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Comment from Rondeno
And you know which ones are the fake fables? How so? They fade fast ... Christian church attendance is dropping every year ... are the two things connected?
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And you know which ones are the fake fables? How so? They fade fast ... Christian church attendance is dropping every year ... are the two things connected?
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Starlit Ink
There is wisdom and also hope in this write. Although there are many shades of grey, the sun still shines on. Wisdom shines and falsehoods can indeed fall. Nice alliteration in the last line.
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There is wisdom and also hope in this write. Although there are many shades of grey, the sun still shines on. Wisdom shines and falsehoods can indeed fall. Nice alliteration in the last line.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Dark, salutes false light,
Shades truth, soars humdrum, hourly
Sun shines silent still;
Timeless wisdom glows whole earth,
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast.
Albeit short, I found this understandable,ALD.
Margaret
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Dark, salutes false light,
Shades truth, soars humdrum, hourly
Sun shines silent still;
Timeless wisdom glows whole earth,
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast.
Albeit short, I found this understandable,ALD.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very deep and meaningful poem. You have used metaphors well in this insightful poem. You are really working hard on this book. Thanks for sharing this~Debbie
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A very deep and meaningful poem. You have used metaphors well in this insightful poem. You are really working hard on this book. Thanks for sharing this~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from yonashalom
Thanks for the notes to help explain this. It is really good in symbolism. I particularly like the second last line. Reminds me of G-d Spirit hovering over the face of the earth in creation. The last line is pretty cool with the alliteration and f sounds. Nice work. ~Yona
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Thanks for the notes to help explain this. It is really good in symbolism. I particularly like the second last line. Reminds me of G-d Spirit hovering over the face of the earth in creation. The last line is pretty cool with the alliteration and f sounds. Nice work. ~Yona
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from MelissaBickel
This makes me think of False Teachers. The light will always be there, it has to be sought. Many find it, many don't.
Great alliteration there at the end.
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This makes me think of False Teachers. The light will always be there, it has to be sought. Many find it, many don't.
Great alliteration there at the end.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from CR Delport
A lovely poem that is well written and well delivered. You write with a lovely voice that is easy to follow. I love the art work.
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A lovely poem that is well written and well delivered. You write with a lovely voice that is easy to follow. I love the art work.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from rjuselius
"Dark, salutes false light,
Shades truth, soars humdrum, hourly
Sun shines silent still;
Timeless wisdom glows whole earth,
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast."
i love the personification of the elements! and the allteration flows nicely!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
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"Dark, salutes false light,
Shades truth, soars humdrum, hourly
Sun shines silent still;
Timeless wisdom glows whole earth,
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast."
i love the personification of the elements! and the allteration flows nicely!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from mauial
I love your use of strong alliteration in this poem to carry a very good message. I especailly like the very last line with the f sounds. Yes false light sadly hides the true light, but truth has never died out and it will dominate in the end.
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I love your use of strong alliteration in this poem to carry a very good message. I especailly like the very last line with the f sounds. Yes false light sadly hides the true light, but truth has never died out and it will dominate in the end.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written very creative I like your style this is a strong g poem that is very well presented well done regards Jill
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This is well written very creative I like your style this is a strong g poem that is very well presented well done regards Jill
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
