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Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Childish Fun"Daily 5-7-5 simplicities for April Na-Po-Wri-Mo
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Comment from Gail Denham
Truly? You're practicing burping and... Well, if that don't beat all - the inventions and games some folks resort to. Basically I'm sleeping later, staying up late r- and trying to do some writing (not very successful I might add) good job.
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Truly? You're practicing burping and... Well, if that don't beat all - the inventions and games some folks resort to. Basically I'm sleeping later, staying up late r- and trying to do some writing (not very successful I might add) good job.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2020
Comment from patcelaw
I think when we are finally free again, I am not sure many of us will ever be the same again. I want so much to be free to go to church and be in fellowship with others.
Patricia
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I think when we are finally free again, I am not sure many of us will ever be the same again. I want so much to be free to go to church and be in fellowship with others.
Patricia
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Well, Ben Franklin was purported to have said, "Fart proudly." I guess he and Shrek would have gotten along famously. Enjoyed your fun poem and I'm sure you'll find the right timing for different behaviors a the right time!
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Well, Ben Franklin was purported to have said, "Fart proudly." I guess he and Shrek would have gotten along famously. Enjoyed your fun poem and I'm sure you'll find the right timing for different behaviors a the right time!
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
Comment from poetwatch
I always knew it, LisaMay. How does that song go? Oh yeah. "Open up the window let some air into this room, get rid of this stale perfume." Don't choke while burping. :) This 5-7-5 is different but good. But, there is always a butt. :) "Stuck here inside" is 4 syllables. Fix it and it's perfect.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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I always knew it, LisaMay. How does that song go? Oh yeah. "Open up the window let some air into this room, get rid of this stale perfume." Don't choke while burping. :) This 5-7-5 is different but good. But, there is always a butt. :) "Stuck here inside" is 4 syllables. Fix it and it's perfect.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your comments. Well spotted on my negligent syllable count. I must have momentarily forgotten the stanzas are 5-7-5. I amended the first line to read: "While stuck here, inside".
Comment from CrystieCookie999
LOL. Yodeling sounds like something I need to learn sometime. Sounds like you are also finding some flatulence fantasies which are entertaining. I would ask the last question, too! Or maybe just hand the next person who visits a rock and ask them if they think it is igneous, metamorphic, or sedimentary, since that is what I am doing several hours a day, lately.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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LOL. Yodeling sounds like something I need to learn sometime. Sounds like you are also finding some flatulence fantasies which are entertaining. I would ask the last question, too! Or maybe just hand the next person who visits a rock and ask them if they think it is igneous, metamorphic, or sedimentary, since that is what I am doing several hours a day, lately.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2020
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I think I'll give Mongolian throat singing a go for my next entertainment.
What's with the rocks? Are you a geologist? (We can't have visitors here - have to stay home in our 'bubble'.)
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My mom's front yard was landscaped by my parents back around 1974 with a ring of rocks and several rock beds. I am sorting through and cleaning all the rocks in order to freshen the yard, discard splintered rocks, and find some for two other projects. Used to collect rocks, but now only have maybe 2 geodes and one calcite book end. Utah is famous for rock formations. No visitors here, either, but delivery people say hi. My uncle came to pick up some mail and might be counted as a visitor, from 6 feet away, ha ha.
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I'd love to visit Utah to see some of those stunning national parks.
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Understandable. Bryce in southern Utah is my favorite, Capitol Reef is my mom's favorite. I have not been more than 110 miles from my mother in 3 years though, due to her health. The governor closed Zions and said no one living outside the county a park is in should visit one. I am waiting for hot weather to help kill off virus stuff.
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Years ago I read a classic American book set in southeastern Utah and it made me want to see it for myself - 'Desert Solitaire' by Edward Abbey.
(We are moving into winter here. I guess that means the virus will linger longer.)
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Neat. I looked that book up. It was published the year before I was born. It looks like it discusses more of the Arches and Moab areas, which are very pretty, too. On the flip side, my classmate down the street who moved to New Zealand rarely comes back to Utah, so obviously you have gorgeous things there, too. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 suite about the boredness that make us do many strange things that we will not do under normal circumstances. At this stage I am not bored enough to turn over the house to clean up all the pieces of material droppings from the masks I am making on request.
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A very well-written 5-7-5 suite about the boredness that make us do many strange things that we will not do under normal circumstances. At this stage I am not bored enough to turn over the house to clean up all the pieces of material droppings from the masks I am making on request.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2020
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your addition to your April book is hilarious and all the more so after reading your notes, LisaMay. The image is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly and each verse could stand alone; but, when taken as one poem, it is fun and gives a good overall message of how you are feeling being in lock down. I am by myself except for Abby, my kitty, and a few kitties that eat on my back orch. I do not feel at all put up on. I find plenty to keep me occupied. Maybe some of your feeling is from the weather. Here it is spring with good weather most days. I don't see my neighbors except every few days I may see one getting their mail. Take care. Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Your addition to your April book is hilarious and all the more so after reading your notes, LisaMay. The image is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly and each verse could stand alone; but, when taken as one poem, it is fun and gives a good overall message of how you are feeling being in lock down. I am by myself except for Abby, my kitty, and a few kitties that eat on my back orch. I do not feel at all put up on. I find plenty to keep me occupied. Maybe some of your feeling is from the weather. Here it is spring with good weather most days. I don't see my neighbors except every few days I may see one getting their mail. Take care. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thanks for appreciating my humour. I have exaggerated this for effect; I find I am self sufficient with entertaining myself - mainly writing and experimental cooking, but i do wish I had an animal, or several, for company.
Comment from BeasPeas
Well, you are certainly stretching your range of possibilities, Lisa. See what being quarantined will reduce us to? Once the quarantine is over, you will be able to revert back to being a lady. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Well, you are certainly stretching your range of possibilities, Lisa. See what being quarantined will reduce us to? Once the quarantine is over, you will be able to revert back to being a lady. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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I hope I do revert, or else i will have to stay home in disgrace!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your 5-7-5 suite is well-written, creative, amusing, and delightful. Yes, we must become more and more inventive as our time of isolation grows! LOL! I love the artwork.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Your 5-7-5 suite is well-written, creative, amusing, and delightful. Yes, we must become more and more inventive as our time of isolation grows! LOL! I love the artwork.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Thanks for your remarks. I loved the unicorn as soon as i saw it.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Oh what fun! Oh what visual images! I guess the gases theme of this poem should buoy us up to new heights but I fear to be around when the bubble bursts. LOL Jerry
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Oh what fun! Oh what visual images! I guess the gases theme of this poem should buoy us up to new heights but I fear to be around when the bubble bursts. LOL Jerry
Comment Written 13-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2020
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Yes indeed - hold your nose for that one!! Thanks for your review.
