Get Back to Life
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Comment from LisaMay
I like your poem very much - an honest account of how it's been for you in this time of enforced staying at home, where we miss certain activities, get pissed off about things, and find other strengths. Let's hope we DO remember these lessons.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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I like your poem very much - an honest account of how it's been for you in this time of enforced staying at home, where we miss certain activities, get pissed off about things, and find other strengths. Let's hope we DO remember these lessons.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your insightful comments. Stay safe and well.
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a cool poem that captures the current dilemma of sheltering in place and realizing how much we really miss our liberty to move about freely. I never missed having an A here.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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This is a cool poem that captures the current dilemma of sheltering in place and realizing how much we really miss our liberty to move about freely. I never missed having an A here.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you for this nice review...I for one can't wait for it to be over. Thanks again and stay safe. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
A fine entry for the Life Without The Letter A writing prompt contest. I like your unique style and cleverness. It's hard to write without the letter A. Good job ð??? good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Hello my friend
A fine entry for the Life Without The Letter A writing prompt contest. I like your unique style and cleverness. It's hard to write without the letter A. Good job ð??? good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2020
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Thank you so much for this great review. :)
Comment from AprilViolet
I love this poem! I can't believe you were able to write such a clever poem without the use of the letter "A". That seems really hard to me so bravo! Six stars! You deserve them!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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I love this poem! I can't believe you were able to write such a clever poem without the use of the letter "A". That seems really hard to me so bravo! Six stars! You deserve them!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you for the 6 wonderful stars.....you are seventh! :)
Comment from A Little Bird
Congratulations on this enjoyable read! Thankfully I'm an introvert who lives alone, so this pandemic has barely altered my routine and isn't much impacting on my mental health. Stay safe! Good luck with the competition!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Congratulations on this enjoyable read! Thankfully I'm an introvert who lives alone, so this pandemic has barely altered my routine and isn't much impacting on my mental health. Stay safe! Good luck with the competition!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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I'm glad you are safe and not going crazy. Thank you so much for reading. :)
Comment from Anya Trofimova
I really like the rhyme scheme and meter of this poem - it feels natural and gives this piece an engaging rhythm. Your words are incredibly topical and I am sure that many can relate to them. Very well done! Just a small note, however. You do use the letter 'a' several time. Possibly just tweak these... 'the feelings *a*nd the smells', 'in its rhythm *a*nd it's (this should be its not it's, which means it is) groove', 'We'll fight *a*nd soon come out on top, with *a* strength we never knew.' I would just change the 'and' to &, and in the last line just delete the 'a' so that it reads 'with strength we never knew'. Also, I would recommend changing 'I've forgotten' to 'I forget', which fits in better with the meter of the line. Possibly also consider slightly tweaking the lines 'I'm tired of the food I cook,
I don't cook very well' to avoid the repetition of 'cook'. Maybe something like 'I don't do it very well' would work. Otherwise, very well done!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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I really like the rhyme scheme and meter of this poem - it feels natural and gives this piece an engaging rhythm. Your words are incredibly topical and I am sure that many can relate to them. Very well done! Just a small note, however. You do use the letter 'a' several time. Possibly just tweak these... 'the feelings *a*nd the smells', 'in its rhythm *a*nd it's (this should be its not it's, which means it is) groove', 'We'll fight *a*nd soon come out on top, with *a* strength we never knew.' I would just change the 'and' to &, and in the last line just delete the 'a' so that it reads 'with strength we never knew'. Also, I would recommend changing 'I've forgotten' to 'I forget', which fits in better with the meter of the line. Possibly also consider slightly tweaking the lines 'I'm tired of the food I cook,
I don't cook very well' to avoid the repetition of 'cook'. Maybe something like 'I don't do it very well' would work. Otherwise, very well done!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Wow! You saved my poem. I can't believe how many A's I had in there. I also appreciate your other tips and made the changes. Thank you so much.
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
Wow...This poetry is really relevant to current times that mankind is facing. The line: "The things we never knew we'd miss" really struck me....Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Wow...This poetry is really relevant to current times that mankind is facing. The line: "The things we never knew we'd miss" really struck me....Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you. I realize now that I had the letter A throughout the poem, don't know how I missed them! Its fixed so maybe you'd like to read it again. I'd appreciate your imput.
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Your welcome.... would love to read it again
Comment from bob cullen
This certainly is one of the better entries. It has humour, rhyme and it flows like good poetry should. I too am in the contest and I wish you well. I'd be surprised if you don't finish in the top three. I didn't realise how difficult it would be to write an entire poem without using A
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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This certainly is one of the better entries. It has humour, rhyme and it flows like good poetry should. I too am in the contest and I wish you well. I'd be surprised if you don't finish in the top three. I didn't realise how difficult it would be to write an entire poem without using A
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I really appreciate it! :)
Comment from S.Conner
This piece really captures the frustrations of our modern day and the hope that we all strive for. I feel that the piece is very relatable to all walks of life.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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This piece really captures the frustrations of our modern day and the hope that we all strive for. I feel that the piece is very relatable to all walks of life.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your kind review.
