Wheel of Misfortune
Where are they now?15 total reviews
Comment from George Santhosh
I loved this piece!! To be honest, initially, I was put off because I didn't know anything about the movie and you seemed to explore it in too much detail (I understand the relevance of the files though.
Loved your personal file collection, but the test was the best. I vaguely remember a questionnaire piece like this before (It might actually be another piece by you, I don't remember). Please do write similar questionnaire pieces. They're humorous, but pretty accurate too surprisingly. Would love to read more :)
George
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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I loved this piece!! To be honest, initially, I was put off because I didn't know anything about the movie and you seemed to explore it in too much detail (I understand the relevance of the files though.
Loved your personal file collection, but the test was the best. I vaguely remember a questionnaire piece like this before (It might actually be another piece by you, I don't remember). Please do write similar questionnaire pieces. They're humorous, but pretty accurate too surprisingly. Would love to read more :)
George
Comment Written 07-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the lovely ssssssurprise! And to top it off, you are reviewer #15--the magic number that "earns" at virtual blue "recognition" ribbon. Thanks for sticking with this--that movie is hilarious and has great music--all written and performed by the ensemble. Regarding another questionnaire piece--I have another such listed right now--perhaps you read it the first time, months ago. (WORST PROPOSAL EVER--ring a bell?)
Comment from lancellot
Funny stuff. Oh, the trials of love and love lost is full of heartbreak, hopes, pain and yes, some regrets. But, it is a game worth playing for that one chance at winning the love lottery. I try not to think of them all, and keeping a file... no way.
Great writing.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Funny stuff. Oh, the trials of love and love lost is full of heartbreak, hopes, pain and yes, some regrets. But, it is a game worth playing for that one chance at winning the love lottery. I try not to think of them all, and keeping a file... no way.
Great writing.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thank you for reciprocating my visit to your place of amusement featuring a similar theme. (Actually, the physical file has long since been flushed--after having been torn to shreds. Stop by anytime. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from equestrik
Like most of your writes this is a bit disjointed but super fun and interesting. I like that this one had an interactive element. We are all so governed by wanting to be in love that we do indeed fail the test.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Like most of your writes this is a bit disjointed but super fun and interesting. I like that this one had an interactive element. We are all so governed by wanting to be in love that we do indeed fail the test.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Hello again! Sorry that you failed the test, alas, as expected. Nobody's even managed a C- so far.
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
This is an interesting piece of satirical humorous fiction about the perils of seeking love, especially in one's youth, told through the lens of a rock band and some relevant lyrics. I had some such experiences when I was young, but I was very fortunate that I found a decent and loving man to marry me, later in life (who made me his wife, etc., etc.).
I found a few minor errors, and offer some the following suggestions for revisions:
and says to the leads, David and Nigel, (who, pre-Spinal Tap, ...
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and says to the leads, David and Nigel (who, pre-Spinal Tap, ...
Where are they Now file.
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Where Are They Now file. [also elsewhere in the story]
a forlorn sock sans sole-mate.
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a forlorn sock, sans sole-mate. [I would put "sans" in italics, since it's a French word]
*Also, I suggest you repeat the asterisk down at the bottom in your Notes, in case there is anyone who doesn't automatically pick up on the Meatloaf song you're quoting from.
But I think that far too often, you're right: that's the way it goes, "The Way of Love," as Cher also tells it:
"When you meet a boy
That you like a lot
And you fall in love
But he loves you not..."
Isn't that why so many of those old records went gold, or platinum? It's because they were so good at predicting the outcomes of the "Where Are They Now" files, where so many people found themselves, even then. I hope that today, you will also find yourself in a better place than before. It's best to stay away from the Wheel of Misfortune, as much as possible. God bless you!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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This is an interesting piece of satirical humorous fiction about the perils of seeking love, especially in one's youth, told through the lens of a rock band and some relevant lyrics. I had some such experiences when I was young, but I was very fortunate that I found a decent and loving man to marry me, later in life (who made me his wife, etc., etc.).
