Grandma Showed...
A fiction story.16 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
Good job with the 100-word dash flash fiction. I think the story is clever and for such a short story you managed to have a beginning, a middle, and an end... well done~
Stay safe, stay home, save lives
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Hello, my friend,
Good job with the 100-word dash flash fiction. I think the story is clever and for such a short story you managed to have a beginning, a middle, and an end... well done~
Stay safe, stay home, save lives
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you, my friend!
Comment from samandlancelot
Excellent flash fiction. All those years Grandma hid her true identity. I love the surprise ending. Shirley Temple was such a cute girl and accomplished a lot in her life.
Excellent entry for the contest.
Patricia
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Excellent flash fiction. All those years Grandma hid her true identity. I love the surprise ending. Shirley Temple was such a cute girl and accomplished a lot in her life.
Excellent entry for the contest.
Patricia
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
Lovely story! And told in a hundred words, my compliments!
My Mom (born in 1905) told me similar stories, her favorite star? Shirley Temple!. My mother was a ballet dancer until she married. She also learned me, my sister and brother, how to dance the then popular jitterbug!
I enjoyed reading your story.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Lovely story! And told in a hundred words, my compliments!
My Mom (born in 1905) told me similar stories, her favorite star? Shirley Temple!. My mother was a ballet dancer until she married. She also learned me, my sister and brother, how to dance the then popular jitterbug!
I enjoyed reading your story.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you! Good to hear your story.
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Welcome!
Comment from Anya Trofimova
Well done! This is skilfully constructed in a way that creates a strong nostalgic atmosphere. You are able to create likeable and believable characters in so few words.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Well done! This is skilfully constructed in a way that creates a strong nostalgic atmosphere. You are able to create likeable and believable characters in so few words.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How fun!! A good little family story for the Dash - good luck at the poll! ;)
what it was back --> what it was like back
Glorious as it sounds. --> [not a complete sentence... perhaps try] It sounded glorious.
Interesting to know her history. --> [not a complete sentence... perhaps try] It was interesting to know her history.
how did she get so lucky. --> how she got so lucky.
I said. --> I asked.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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How fun!! A good little family story for the Dash - good luck at the poll! ;)
what it was back --> what it was like back
Glorious as it sounds. --> [not a complete sentence... perhaps try] It sounded glorious.
Interesting to know her history. --> [not a complete sentence... perhaps try] It was interesting to know her history.
how did she get so lucky. --> how she got so lucky.
I said. --> I asked.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you! I have fixed all the mistakes you told me to do. You can check it again. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and well written story.
-I like how you make it seem real.
-I can imagine it actually happening
that someone's grandma did know
these early child actors.
-I like the ending, too.
-One small thing:wandered [wondered]
-Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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-Nice image and well written story.
-I like how you make it seem real.
-I can imagine it actually happening
that someone's grandma did know
these early child actors.
-I like the ending, too.
-One small thing:wandered [wondered]
-Good luck in the contest.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thank you! I fixed the mistake. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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You are quite welcome.
