Poetic Treasures & Dreams
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Elements of Spring"na-po-wri-mo contest
9 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the sense of spring here with the rainfall, the birds and winds with a sense of change within your words, the big shift from winter to spring, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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You brought the sense of spring here with the rainfall, the birds and winds with a sense of change within your words, the big shift from winter to spring, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your compliments and review, Love, Donna x
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty line poem about the strange weather we experience lately. We can not control the weather or change it, the only thing we can do is believe we will be safe when it is all over.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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A very well-written twenty line poem about the strange weather we experience lately. We can not control the weather or change it, the only thing we can do is believe we will be safe when it is all over.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Sandra, Thank you for your compliment and review. Dove
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a really lovely poem. You have made excellent use of personification to describe how winter clings to life as spring is coming to have its turn.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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This is a really lovely poem. You have made excellent use of personification to describe how winter clings to life as spring is coming to have its turn.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Janice, Thank you for your compliments and review. Dove
Comment from Marilyn Lou Berry
Surely one of the best poems about the end of winter head-on meeting the beginning of spring. The words flow gracefully. It paints a beautiful mix of the two seasons in color, in audio... It is so well written that I can imagine myself in such a place of experiencing it as I read. Wow
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Surely one of the best poems about the end of winter head-on meeting the beginning of spring. The words flow gracefully. It paints a beautiful mix of the two seasons in color, in audio... It is so well written that I can imagine myself in such a place of experiencing it as I read. Wow
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Marilyn Lou, Thanks for your "exceptional" rating. and your compliments. Dove
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Dove, I like the springy colors. Your rhymes are great, too. Your words create great imagery of spring wakening. The art you paired your well-chosen words with is fitting. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Dove, I like the springy colors. Your rhymes are great, too. Your words create great imagery of spring wakening. The art you paired your well-chosen words with is fitting. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Jan, Thank you for your review and compliments. Dove
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent 20 line entry in this contest, the rhyming aabb with some near rhyme in the aabb stanzas is good, the theme is great and the language good and with fluidity, makes it a good entry, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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This is an excellent 20 line entry in this contest, the rhyming aabb with some near rhyme in the aabb stanzas is good, the theme is great and the language good and with fluidity, makes it a good entry, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Dear Roy, thank you for your compliments and review. Blessings, Dove
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Well done
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I think this is a really descriptive piece, and some of the language is well chosen and really helps to create an atmosphere. I'm not sure about the line - Thunder claps overhead - I stumbled a bit reading it, I think mostly as the rhyme isn't consistent in this verse, as it is elsewhere. This may just be how I'm reading it.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I think this is a really descriptive piece, and some of the language is well chosen and really helps to create an atmosphere. I'm not sure about the line - Thunder claps overhead - I stumbled a bit reading it, I think mostly as the rhyme isn't consistent in this verse, as it is elsewhere. This may just be how I'm reading it.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Dear Whodunnit, Thank you for your review and compliment. I couldn't really think of a rhyme on the 3rd verse that begins with "thunder claps..." That's just how the poem came out of me. Dove
Comment from Saria/Shreyamsi
It's lovely and always calming to read compositions on mother Earth..... The author really is to be appreciated for the perfect cycle he/she pen down and highlighting probably the best elements of spring....
A quick tip: The tittle of the poetry brings out a lot....
Wonderful work!!!
-Shreyamsi
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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It's lovely and always calming to read compositions on mother Earth..... The author really is to be appreciated for the perfect cycle he/she pen down and highlighting probably the best elements of spring....
A quick tip: The tittle of the poetry brings out a lot....
Wonderful work!!!
-Shreyamsi
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Dear Shreyamsi, Thank you for your compliments and review. Could you give me some more information on your "quick tip?" Dove
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"A poetry- is what beyond"
This is well quoted by Robert Frost....This "beyond" this idea is something you want to let the reader ponder but you do want to give some hint to the reader that would bring out the "hidden meaning" of the poetry....this is something that "I feel" is lacking..... probably just my perspective....
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"A poetry- is what beyond"
This is well quoted by Robert Frost....This "beyond" this idea is something you want to let the reader ponder but you do want to give some hint to the reader that would bring out the "hidden meaning" of the poetry....this is something that "I feel" is lacking..... probably just my perspective....
Comment from Bill Pinder
I enjoyed reading this poem that is full of images, sights and sounds that are well expressed. I like the calming feeling of nature expressed through these words. Bill
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed reading this poem that is full of images, sights and sounds that are well expressed. I like the calming feeling of nature expressed through these words. Bill
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Dear Bill, Thank you for your compliments and review, Dove