I found a few minor errors, and offer some the following suggestions for revisions:
and says to the leads, David and Nigel, (who, pre-Spinal Tap, ...
-->
and says to the leads, David and Nigel (who, pre-Spinal Tap, ...
Where are they Now file.
-->
Where Are They Now file. [also elsewhere in the story]
a forlorn sock sans sole-mate.
-->
a forlorn sock, sans sole-mate. [I would put "sans" in italics, since it's a French word]
*Also, I suggest you repeat the asterisk down at the bottom in your Notes, in case there is anyone who doesn't automatically pick up on the Meatloaf song you're quoting from.
But I think that far too often, you're right: that's the way it goes, "The Way of Love," as Cher also tells it:
"When you meet a boy
That you like a lot
And you fall in love
But he loves you not..."
Isn't that why so many of those old records went gold, or platinum? It's because they were so good at predicting the outcomes of the "Where Are They Now" files, where so many people found themselves, even then. I hope that today, you will also find yourself in a better place than before. It's best to stay away from the Wheel of Misfortune, as much as possible. God bless you!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Many thanks, Eagle Eyes--the fixes are ALL in. (I'd intended to CAP title--assumed that I had!) I am delighted that you took the time to read so carefully, not just for nits, but for content, in reaction to which you took the time to write such an eloquent and entertaining response.
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You're very welcome, Liz, and thank you for your heartwarming response to my review. I don't always get so much appreciation, but I love it!
I'm glad you found it entertaining, too. Yes, the subject of love has entertained many a weary soul (and generated billions of dollars). Just think of Billy Joel's "Scenes from an Italian Restaurant," and Paul Simon's "Fifty Ways to Leave Your Lover." Yes, love is here to stay, but not everyone can stick around!
You have a great profile picture, by the way -- beautiful smile :-)
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Thanks again for your help and for the lovely compliment on my pic!
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You're very welcome, my friend :-)
Comment from RetroStarfish
Brilliant stuff here. "... before communication climbed to the clouds" may be the best line I've read all week. Hallmark vs Hall-mockery being the second. (Full disclosure, I've only been a member of FanStory for a week.) I'm a big fan of hyphenated-run-on-but-brilliant descriptions, lists, and Meatloaf lyrics.
The only drawback was the lengthy answer to question number one. I had to read it a couple of times and it didn't flow quite as nicely or quip-fully as the rest of the oh-so-brilliant piece.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Brilliant stuff here. "... before communication climbed to the clouds" may be the best line I've read all week. Hallmark vs Hall-mockery being the second. (Full disclosure, I've only been a member of FanStory for a week.) I'm a big fan of hyphenated-run-on-but-brilliant descriptions, lists, and Meatloaf lyrics.
The only drawback was the lengthy answer to question number one. I had to read it a couple of times and it didn't flow quite as nicely or quip-fully as the rest of the oh-so-brilliant piece.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Welcome to StoryLand! This is your third visit in two days--I'm honored you see fit to stop by. I took heed of your remarks per #1--I agree it is cumbersome--I just now removed a section that I felt was superfluous and out of synch with the snappy tone. Hope to see you again soon! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
This is a largely hilarious, slightly maudlin as well and brave and touching piece with the theme: The test we only ever pass on paper.
..Love it.
My very favorite part is: 'In a whirlwind ride--like the spin-cycle of a washer--the centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry. For a time the dynamic bonds were replaced by inertia's static cling. At last, that too dissipated, and there I lay, a forlorn sock sans sole-mate."
and of that whole wonderful paragraph, my very favorite line is:
"The centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry."
That line alone is worth the price of admission and maybe could be crammed into a senryu.
You sound like a woman who knows herself extremely well and loves herself anyway...a hard fought battle and a stunning win.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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This is a largely hilarious, slightly maudlin as well and brave and touching piece with the theme: The test we only ever pass on paper.
..Love it.
My very favorite part is: 'In a whirlwind ride--like the spin-cycle of a washer--the centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry. For a time the dynamic bonds were replaced by inertia's static cling. At last, that too dissipated, and there I lay, a forlorn sock sans sole-mate."
and of that whole wonderful paragraph, my very favorite line is:
"The centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry."
