Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

i really enjoyed this...especially the line...sun shines silent still...to me depicting the nature of good..no big fanfare needed..yet still, and always there...thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

your syllable count matches what you set out to use
good use of alliteration
good consonance of long A sounds in fake fables fade and of long O sounds in glows whole - good consonance of L sounds in that phrase too
Brooke

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

I enjoyed seeing you start to play with words and their sounds here - I think your poetry skills are developing quite quickly as this is a marked improvement on other more abrasive pieces.

Steve

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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Comment from justatuna

Excellent

I read this several times. The puncuation throws me a bit, but I'm no expert. You convey a message that strikes home with me and I don't know why. Although this was choppy, it flowed because of your alliteration.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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Comment from Allison78

Excellent

This is such a very interesting poem you have written. Very thought provoking. I especially like reading the third and fifth lines. Well done!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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Comment from AnonymousWisdom

Excellent

Perfect 5-7-5-7-7 syllable count.
You don't need the comma after "dark" in the first line.
Liked the assonance of the last line.
Good topic.
Great job and thanks for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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Comment from MM lives on :)

Excellent

Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast. <- excellent alliteration and a poem of pure wisdom willowing upon my wholesome mind..,well done

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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Comment from Mai Mai

Excellent

This is an interesting piece. It gives us reason to pause and reflect. It also provides a bit of inspiration. Good job and good luck.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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Comment from livingwords

Excellent

Beautifully written poetry. I'm not sure of the statement that fake wisdom is failing. The world seems to be overflowing with fake wisdom, more each day.
Dan :))

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Comment from marijmd

Excellent

I am always a sucker for alliteration in poetry, so of course I am rather fond of your last line:
Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2013

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