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Comment from pbearse
Well, you have the proper count but, I bet you double checked for a 2 or 3 count.I always do because I can never remember. Words only improved the piece
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Well, you have the proper count but, I bet you double checked for a 2 or 3 count.I always do because I can never remember. Words only improved the piece
Comment Written 26-Jun-2006
Comment from Ponder
Hi Alcreator Writer,
Your poems always force the reader to ponder what you have written and their 'truth' is often hidden amongst well chosen words.
This is interesting, equating wisdom with light is an interesting analogy your words plaaced thus within the poem, are clean and sharp, the poem, thoughtful and thought provoking.
I enjoyed it.
Ponder
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
Your poems always force the reader to ponder what you have written and their 'truth' is often hidden amongst well chosen words.
This is interesting, equating wisdom with light is an interesting analogy your words plaaced thus within the poem, are clean and sharp, the poem, thoughtful and thought provoking.
I enjoyed it.
Ponder
Comment Written 26-Jun-2006
Comment from suresh kumar
Another nice little poem., Short may be, but conveys a very deep meaning and message. The line 'Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast ' in particular was very good.
Thanks for sharing.
.suresh kumar.
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Another nice little poem., Short may be, but conveys a very deep meaning and message. The line 'Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast ' in particular was very good.
Thanks for sharing.
.suresh kumar.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2006
Comment from ElaineMorgan
This is a beautiful poem. I enjoy the structure of the tanka, and you've worked it wonderfully. Excellent word choice that evokes images and feelings.
Nicely done. I really enjoyed this.
Elaine
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This is a beautiful poem. I enjoy the structure of the tanka, and you've worked it wonderfully. Excellent word choice that evokes images and feelings.
Nicely done. I really enjoyed this.
Elaine
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Dream Walker
Fantastic work! To add a few observations of an interpretational nature:
If Dark at the beginning is a personification of that which champions the darkness itself, then it makes itself an opposing Person to the Sun in this drama.
The saluting reminds me of the original meaning of a salute or salutation - a sort of wishing-well or expressing concern for the health and well-being of something. So Dark not only bows to the false light but also promotes it, nurtures it in a way as opposed to the Sunshine's glowing upon the earth.
The Dark arises for a moment to shade the light from whatever it would shine upon, but only for the hour, and then the hour is gone. The Dark's effects - the false fables, fade from complete solidity to invisibility, falling back into its source, only to faint (become invalid, ineffectual, impotent) as quickly (if not more so) than it arose in the beginning.
Thank you so much for opening this vista to our eyes. Plus it's been ages since I've seen anyone create Tanka.
Dream Walker
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Fantastic work! To add a few observations of an interpretational nature:
If Dark at the beginning is a personification of that which champions the darkness itself, then it makes itself an opposing Person to the Sun in this drama.
The saluting reminds me of the original meaning of a salute or salutation - a sort of wishing-well or expressing concern for the health and well-being of something. So Dark not only bows to the false light but also promotes it, nurtures it in a way as opposed to the Sunshine's glowing upon the earth.
The Dark arises for a moment to shade the light from whatever it would shine upon, but only for the hour, and then the hour is gone. The Dark's effects - the false fables, fade from complete solidity to invisibility, falling back into its source, only to faint (become invalid, ineffectual, impotent) as quickly (if not more so) than it arose in the beginning.
Thank you so much for opening this vista to our eyes. Plus it's been ages since I've seen anyone create Tanka.
Dream Walker
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Auteur
I enjoyed the simplicity and truth of this poem. Your use of the sun as an example of silent wisdom is very well done. Good use of alliteration in the last line. Nice work!
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I enjoyed the simplicity and truth of this poem. Your use of the sun as an example of silent wisdom is very well done. Good use of alliteration in the last line. Nice work!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from WhisperingTruth
"There is no darkness but ignorance" -William Shakespeare
You nailed this one Alcreator!
Yes..."dark salutes false light". This is a powerful piece of writing. I enjoyed reading it and savoring the message it portrays.
~Katelyn
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"There is no darkness but ignorance" -William Shakespeare
You nailed this one Alcreator!
Yes..."dark salutes false light". This is a powerful piece of writing. I enjoyed reading it and savoring the message it portrays.
~Katelyn
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from Hetty
Hi Alcreator,
A good, tight tanka with perfect structure and beautifully worded phrasing that speaks volumes, deep thinking, profound and powerful.
Excellent poem.
Hetty
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Hi Alcreator,
A good, tight tanka with perfect structure and beautifully worded phrasing that speaks volumes, deep thinking, profound and powerful.
Excellent poem.
Hetty
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from judybonin
This type of poetry is hard for me to understand, but it flowed well and was written well. nice work.
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This type of poetry is hard for me to understand, but it flowed well and was written well. nice work.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
Comment from poezija
I must admit you have a great Tanka poem here and you made it look so easy!! I have managed the odd Haiku but this is more difficult for me. Very clever choice of words. Bravo!!
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I must admit you have a great Tanka poem here and you made it look so easy!! I have managed the odd Haiku but this is more difficult for me. Very clever choice of words. Bravo!!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2006
