Dear diary
Getting to know her better11 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written diary entries about the confusion of a love that gives different signs and you cannot make out what her message is and you try to find out what as he feels.
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A very well-written diary entries about the confusion of a love that gives different signs and you cannot make out what her message is and you try to find out what as he feels.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2020
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Dear diary
by Sergeant Floyd
Hello my friend,
I'm sorry, this poem is a little creepy lol I'm sure you don't mean it that way. It's interesting and unique. Good job ð???
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Dear diary
by Sergeant Floyd
Hello my friend,
I'm sorry, this poem is a little creepy lol I'm sure you don't mean it that way. It's interesting and unique. Good job ð???
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
Comment from June Sargent
What can I say about a poem that cuts through the silly cliches to give us genuine feelings. Not just looking at a leaf, but through it...not to dry the tears, but to cry them. Well said.
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What can I say about a poem that cuts through the silly cliches to give us genuine feelings. Not just looking at a leaf, but through it...not to dry the tears, but to cry them. Well said.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
Comment from LisaMay
I like this poem of seeking more understanding of the beloved, and wanting to be more understood and romantically included in return. While sneakily looking at someone's diary is a hanging offence, it does reveal the inner life of the writer and their motivations. The poem's words hint at obsession, but not in an evil way, more like wanting a closer empathy.
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I like this poem of seeking more understanding of the beloved, and wanting to be more understood and romantically included in return. While sneakily looking at someone's diary is a hanging offence, it does reveal the inner life of the writer and their motivations. The poem's words hint at obsession, but not in an evil way, more like wanting a closer empathy.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello Sergeant Floyd,
This is a very lovely romantic poem with some very creative sensual words. I love how you use beautiful words to get to know her better. This is a an amazing line, "Why your lips have more flavor than brandy.
I could get drunk on apricot brandy?" The title is so fitting for your poem.
Alos, this is a delightful line, "I don't care if I'm poem or prose,
just read me all the same." The last line is the best line though. Nice work, Floyd. Thanks. Happy writing:-) Stay safe.
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Hello Sergeant Floyd,
This is a very lovely romantic poem with some very creative sensual words. I love how you use beautiful words to get to know her better. This is a an amazing line, "Why your lips have more flavor than brandy.
I could get drunk on apricot brandy?" The title is so fitting for your poem.
Alos, this is a delightful line, "I don't care if I'm poem or prose,
just read me all the same." The last line is the best line though. Nice work, Floyd. Thanks. Happy writing:-) Stay safe.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
Wow!!! This is one good poem!!! I really liked your word choice, and how descriptive you were. I loved you poem so much, I read it multiple times. Once again, I really enjoyed you poem!!!
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Wow!!! This is one good poem!!! I really liked your word choice, and how descriptive you were. I loved you poem so much, I read it multiple times. Once again, I really enjoyed you poem!!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from royowen
I've often wondered how God manages to know us inside and out, and yet allow us the sovereignty of self will, even though we are all conditioned and manipulated to think in a biased way. It takes a lot to change our collective minds. And yet this is what this fabulous poem is all about, if we could do what you say, would we allow self determination? A wonderful thought on your part. Great write, blessing, Roy
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I've often wondered how God manages to know us inside and out, and yet allow us the sovereignty of self will, even though we are all conditioned and manipulated to think in a biased way. It takes a lot to change our collective minds. And yet this is what this fabulous poem is all about, if we could do what you say, would we allow self determination? A wonderful thought on your part. Great write, blessing, Roy
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Aaaaah... once again romance with a touch of soft humor to coax the heart into beating... thanx so much for sharing that wiley and wonderful pen of yours, Sergeant!! ;)
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Aaaaah... once again romance with a touch of soft humor to coax the heart into beating... thanx so much for sharing that wiley and wonderful pen of yours, Sergeant!! ;)
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Interesting concept _ I want to read your diary not to dry your tears but cry them. This is so beautiful, thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Interesting concept _ I want to read your diary not to dry your tears but cry them. This is so beautiful, thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
Comment from pome lover
If these are all your words - which I assume they must be, this is really some poem! Different, beautiful, meaningful. Also, full of feeling and desire to be close to the object of his affection.
Very good.
pome lover
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If these are all your words - which I assume they must be, this is really some poem! Different, beautiful, meaningful. Also, full of feeling and desire to be close to the object of his affection.
Very good.
pome lover
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020