That line alone is worth the price of admission and maybe could be crammed into a senryu.
You sound like a woman who knows herself extremely well and loves herself anyway...a hard fought battle and a stunning win.
Excellent.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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What a delightful ssssssurprise, Cynthia! More important to me is that you got some chuckles. I aim to amuse--delighted to learn that I hit the funny bone. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL! That was so funny, Liz, I didn't see this first time round, so I'm glad I caught it today. What fantastic questions, the answers ... I'll stick with yours. I tried and found myself floundering in the wrong, worst possible answers ever! I loved the odd sock one! LOL Honestly, Liz, this one gave me so many giggles, (from an old duck like me, that's hard to do without causing an accident!) Brilliant. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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LOL! That was so funny, Liz, I didn't see this first time round, so I'm glad I caught it today. What fantastic questions, the answers ... I'll stick with yours. I tried and found myself floundering in the wrong, worst possible answers ever! I loved the odd sock one! LOL Honestly, Liz, this one gave me so many giggles, (from an old duck like me, that's hard to do without causing an accident!) Brilliant. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 05-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020
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Thank you Sandra--So glad you stopped by. It's readers like you who justify the cost$$$ of this re-re-repromotion. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from lyenochka
You're hysterical! I loved "centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry. For a time the dynamic bonds were replaced by inertia's static cling. At last, that too dissipated, and there I lay, a forlorn sock sans sole-mate." I wouldn't dare take that test.
Seems like your posts from April and before are new to me.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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You're hysterical! I loved "centrifugal force that bound us also wrung us dry. For a time the dynamic bonds were replaced by inertia's static cling. At last, that too dissipated, and there I lay, a forlorn sock sans sole-mate." I wouldn't dare take that test.
Seems like your posts from April and before are new to me.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
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Delighted to see you! I joined mid-Jan and posted two daily for four months to get out my archive of nearly 300 pieces--so hopefully you'll have a few to grab!
Comment from Carlos' girl
omg, give this women not just six stars. give her an entire galaxy! i can't. too good!
omg. in my house at 4:00 am New Jersey time laughing uproariously at this. what must my neighbors think.
note to self: must stay out of the spin cycle and need to rent a storage bin. file cabinet too small.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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omg, give this women not just six stars. give her an entire galaxy! i can't. too good!
omg. in my house at 4:00 am New Jersey time laughing uproariously at this. what must my neighbors think.
note to self: must stay out of the spin cycle and need to rent a storage bin. file cabinet too small.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020
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What a delightful ssssssurprise! More important to me is that you did literally LOL! I aim to amuse--delighted to learn that I hit the funny bone. Stop by anytime! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
Do you really have those files? Trust me, the older you get, they'll get thrown away. Well, at least if you move every year,like I seem to do.
culling cards of hearts and flowers as soon as they had been rendered into rocks and weeds by the Break-Up Beast-- you're so clever with words. But too cynical to write for Hallmark. LOL
I also like the simile for a clothes dryer.
Love your quiz. You're right about passing in on paper, but not in life because we all mature at different rates and are forever evolving. Who wants to stay static anyway? That's boring.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Do you really have those files? Trust me, the older you get, they'll get thrown away. Well, at least if you move every year,like I seem to do.
culling cards of hearts and flowers as soon as they had been rendered into rocks and weeds by the Break-Up Beast-- you're so clever with words. But too cynical to write for Hallmark. LOL
I also like the simile for a clothes dryer.
Love your quiz. You're right about passing in on paper, but not in life because we all mature at different rates and are forever evolving. Who wants to stay static anyway? That's boring.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you Shari--So glad you stopped by! This is a promotion of an earlier release upon which I got two freebies; I spent $43 ($10 base plus 11 pumps--most of which I had to pay for). You are my second, and likely last, reader (7-10 est. HA!) Happily, having you weigh in is worth the $21.50! Cheers. LIZ
