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Comment from TruthWriter
A poem about wisdom....don't find too many of these around....next time you might want to expand more but thats just a suggestion i enjoyed it nonetheless....we csn always improve on something...thank you for sharing this one on the site.
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A poem about wisdom....don't find too many of these around....next time you might want to expand more but thats just a suggestion i enjoyed it nonetheless....we csn always improve on something...thank you for sharing this one on the site.
Comment Written 15-May-2006
Comment from DesertLizzie
Another excellent example of the Tanka. This one is as exceptional as the last. You have quite mastered the art. Very nicely done.
Lizzie
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Another excellent example of the Tanka. This one is as exceptional as the last. You have quite mastered the art. Very nicely done.
Lizzie
Comment Written 15-May-2006
Comment from tuskantail
This is deep, much thought put into the words to describe a fools pretence of his own wisdom. It reads smoothly and a strong message in a few words. That's clever in itself. Well done.
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This is deep, much thought put into the words to describe a fools pretence of his own wisdom. It reads smoothly and a strong message in a few words. That's clever in itself. Well done.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from MikeAG
Very nicely done... Enjoyed reading this piece--flowed nicely. Well crafted, nice beat to it. Thanks.
Keep it up!!!
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Very nicely done... Enjoyed reading this piece--flowed nicely. Well crafted, nice beat to it. Thanks.
Keep it up!!!
Comment Written 05-May-2006
Comment from jwsteele
Dark salutes wisdom - Fantastic line
Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly - I agree perfect allegory
The sun shines quiet - good
Real wisdom sparks the world sees - well done
Shines timeless, fake dies for good. - Excellent closing line
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Dark salutes wisdom - Fantastic line
Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly - I agree perfect allegory
The sun shines quiet - good
Real wisdom sparks the world sees - well done
Shines timeless, fake dies for good. - Excellent closing line
Comment Written 04-May-2006
Comment from minopavlic
As I don't read much poetry,I hope my review will be satisfying.I liked the scope,deepthness and content within your poem.I had to read it many times to fully get it's hidden message.
Yes there are many fools,,who instead of realizing their own reality,choose to believe what is offered,which as time passes them by,will undoubtedly disappoint,for,yes true wisdom is timeless.
no_obstacle
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As I don't read much poetry,I hope my review will be satisfying.I liked the scope,deepthness and content within your poem.I had to read it many times to fully get it's hidden message.
Yes there are many fools,,who instead of realizing their own reality,choose to believe what is offered,which as time passes them by,will undoubtedly disappoint,for,yes true wisdom is timeless.
no_obstacle
Comment Written 04-May-2006
Comment from ZOEY99
Wisdom is a pure and wonderful thing ,but I think that wisdom can be perceived in it's own way. I love reality shows and I am no idiot. I know they are not "reality".
Your writing seemed judemental and cold to me. But maybe that was just me.
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Wisdom is a pure and wonderful thing ,but I think that wisdom can be perceived in it's own way. I love reality shows and I am no idiot. I know they are not "reality".
Your writing seemed judemental and cold to me. But maybe that was just me.
Comment Written 04-May-2006
Comment from Babette Francis
Really good piece here. It made since without the Authors notes, but with them made the finishing touches to a very fine masterpiece. Awesome !!
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Really good piece here. It made since without the Authors notes, but with them made the finishing touches to a very fine masterpiece. Awesome !!
Comment Written 03-May-2006
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a lovely poem written in tanka style AC. I enjoyed the sentiments that you are trying to convey to the reader. I think that your work has improved recently. Well done.
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This is a lovely poem written in tanka style AC. I enjoyed the sentiments that you are trying to convey to the reader. I think that your work has improved recently. Well done.
Comment Written 03-May-2006
Comment from H. Rebecca
Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly
this is my favorite line because I love the use of the word humdrum.
Why not put a, between Sparks and The in the second to last line?
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Shades sun, soars humdrum hourly
this is my favorite line because I love the use of the word humdrum.
Why not put a, between Sparks and The in the second to last line?
Comment Written 03-May-2006
