Anger, Postponed
Sad poem13 total reviews
Comment from R. Hiland
Sometimes it's worth the effort and pain to read of someone else's pain and rage when I have more than enough of my own. This is one of those times. I won't/can't dig too deeply into this. Just admire and move on. Well done. R
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
  |
Sometimes it's worth the effort and pain to read of someone else's pain and rage when I have more than enough of my own. This is one of those times. I won't/can't dig too deeply into this. Just admire and move on. Well done. R
Comment Written 13-May-2020
reply by the author on 13-May-2020
-
Thank you very much indeed for this heartfelt review and the shining stars.
Comment from richie b
Marjon,
This is a very well written poem. I understand it is driven by deep feelings, your pen was connected to your heart. Your words captured your anger and put all readers into your world. May Christ heal your wounds.
Blessings,
Richie
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
|
Marjon,
This is a very well written poem. I understand it is driven by deep feelings, your pen was connected to your heart. Your words captured your anger and put all readers into your world. May Christ heal your wounds.
Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
-
A six stars for my anger poem. Thank you so much! Really very much appreciated.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
A poem that definitely fits the sad poem brief. It is well constructed to share your ideas and support the emotion you are trying to portray.
I wonder if the last few lines - and yell
at too red roses. - needs adapting to two red roses, or yell, too, at red roses? Grammatically I'm not sure its correct the way it is.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
 |
A poem that definitely fits the sad poem brief. It is well constructed to share your ideas and support the emotion you are trying to portray.
I wonder if the last few lines - and yell
at too red roses. - needs adapting to two red roses, or yell, too, at red roses? Grammatically I'm not sure its correct the way it is.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2020
-
Boy Whodunnit: I meant too red roses. Like screaming red, too much to bear.
I don't know either about the grammatical correctness, but sometimes I take the liberty of using my poetical license, and, for the sake of the poem, leave it incorrect.
Thank you so much for your review.
-
Ah, yes, now you've explained it it makes perfect sense, and fits with the poem, not sure why i didn't see that before.
-
Thanks for coming back to me, Boy Whodunnit. I'm glad you saw what I meant to say.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Sadness is part of life. Even Jesus was sad when His friend Lazarus died. He wept John 11:35. Weeping for a time is good and healthy, but we must get up and begin living again.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
|
Sadness is part of life. Even Jesus was sad when His friend Lazarus died. He wept John 11:35. Weeping for a time is good and healthy, but we must get up and begin living again.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
-
Rebecca, thank you. Yes, he died in 2018. I got over it. One never forgets, but can live with the loss. This poem was written when he was still ill and acted strange and unreal at times. I saw the poem again the other day and did some editing. Thought it suitable for the sadness assignment.
-
You did a really good job writing and editing this.
-
Thanks.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your vividly descriptive, heart-wrenching poem conveys a powerful message about Alzheimer's, how it victimizes not just the patient. I can only imagine the flurry of mixed emotions it can trigger!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
Your vividly descriptive, heart-wrenching poem conveys a powerful message about Alzheimer's, how it victimizes not just the patient. I can only imagine the flurry of mixed emotions it can trigger!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Janice, thank you very much for your understanding review.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello mystery writer. This is a very well written poem that is a real story. You used strong descriptors and writing to make clear the feelings and frustrations. It is so well written, I felt I could sense the reason before reading your notes.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
Hello mystery writer. This is a very well written poem that is a real story. You used strong descriptors and writing to make clear the feelings and frustrations. It is so well written, I felt I could sense the reason before reading your notes.
Robert
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Robert, thank you very much for your kind review.
-
You're welcome.
-
:))
Comment from Kathleen S.
I can feel the terrible sadness and anger provoked by the disease that has grabbed a hold of your loved one. Wow, the poem really shakes the reader and lets them know that it isn't okay. You want your husband to fight it, but he sits there instead. Good job in saying what must be said.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
I can feel the terrible sadness and anger provoked by the disease that has grabbed a hold of your loved one. Wow, the poem really shakes the reader and lets them know that it isn't okay. You want your husband to fight it, but he sits there instead. Good job in saying what must be said.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Kathleen, thank you very much for your understanding review.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Wife,
What a dear you are. What a brave and loving and adorable dear. Bless you.
As to the poem -- Brava!
To date, I have read several entries in this sad poem contest - and yours is far and away my favorite. It is deep and real and powerful. It puts the reader into the lives of HUMANS who walk and breathe. It's not merely a collection of words expressing some thoughts.
I think you've done a great job -- my favorite lines are below - these border on genius, in my opinion:
'the lines of our script changed
overnight.'
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
Dear Mystery Wife,
What a dear you are. What a brave and loving and adorable dear. Bless you.
As to the poem -- Brava!
To date, I have read several entries in this sad poem contest - and yours is far and away my favorite. It is deep and real and powerful. It puts the reader into the lives of HUMANS who walk and breathe. It's not merely a collection of words expressing some thoughts.
I think you've done a great job -- my favorite lines are below - these border on genius, in my opinion:
'the lines of our script changed
overnight.'
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Why, thank you very, very much for this feeling review. It makes me feel understood. Of course, I hope to win the contest, but, if not, this review means a lot to me.
-
YAY! I meant every word. Thank you!
-
I know you meant every word. That's why I wanted to reward that.
-
Very. Very. True. *smile*
-
Thanks.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sad Poems writing prompt.
This sad verse is all the sadder because it's true.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
I think this is a good entry for the Sad Poems writing prompt.
This sad verse is all the sadder because it's true.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Sharon, thank you very much.
Comment from Praveen J.
Wow....this is intense Marjon. I like both the format and the choice of hard hitting words. I hope none of it is real ? One thing though - you should remove your name from the bottom of the poem. It being a contest entry, you don't want to be disqualified. Good luck :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
|
Wow....this is intense Marjon. I like both the format and the choice of hard hitting words. I hope none of it is real ? One thing though - you should remove your name from the bottom of the poem. It being a contest entry, you don't want to be disqualified. Good luck :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
-
Praveen, thank you. Yes, you are right. It escaped me, I'll remove my name. Sorry to say, it was (he died in 2018) all very real.
-
Sigh.....I'm so sorry for your loss. Writing is a good way to cope, survive and eventually thrive. Keep the faith Marjon :))
-
I deleted my name. Thanks for warning me. You are now not supposed to know my name.
