Comment from Teeanna

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this poem. It just enough gore with intensity and your hanging on waiting to see how it end and the ends got a little dark humor twist, I love it.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020

Thank you, Teeanna

Comment from DeboraDyess

Excellent

Oh my word! That was amazing.
I was laughing by the end of the second line.
I'm writing a children's zombie book right now and as I read, I had that in mind. It made it even more fun!
Congrats on the win. I think you nailed it.
Blessings and health to you and yours,
Deb

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020

Thank you, Deb, for the great review. I see you?ve promoted the book for FS readers, I will give it a look. Bill

Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit

Excellent

There's nothing subtle about the horror in this, it is very explicit, but well described. I like how the story unfolds, without telling the whole thing which is another trait of horror writing

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2020

Thanks, TBW, for giving this a look.

Comment from RPSaxena

Excellent

Hello Bill Schott,
It's a MARVELOUS piece of poetry meeting the desired norms, having IMPRESSIVE phraseology, captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and TRANSPARENTLY depicting its theme.
The last line of the last Stanza is particularly noteworthy.
'There is no need of any star, for you are already a SUPER STAR':
CONTEST WINNER!
CONGRATULATIONS!!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Wow! I am speechless at this point. Thank you for the fantastic review.

reply by RPSaxena on 24-Apr-2020

Bill Schott, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

First congrats for the first place, this was a very good entry. Your ending is hilarious.
Kicked the table with the phone;
it drops, I hear a dial tone;
then I hear my captor shout,
"There's no need to order out!"

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thanks, Iza.

Comment from sunnilicious

Excellent

Colorful poetic story. Really graphic details. It read like a movie scene and made me want to watch Texas Chainsaw Massacre again. The ending was a complete suprise. Nice work.

Congratulations on bringing home the win!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thank you very much, sunnilicious

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

Congratulations on winning the contest! I have enjoyed reading this horror poem. It is entertaining and a fun read. Thanks for sharing! Excellent work! Congratulations again, my friend!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thanks, Raul

reply by Raul1 on 22-Apr-2020

You're welcome, my friend!

Comment from Ogden

Excellent

Congratulations on your gory poem finishing first, Bill! I have a hunch it's not an entirely true story. (Just a gut feeling.)
Don't take unnecessary chances wherever you go, and keep safe!
Don

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thank you, Don.

reply by Ogden on 22-Apr-2020

You're very welcome, Bill.
Don

Comment from Susan Larson

Exceptional

Wow! You make Shel Silverstein look like an amateur with his "Someone Ate the Baby" and "I'm Being Eaten by a Boa Constrictor." Now you just have to set it to music and put it on YouTube!

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thank you, Susan, for the terrific review and humbling comparison. Bill

Comment from Lance S. Loria

Excellent

Plenty of finger foods it seems. LoL. Nice flow and rhyme. Adding the humor made it more enjoyable. Good luck. No edits or adjustments necessary.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2020

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020

Thanks, Lance

reply by Lance S. Loria on 22-Apr-2020

Ok