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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the way wisdom is the only way to the Light. i enjoyed reading it...
this is very well written, alcreator, you did a great job writing this free verse poem about the way wisdom is the only way to the Light. i enjoyed reading it...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
Comment from prayingpoet
This was pretty good, better rhythm I think Made more sense than some you have submitted. The first line was pretty good.
"Dark, salutes false light"
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
This was pretty good, better rhythm I think Made more sense than some you have submitted. The first line was pretty good.
"Dark, salutes false light"
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from honeytree
Wisdom is very important within our lives.
The darkness that can surround us allows us to sleep.
We wake up to the start of a new day.
We thank God for the start of a new day.
He know us, He loves us
Honey tree
Wisdom is very important within our lives.
The darkness that can surround us allows us to sleep.
We wake up to the start of a new day.
We thank God for the start of a new day.
He know us, He loves us
Honey tree
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Pili Pubul
I believe that you want to reveal an important deep message
The best way is to call the bread , bread, and wine, just wine.
Then the simplicity of deliver a message will be understood.
If you want to deliver poetic imagination, then you create
Poetic images like a beautiful painting. I have trouble making to much sense out of this poem ,
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
I believe that you want to reveal an important deep message
The best way is to call the bread , bread, and wine, just wine.
Then the simplicity of deliver a message will be understood.
If you want to deliver poetic imagination, then you create
Poetic images like a beautiful painting. I have trouble making to much sense out of this poem ,
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
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You very welcome. Pili
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made good use of symbolism and slliteration in this poem that contrasts real and pseudo-wisdom. Some people never learn to tell the difference!
You have made good use of symbolism and slliteration in this poem that contrasts real and pseudo-wisdom. Some people never learn to tell the difference!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Indie Skreet
this is okay but no great shakes - still paying big fanstory bucks though, so how could I pass it by? think may be paying more too :)
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
this is okay but no great shakes - still paying big fanstory bucks though, so how could I pass it by? think may be paying more too :)
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from donaldww
This poem employs alliteration well in the last line. Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast. It sounds just like a tongue twister.
Such as: Fading fake fables flummox freshly-fried flying fish
or
A skunk sat on a stump and thunk the stump stunk.
Cheers,
DW
This poem employs alliteration well in the last line. Fake fables fade, fall, faint fast. It sounds just like a tongue twister.
Such as: Fading fake fables flummox freshly-fried flying fish
or
A skunk sat on a stump and thunk the stump stunk.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing another of your thought-provoking tanka in 5-7-5-7-7 and adding your glossary. Your use of alliteration added to the intensity of your message. More cheers- Joan
Thank you for sharing another of your thought-provoking tanka in 5-7-5-7-7 and adding your glossary. Your use of alliteration added to the intensity of your message. More cheers- Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry causes the reader to pause and think.
With very few words, it speaks a powerful truth.
No photo is necessary; your words are ample.
Thank You for your creation.
This poetry causes the reader to pause and think.
With very few words, it speaks a powerful truth.
No photo is necessary; your words are ample.
Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
Comment from Selina Stambi
Great alliteration in lines two and five. They create music.
Maybe I'm just not cut out for existential poetry - is this what it is?
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
Great alliteration in lines two and five. They create music.
Maybe I'm just not cut out for existential poetry - is this what it is?
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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THANKS.