Part of the Family
For some, this is all so hard to understand...18 total reviews
Comment from J.R. Preston
Very well written and way to tell a whole story in 100 words. It was a brief story but the little twist surprised me at the end, I loved it! And congrats on getting third for it!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Very well written and way to tell a whole story in 100 words. It was a brief story but the little twist surprised me at the end, I loved it! And congrats on getting third for it!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Thanx for the review, J.R. -- good to hear from you again, sir! :) Here's wishing you a wonderful remainder of the week out there - take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from bob cullen
Poor Danny Doggie. I really admire writers who can complete an entire story in so few words. You've identified your characters, set the scene and concluded your story. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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Poor Danny Doggie. I really admire writers who can complete an entire story in so few words. You've identified your characters, set the scene and concluded your story. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2020
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LOL!! Yeah, poor Danny! ;) Thanx for the review, bob - good to hear from you, sir! Yvette
Comment from Joseph Registrato
Stories written from the point of view of the dog, the hot dog, the door knob, the raindrop, the bar, exercises in some sort mental game whereby humans like to think we can imagine what's going on in the (head?) of all of these various creatures/inanimate objects. You've got to have a real imagination for it.
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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Stories written from the point of view of the dog, the hot dog, the door knob, the raindrop, the bar, exercises in some sort mental game whereby humans like to think we can imagine what's going on in the (head?) of all of these various creatures/inanimate objects. You've got to have a real imagination for it.
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Comment Written 18-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2020
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Comment from Raul1
This poem is well written. I like the story of Danny. I think it is interesting putting the family altogether. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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This poem is well written. I like the story of Danny. I think it is interesting putting the family altogether. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Thank you for your review! :)
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
The pandemic affects humans and animals alike. It is a sad state of affairs when animals have to suffer about something they do not understand. Good contest entry!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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The pandemic affects humans and animals alike. It is a sad state of affairs when animals have to suffer about something they do not understand. Good contest entry!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this fun little 'jaunt' for Danny... lol! Thank you for your review!!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Very nice writing, I was not expecting the twist for some reason, but you got me. I suppose the dog would know the change when everyone was home and not getting the usual attention! Nice work!
Drew
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Very nice writing, I was not expecting the twist for some reason, but you got me. I suppose the dog would know the change when everyone was home and not getting the usual attention! Nice work!
Drew
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2020
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Good to 'hear' you smile!! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I like this. The way you started this made Danny sound like a human being. Well played! I'm sure that he is a great dog and attentively watched the game receiving attention when he could get it. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I like this. The way you started this made Danny sound like a human being. Well played! I'm sure that he is a great dog and attentively watched the game receiving attention when he could get it. Thanks for sharing this well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Good to 'hear' you smile!! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Kathleen S.
That's a very cute and adorable story, with a plot twist that I didn't expect. It's quick witted and creative. Well done. The picture, you chosen to accompany your story, is perfect for it.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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That's a very cute and adorable story, with a plot twist that I didn't expect. It's quick witted and creative. Well done. The picture, you chosen to accompany your story, is perfect for it.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Good to 'hear' you smile!! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Bichon
I loved the little twist at the end of this one. I really thought Danny was a person for the first half. Great job at concealing the ending and writing a great story!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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I loved the little twist at the end of this one. I really thought Danny was a person for the first half. Great job at concealing the ending and writing a great story!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Good to 'hear' you smile!! Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great image and game, too.
-We have played it a lot
over the years, and it
gets competitive:)
-A good story, as well.
-You set up the scene with
everyone home, but poor
Danny was ignored.
-Things just weren't the same,
and then there was that
weird shout everyone was
excited about!
-A good ending, and
Danny is happy:)
-Good luck in the contest;
I enjoyed your story.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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-Great image and game, too.
-We have played it a lot
over the years, and it
gets competitive:)
-A good story, as well.
-You set up the scene with
everyone home, but poor
Danny was ignored.
-Things just weren't the same,
and then there was that
weird shout everyone was
excited about!
-A good ending, and
Danny is happy:)
-Good luck in the contest;
I enjoyed your story.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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So, good to 'hear' you smile!! Thank you for your review.
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You are quite welcome😊
