The Corona saga
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Return on investment"to keep my sanity in time of pandemic
8 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You got it right when you say that it spread to New York and now thye are in a decrease of the virus. I am so glad to hear that; but there are other states which are on an increase. Texas and California and every state out there, we are praying this will soon end.
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You got it right when you say that it spread to New York and now thye are in a decrease of the virus. I am so glad to hear that; but there are other states which are on an increase. Texas and California and every state out there, we are praying this will soon end.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Devilishly clever dark humor throughout. Masterful personification of Coronella with her taste for sushi, etc. I'm with you re lockdown--I remain defiantly unconfined and unmasked (utterly useless, just as we were originally told; then came a reversal by way of diverting us from buying up all the medical grade masks needed by hospitals.) Enough of my rant--back to your piece, well and wryly spoken. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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Devilishly clever dark humor throughout. Masterful personification of Coronella with her taste for sushi, etc. I'm with you re lockdown--I remain defiantly unconfined and unmasked (utterly useless, just as we were originally told; then came a reversal by way of diverting us from buying up all the medical grade masks needed by hospitals.) Enough of my rant--back to your piece, well and wryly spoken. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2020
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I know, and there was a very solution, just bring in the pharmacy the simple masks and redirect the one needed to the hospitals directly there.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
First of all, the picture of the closed theater says it all--a perfect picture--no words needed! You did a great job with this chapter. I like how you used bold to highlight the difference characters the virus hits. YOur theme of investments works well, too. Your last few lines sum up the urgency to find a way to defeat this virus. We muct work together and stop fighting among ourselves and playing the blame game. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
brothers and sisters, and the luck [ lack ] of
she got bored of following orders so shr [ she ]
until then, province from China. They left [ let ] Coronella loose in a wet market. I wonder if they had reached
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First of all, the picture of the closed theater says it all--a perfect picture--no words needed! You did a great job with this chapter. I like how you used bold to highlight the difference characters the virus hits. YOur theme of investments works well, too. Your last few lines sum up the urgency to find a way to defeat this virus. We muct work together and stop fighting among ourselves and playing the blame game. Thanks for sharing. Respectfully, Jan
brothers and sisters, and the luck [ lack ] of
she got bored of following orders so shr [ she ]
until then, province from China. They left [ let ] Coronella loose in a wet market. I wonder if they had reached
Comment Written 23-Apr-2020
Comment from sunnilicious
Good thoughts in your essay to make others really think about. I would advise a simple edit. A new paragraph after question marks. That is a basic in grammar. Nice story :)
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Good thoughts in your essay to make others really think about. I would advise a simple edit. A new paragraph after question marks. That is a basic in grammar. Nice story :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from BeasPeas
I think you are totally on the right track with your story. Get rid of the dead wood--the oldies, the infirm and those who are not productive. Why? Because the world is at its top numbers of humans on the planet. All of our ecological problems are the result of world overpopulation, especially in China and India. And you have said it all with humor. Truth in jest?
There is a typo here: "she got bored of following orders so shr (she)"
Marilyn
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I think you are totally on the right track with your story. Get rid of the dead wood--the oldies, the infirm and those who are not productive. Why? Because the world is at its top numbers of humans on the planet. All of our ecological problems are the result of world overpopulation, especially in China and India. And you have said it all with humor. Truth in jest?
There is a typo here: "she got bored of following orders so shr (she)"
Marilyn
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Actually, I liked the particular view on the Pandemic, and thought it quite funny. The antics of Miss Coronella, her jumps around the world to speed the disease are not to far from the facts.
But: quite a lot of flaws found in this story. here they come:
1. ...and if there is a couple... not it's
2. and the lack of fresh air... not the luck
3.... so she started her own experiment (look through the whole piece to keep the same tense)
4. 12-year-old child.
5.....This game of hers...better: "her game..."
6. ...So she jumped to Italy
7.....and thought: "I will be safe...
Still, I like the chapter and give it five stars.
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Actually, I liked the particular view on the Pandemic, and thought it quite funny. The antics of Miss Coronella, her jumps around the world to speed the disease are not to far from the facts.
But: quite a lot of flaws found in this story. here they come:
1. ...and if there is a couple... not it's
2. and the lack of fresh air... not the luck
3.... so she started her own experiment (look through the whole piece to keep the same tense)
4. 12-year-old child.
5.....This game of hers...better: "her game..."
6. ...So she jumped to Italy
7.....and thought: "I will be safe...
Still, I like the chapter and give it five stars.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2020
Comment from lyenochka
I did get your humor, Iza. I liked your different culinary reasons for Coronella's travels. The US apparently, doesn't have any famous foods other than hamburgers. Lol. Sad how terribly it has affected so many lives
Unfortunately, the Swedish model would not have worked here.
"they left them be themselves." (either: "they let them be themselves" -or- "they left them to be themselves."
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I did get your humor, Iza. I liked your different culinary reasons for Coronella's travels. The US apparently, doesn't have any famous foods other than hamburgers. Lol. Sad how terribly it has affected so many lives
Unfortunately, the Swedish model would not have worked here.
"they left them be themselves." (either: "they let them be themselves" -or- "they left them to be themselves."
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your suggestions I changed, you are right it sounds better.
Comment from royowen
I think whatever we try to predict, I think that we will not be able to guess Dear Iza, we have really no idea where we will go from here, and I do know that we will suffer some sort of recession. Beautifully written Iza, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I think whatever we try to predict, I think that we will not be able to guess Dear Iza, we have really no idea where we will go from here, and I do know that we will suffer some sort of recession. Beautifully written Iza, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for your review.
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