it chimes of truth.
The rest of the poem doesn't rise to that level for me. And even though the last line is also very good it doesn't seem to fit the theme.
You set the bar high with the first line, it was excellent. thanks for sharing
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Kaine Darcwater
You seem to write in riddles. Of course, I know that your poems are not riddles. Just difficult to understand because they are so full of wisdom forgotten or ignored. What does this one say to me? Wisdom can be shared many ways and not all of those ways are good. Not all the wisdom is true. We must decipher the good from the bad or learn how. Am I right or wrong? Kudos. ;)
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You seem to write in riddles. Of course, I know that your poems are not riddles. Just difficult to understand because they are so full of wisdom forgotten or ignored. What does this one say to me? Wisdom can be shared many ways and not all of those ways are good. Not all the wisdom is true. We must decipher the good from the bad or learn how. Am I right or wrong? Kudos. ;)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Michael Wayne
I like this piece. I would like it even more without the notes. I don't think it is needed in this case to provide descriptions for the terms. It would have been better to let readers make their own interpretations.
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I like this piece. I would like it even more without the notes. I don't think it is needed in this case to provide descriptions for the terms. It would have been better to let readers make their own interpretations.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a brief piece of writing about wisdom. Well, as usual, it is difficult to find a connecting thread to your thoughts, but the last line is very meaningful and sounds good because of the beautiful alliteration. kudos
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This is a brief piece of writing about wisdom. Well, as usual, it is difficult to find a connecting thread to your thoughts, but the last line is very meaningful and sounds good because of the beautiful alliteration. kudos
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Treischel
A very deeply profound and well written 5-7-5-7-7 formatted Poem that hails the ancient wisdom that glows throughout the world, while false doctrine rules now. Very nicely put.
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A very deeply profound and well written 5-7-5-7-7 formatted Poem that hails the ancient wisdom that glows throughout the world, while false doctrine rules now. Very nicely put.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
